Dreaming

I see a sea in my dreams
Waving and gleaming like streams
When the sun goes up and down
Its crystal lights make me drown

Beside me the three gigantic trees 
Dancing, branches clapping with the bees
Oh yes! Looking at them happily 
Gay feeling surrounds me rapidly

Cold breeze is suddenly blowing
Far from distance there is sighing
Turning around to see what I hear
Sparkling image disturbs my firm fear

Looking down his hand's extended to me
Indeed confuse but then ask, "who is he?"
The naughty two eyes with flattered mind
Want to know what's his feeling behind

Your name is given starts with letter "M"
What ah! It is my favorite... "ehem"
Suddenly the presence goes far 
No! Not now, show me who you are?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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That Archaic Poet Avatar
September 5, 2013 at 9:35 AM
Cool piece, and I liked that it rhymed. I also noticed it was the only piece in your portfolio that did rhyme; I encourage you to write more rhyming poems. Kudos! :)
Cee Avatar
September 13, 2013 at 12:24 PM
Yes I will, I have plan to do again like this.
Posey Avatar
June 23, 2013 at 4:59 AM
I love the intent you have in writing this. Editing and rewrites will bring this entry to near perfection. and you will be all the better for it.... Love you, girl. Just know that we, here at PSoup appreciate your work. Love and hugs.... Jake
Cee Avatar
June 23, 2013 at 8:53 AM
ur right John, thank u
Mirzoev Avatar
June 8, 2013 at 10:21 AM
Very lovely poem, well done! - Alisher
Delaney Avatar
June 6, 2013 at 11:19 AM
Hi Elai You have a wonderful imagination. Keep on writing......with love, SuZ
Orozco Avatar
May 26, 2013 at 10:45 PM
Beautiful piece! Very well written. -edward
Cee Avatar
May 27, 2013 at 7:07 AM
hey Edward. Thanks
Jerden Avatar
May 21, 2013 at 7:28 PM
Like a dream... a bit incoherent, a bit confusing, in-congruent images, illogical segues. Nice. I agree with Rockman on the meter and rhyme. Cheers, Roy
Cee Avatar
May 24, 2013 at 4:56 AM
yeah. thanks Roy... plan to edit this...
A   Avatar
May 20, 2013 at 8:50 AM
wow, the crystal lights are mesmerizing and can leave a drowning effect on one. I like your poem very much Elai.... glad your dreams can reveal and give you warning signs... hope you woke up with reality... enjoyed~ Linda
Pritts Avatar
May 20, 2013 at 2:18 AM
Not bad Elai. And I thank you for your comment on my poem. But I think this one could use some improvements. For example (and I don't mean to change your poem in any way), but the second line could be something like "like streams" instead of "like a stream". I like to write in rhyme and I feel like it should have a sing song effect. Your poem had some nice imagery but the meter made me stumble as I read it. I hope this was insightful and not discouraging. Rockman
Cee Avatar
May 20, 2013 at 3:11 AM
It's ok Rockman, I appreciate your comment here thank you it helps me a lot!
Cee Avatar
May 19, 2013 at 7:58 PM
Enjoy reading...
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