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Downcast In the Rain

Rain drops fall fast, like flying frond, Creating ripples in the pond, It's pouring hard, just as forecast, I watch the showers spill steadfast, Like waters gushing from beyond... Spurred on by rain, new life has spawned, Buzzing and croaking night has dawned, The sky remains dark, overcast, Rain drops fall fast... With the rain, my tears correspond, Thinking of you and our dream bond, Your death has still left me aghast, Never have I felt so downcast, Ignoring my slough of despond, Rain drops fall fast... 11/03/17

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Date: 12/3/2017 11:14:00 AM
rhyming,..do something else but pose en-blouse..
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Date: 12/2/2017 12:05:00 PM
A worthy top of the list of 'Best New Poems'. So sorry for your loss!
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Date: 12/1/2017 8:53:00 PM
Beautiful and melancholy write, Jo, and well-deserved to be at the top of the "Best New Poem" list ... congrats, my friend! If this is written from experience I am heartily sorry for your loss ... pain is the price we pay for love - of any kind - and the deeper the love, the sharper the edge of that blade, yet without that payment it would be worthless. Those holes in our hearts are the proof of how precious that love was. Blessings and comfort, Friend.
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Date: 11/30/2017 12:18:00 AM
I am sorry for your loss but congratulations on top spot . Well done Jo
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Date: 11/28/2017 9:53:00 PM
Your magnificent poem is now number one on the Best New Poems List Jo! Congratulations! It is beautiful! : )
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Date: 11/28/2017 1:42:00 PM
A beautiful poem describing the rainy days kept in and thinking of the suns return. As well as the feeling of a lonesome day remembering time together feeling the loss with expression of tears. A lovely write. XO
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Date: 11/27/2017 8:38:00 PM
Hello Jo Daniel, it takes time to heal from afrom your loss, you know that person will be always in your heart. Have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 11/27/2017 6:58:00 PM
WoW! Jo, I see why you're in the top spot. I found it to be sad yet beautiful. Good imagery and content. The last five lines sumes this piece up very well. You described how one feels after losing a loved one with poetic flare. Excellent job-Alexis
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Date: 11/27/2017 1:29:00 AM
wowowowowowowowowoowow awesome
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Date: 11/27/2017 1:29:00 AM
wowowowowowowowowoowow awesome
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Date: 11/26/2017 4:25:00 PM
Wonderful poem Jo, I think one of your best, congrats on the win and new number one of top 100.
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Date: 11/26/2017 1:11:00 PM
- A beautiful poem on top of the list: Best New Poems, Jo ! - Congratulations ... well deserved, I enjoy reading this again :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/26/2017 1:13:00 AM
Beautiful rondeau poem and not easy to write! :)
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Date: 11/25/2017 8:06:00 PM
Jo, such beautiful sorrow reflected in tears falling from your eyes and as well as from heaven. A captivating emotional write.. Congratulations for the number one spot on the 'Best New Poems' list - well deserved!
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Date: 11/25/2017 3:12:00 PM
I found this on 'Best New Poems' and, boy, do I concur, further it should be moved to permanently stay under "Best Poems." The emotion spills with the rain drops as both seep under the reader's skin and into their heart. Beautifully and sadly touching, Jo. (fiction, I'm hoping) Hugs ... CayCay
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Date: 11/25/2017 2:36:00 PM
Beautiful, poignant. Inasmuch as I love watching rain this would be most difficult after the death of a loved one.
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Date: 11/24/2017 8:28:00 PM
Wonderful style, Jo. Congrats.
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Date: 11/21/2017 11:30:00 AM
Magnificent creation my friend. Adding this fine gem to my fav list and was a pleasure to read this fine day
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Date: 11/20/2017 3:37:00 PM
Lovely Rondeau, Jo. Congratulations on your win in the contest. Hugs, Sandra
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Date: 11/20/2017 11:13:00 AM
Your Rondeau speaks excellence...Wonderful to share the winners’ list with you...Congrats on your placement..Sara
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Date: 11/12/2017 10:30:00 AM
Congrats Jo to win on your wonderful poem
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Date: 11/12/2017 4:22:00 AM
Sad lonely reflections can also be beautiful memories Jo.
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Date: 11/12/2017 12:26:00 AM
Thank you for entering your GREAT poem in my contest, Jo. Congratulations on your well-deserved win. Janice
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Date: 11/8/2017 6:21:00 PM
Beautiful poem - congrats on your win, Jo.
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Date: 11/8/2017 4:38:00 PM
Outstanding Jo! Congratulations on being in the top three! : )
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