Dream Fishing

Yesteryear, my great grandmom fished here.
Just a deep, breath filled, heartbeat ago,
these rocks served to mirror her prayers
that they might float as hope inside air.
These stones and her toes feel games
and sun flecked water brightly touched both.
I sense her dreams under these old trees,
imagine her offering them in acceptance. 
Real life bound her life to my greatdaddy,
a small farm and eight kids who relied on her
I'm told she fished here almost every day
for meals, I think she liked the tree shadows. 
She sent her hearts dreams to float the stream.
Her duties faced, led to my birth’s grace.




... CayCay Jennings
December 1, 2016
Contest:  River Line New - Rick Parise - 5th Place
12-line poem with 9 Syllables in each line 
used howmanysyllables.com
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Dietrich Avatar
February 27, 2017 at 5:02 PM
wow, Caycay, I knew he would like yours. I don't know if I can handle a third loss with him. Wish I could think of a way to write how he likes these river poems. Congrats, dear.
Medders Tobechi Avatar
February 21, 2017 at 10:19 AM
Very good write CayCay. Congratulations on your win.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 19, 2017 at 8:48 PM
Congrats, CayCay! Lovely sentiments!
Krampe Avatar
February 19, 2017 at 8:41 PM
Coming back with congrats!
Breedt Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 2:08 PM
Wonderful how the nostalgia sweeps in.my grandparents were dirt poor . Had no electricity , everything was candles and a coal stove where many a chicken was raised and even some lambs under. The toilet was the famous long drop and to go there you had to fight of the angry turkey with a broom.
Dietrich Avatar
December 4, 2016 at 4:17 PM
wow, he is going to love this, I just know it. I kind of think I know what he is looking for now. I do not write the style he likes, which is emotional and uniquely crafted words. I have a plain one which is the best I could do for him. It's not posted yet but you are not missing anything. Probably I will fail again. Oh my!
Krampe Avatar
December 3, 2016 at 9:44 AM
Lovely image, CayCay. Your poem captures the dreamy feeling of fishing well. This must have been a welcome relief from caring for a large family, maybe the only she got. Nice tribute. Agnes
Lawless Avatar
December 3, 2016 at 9:29 AM
CayCay, fishing is a prayerful interlude of solitude that clears the head and settles the heart. It allows one to hang out in silence amid the cacophony of children. Nicely written.
Teagan Avatar
December 3, 2016 at 8:19 AM
Lovely ... You've captured a period of time in a beautiful way. Very nice to read. Hugs
Ball Avatar
December 2, 2016 at 11:25 PM
Beautiful Cay Cay. I can see you remembering your grandma as you walk familiar ground and visit familiar places. So well described. Loved this nostalgic feel to it. God Bless and a 7 from me. JB
Godwin Avatar
December 2, 2016 at 11:37 PM
Thank you so much, Judy. AND God bless you! All the best ... CayCay
Wolf Avatar
December 2, 2016 at 9:15 PM
I love the imagery in this one, CayCay! Very well done!
Godwin Avatar
December 2, 2016 at 11:06 PM
So good of you to say so, Rick! Thank you and best wishes ... CayCay
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