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Drama of the Day Star's Demise

In lull of twilight 

   sunburned skies tell
       of the Sun’s demise behind
unified realm of dark distant trees

     and the sprightly sea breeze dies
as night slays the day

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Line Gauthier

August 8, 2019 at 8:52 PM

Lovely, Susan.

Susan Ashley

August 10, 2019 at 6:07 PM

Thank you, Line, for your kind comment and visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Alesia Leach

July 31, 2019 at 3:54 PM

beyond doubt, your words make something truly beautiful, warmest and best wishes to you ;0)

Susan Ashley

July 31, 2019 at 7:58 PM

Alesia, it is always such a pleasure when your kindhearted and lovely presence graces my poem. Thank you for your gracious comments and sweet kindness. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi

July 10, 2019 at 8:34 AM

Hi Susan: i loved how you said "when night slays the day". I was envious!

Susan Ashley

July 19, 2019 at 5:51 PM

I relish your lovely comments and kind congrats, Ralph. I’ve been envious of some of your poetic beauties as well, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi

July 10, 2019 at 8:35 AM

Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues

July 7, 2019 at 7:43 AM

A beauty! Congratulations, Susan!

Susan Ashley

July 7, 2019 at 9:32 PM

Kim, thank you for your wonderful comment and kind congrats. Both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

John Hamilton

July 4, 2019 at 8:14 AM

This is amazing Susan, sunburnt skies, slay the day, love your phraseology, ditto to SOS comment, you and Dale are masters of word selection, we are honored to have you in the SOUP.

Susan Ashley

July 5, 2019 at 9:14 AM

I relish your beautiful comments, John. Dale truly is a poetry master with whom I take great pleasure in reading as I continue to hone my craft. It is an honor and a joy for me to be among such grand poetic talent here at PS like you, John, Dale and SOS. Thank you for your gracious visit my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux

June 28, 2019 at 9:48 PM

Congrats on your high placement. This one indeed shines brightly.

Susan Ashley

June 28, 2019 at 11:45 PM

Your heartwarming congrats are a joy to receive, Richard, as are your gracious comments too. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

June 27, 2019 at 11:28 AM

"sunburnt skies" , "as night slays the day" I especially so love these verses my dear friend. A truly beautiful creation and a shining example of true and very gifted poet! A fav, and a true gem too..

Susan Ashley

June 27, 2019 at 9:22 PM

Oh, my dear friend, it is a tremendous joy to hear from you and to have your golden light shine upon my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me and for the honor of your fav. Dear Robert, your inspiring presence has been sorely missed. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

June 27, 2019 at 7:40 AM

Beautiful verse as always, Susan..imagery well painted..that last line is so potent. Congrats on your well deserved win.

Susan Ashley

June 27, 2019 at 9:19 PM

Your precious comments are truly a joy to receive, Vijay. Thank you for your gracious visit and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kenneth Brenner

June 24, 2019 at 3:48 AM

Susan!!!...Well once again, your work is a "shining star" Excellent poem. Ill say if I was your poetry professor, in some sort of college..youd get an A+..Always may God Bless you my friend..oh..and Susan .please check my page..I wrote part 2 of "Auburn Haired Beauty"..I hope you enjoy. :-)

Susan Ashley

June 24, 2019 at 9:05 PM

Dear poetry professor, thank you for my A+ and for your generous and lovely comments :) You've warmed my heart, Kenneth, with your wonderful kindness. Your poem; 'Auburn Haired Beauty - part two' is a masterful work of poetic art, my talented friend. It is captivating to say the least. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kurt Ravidas

June 23, 2019 at 6:41 AM

Oh, lull of twilight! Tastes so good :3 Congrats, Susan. Perfect silver.

Susan Ashley

June 23, 2019 at 10:00 PM

Thank you, Kurt. It is always a great honor and a pleasure when your kindness and esteemed presence graces my page. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues

June 22, 2019 at 9:41 PM

You keep our minds whirling! Congrats on second place, Susan!

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 10:21 PM

Thank you, Kim. I relish your lovely comments and your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

June 22, 2019 at 7:19 PM

wow, gorgeous winner. Congrats, Susan

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:28 PM

I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Andrea. Your wonderful comments and kind congrats are truly uplifting, dear poetess. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

June 22, 2019 at 4:38 AM

Oh yeah...You captured the moment...Well done...

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:18 PM

Dear Arturo, your presence here is always uplifting. Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts with me, mon ami. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Nette Onclaud

June 21, 2019 at 3:24 PM

what a lustrous piece, susan... laurels for you and big congrats!...huggs

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:16 PM

Nette, your shining presence here is always inspiring. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and kind congrats with me. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Jeanne Mcgee

June 21, 2019 at 2:34 PM

sunburnt skies...I love this image. Good poem and congrats on a top placement, Susan.

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:14 PM

Thank you, Jeanne, for your wonderful and uplifting comments and for your kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser

June 21, 2019 at 2:28 PM

Ps. This one is a fave for me! :)

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:09 PM

Thank you for your return visit and for the honor of your fave, Laura. Warmest wishes always, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Caren Krutsinger

June 21, 2019 at 7:48 AM

You have conquered imagism, and romanticism, and poetism, Susan.

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:14 PM

You are so kind, Caren. The 'conquering' is a work in progress :) but I truly appreciate your wonderful and heart-lifting comments. Thank you for your inspiring friendship, my poetic friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser

June 20, 2019 at 10:42 PM

Such vivid expression resonates in your fine pen, Susan! Creativity personified! Beautiful! Should place well in the contest! :)

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:05 PM

Laura, you grace my page with your golden light and brighten my day. It is a great joy for me to receive your beautiful thoughts. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Thank you for your kindness and for your gracious visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

June 20, 2019 at 10:01 PM

Those last two lines are imagism at its finest, methinks. You 'slayed' it, Susan. Touche. Warm wishes, Gershon

Susan Ashley

June 22, 2019 at 7:02 PM

Gershon, it is my wonderful pleasure to receive your uplifting comments. Thank you for sharing your inspiring thoughts with me, my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

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