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Down a Drainage

The drizzle whips mildly like an omen Along the ashen lane ; and I am troubled While gazing through a drainage Filled with mud and waylaid boughs, As a quivered sigh trails below the cement Until my knees bow down, wobbling. I linger around almost numb In the gradual dip of sunset’s orange hue; While these eyes peep closer closer-- A moment too excruciating for me For it lays still on debris … unmoved by any yell. What I recall is a slip-sliding of our romp Perhaps, a brief escape from my wet palm--- And now it is gone, my pet, my hamster That I weep, unforgiving, upon rainfall…swollen. 3/18/2019 For Eve Roper: Down A Storm Drain Gone Forever
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019


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Date: 3/23/2019 2:54:00 PM
Congratulations on being number one.
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Date: 3/23/2019 2:22:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on your wonderful 1st placing in this contest - such a cute poem but sad when a young child loses his/her pet. Poetry hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 3/22/2019 6:09:00 PM
I also wrote about a lost pet Nette:-) many congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 3/22/2019 4:01:00 PM
Nette, thank you for entering my contest. You had clear and fascinating imagery and great rhythm and flow. Congratulations on your win. Come and visit me on my blog https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/blogs/blog_detail.aspx?BlogID=35331&PoetID=57242
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Date: 3/21/2019 10:04:00 PM
An expressive poem that stirs our memories and emotions... It's rainy setting perfectly mirrors that feeling of losing a beloved pet... A very, very good piece of writing Nette. Wishing you the best of luck in the contest!
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Date: 3/18/2019 10:01:00 PM
Always so nice to read beautiful poetry!
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Date: 3/18/2019 5:09:00 PM
Touched by the profundity of this work!
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Date: 3/18/2019 3:17:00 PM
How sad when we lose our favorite pet, nicely executed my dear, gl in the contest, and hugs for the journey there xo
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Date: 3/18/2019 2:06:00 PM
Devastating but amazing, especially the last lines. I was fond of my own hamster as a kid.
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Date: 3/18/2019 1:17:00 PM
A sad tale nette, the loss if a pet is heartbraking for sure. Good luck. Tom.
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