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Drama of the Day Star's Demise

In the lull of twilight sunburnt skies tell of the Sun’s demise below the unified realm of distant shaded shapes - and the sprightly sea breeze dies as night slays the day Susan Ashley June 20, 2019 ~ Second Place ~ Contest: Your Choice (11) Imagist Style, Any Form, Theme Sponsor: Brian Strand

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Line Gauthier

Date: 8/8/2019 8:52:00 PM

Lovely, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/10/2019 6:07:00 PM

Thank you, Line, for your kind comment and visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Alesia Leach

Date: 7/31/2019 3:54:00 PM

beyond doubt, your words make something truly beautiful, warmest and best wishes to you ;0)

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/31/2019 7:58:00 PM

Alesia, it is always such a pleasure when your kindhearted and lovely presence graces my poem. Thank you for your gracious comments and sweet kindness. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi

Date: 7/10/2019 8:34:00 AM

Hi Susan: i loved how you said "when night slays the day". I was envious!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/19/2019 5:51:00 PM

I relish your lovely comments and kind congrats, Ralph. I’ve been envious of some of your poetic beauties as well, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Ralph Sergi
Date: 7/10/2019 8:35:00 AM

Congratulations!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/7/2019 7:43:00 AM

A beauty! Congratulations, Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/7/2019 9:32:00 PM

Kim, thank you for your wonderful comment and kind congrats. Both are truly appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 7/4/2019 8:14:00 AM

This is amazing Susan, sunburnt skies, slay the day, love your phraseology, ditto to SOS comment, you and Dale are masters of word selection, we are honored to have you in the SOUP.

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/5/2019 9:14:00 AM

I relish your beautiful comments, John. Dale truly is a poetry master with whom I take great pleasure in reading as I continue to hone my craft. It is an honor and a joy for me to be among such grand poetic talent here at PS like you, John, Dale and SOS. Thank you for your gracious visit my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/28/2019 9:48:00 PM

Congrats on your high placement. This one indeed shines brightly.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/28/2019 11:45:00 PM

Your heartwarming congrats are a joy to receive, Richard, as are your gracious comments too. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Robert Lindley

Date: 6/27/2019 11:28:00 AM

"sunburnt skies" , "as night slays the day" I especially so love these verses my dear friend. A truly beautiful creation and a shining example of true and very gifted poet! A fav, and a true gem too..

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/27/2019 9:22:00 PM

Oh, my dear friend, it is a tremendous joy to hear from you and to have your golden light shine upon my poem. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me and for the honor of your fav. Dear Robert, your inspiring presence has been sorely missed. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/27/2019 7:40:00 AM

Beautiful verse as always, Susan..imagery well painted..that last line is so potent. Congrats on your well deserved win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/27/2019 9:19:00 PM

Your precious comments are truly a joy to receive, Vijay. Thank you for your gracious visit and heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kenneth Brenner

Date: 6/24/2019 3:48:00 AM

Susan!!!...Well once again, your work is a "shining star" Excellent poem. Ill say if I was your poetry professor, in some sort of college..youd get an A+..Always may God Bless you my friend..oh..and Susan .please check my page..I wrote part 2 of "Auburn Haired Beauty"..I hope you enjoy. :-)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/24/2019 9:05:00 PM

Dear poetry professor, thank you for my A+ and for your generous and lovely comments :) You've warmed my heart, Kenneth, with your wonderful kindness. Your poem; 'Auburn Haired Beauty - part two' is a masterful work of poetic art, my talented friend. It is captivating to say the least. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Kurt Ravidas

Date: 6/23/2019 6:41:00 AM

Oh, lull of twilight! Tastes so good :3 Congrats, Susan. Perfect silver.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/23/2019 10:00:00 PM

Thank you, Kurt. It is always a great honor and a pleasure when your kindness and esteemed presence graces my page. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/22/2019 9:41:00 PM

You keep our minds whirling! Congrats on second place, Susan!

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 10:21:00 PM

Thank you, Kim. I relish your lovely comments and your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/22/2019 7:19:00 PM

wow, gorgeous winner. Congrats, Susan

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:28:00 PM

I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, Andrea. Your wonderful comments and kind congrats are truly uplifting, dear poetess. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

Date: 6/22/2019 4:38:00 AM

Oh yeah...You captured the moment...Well done...

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:18:00 PM

Dear Arturo, your presence here is always uplifting. Thank you for sharing your beautiful thoughts with me, mon ami. I'm so happy you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Nette Onclaud

Date: 6/21/2019 3:24:00 PM

what a lustrous piece, susan... laurels for you and big congrats!...huggs

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:16:00 PM

Nette, your shining presence here is always inspiring. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts and kind congrats with me. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 6/21/2019 2:34:00 PM

sunburnt skies...I love this image. Good poem and congrats on a top placement, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:14:00 PM

Thank you, Jeanne, for your wonderful and uplifting comments and for your kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/21/2019 2:28:00 PM

Ps. This one is a fave for me! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:09:00 PM

Thank you for your return visit and for the honor of your fave, Laura. Warmest wishes always, dear poetess.. ~Susan

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 6/21/2019 7:48:00 AM

You have conquered imagism, and romanticism, and poetism, Susan.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:14:00 PM

You are so kind, Caren. The 'conquering' is a work in progress :) but I truly appreciate your wonderful and heart-lifting comments. Thank you for your inspiring friendship, my poetic friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Laura Leiser

Date: 6/20/2019 10:42:00 PM

Such vivid expression resonates in your fine pen, Susan! Creativity personified! Beautiful! Should place well in the contest! :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:05:00 PM

Laura, you grace my page with your golden light and brighten my day. It is a great joy for me to receive your beautiful thoughts. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem, my friend. Thank you for your kindness and for your gracious visit. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/20/2019 10:01:00 PM

Those last two lines are imagism at its finest, methinks. You 'slayed' it, Susan. Touche. Warm wishes, Gershon

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2019 7:02:00 PM

Gershon, it is my wonderful pleasure to receive your uplifting comments. Thank you for sharing your inspiring thoughts with me, my dear friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan