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Doubt Senryu

fickle flickering
of a feeble candle flame-
my resolve wavers

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Posted: 18th March 2019
Contest: Writing Challenge 3
Placed 3rd
Sponsor: Dear Heart

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Angela Crabtree

December 11, 2020 at 6:00 PM

Very clever, Paul ;)

Paul Callus

December 12, 2020 at 5:59 AM

Thank you , Angela. Have a lovely day! :) Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

April 14, 2019 at 2:21 PM

LOVE IT BUT WAIT... is this one officially Haiku? Syllables of 5-7-5 and about something in nature? Then maybe that is the Doubt in the Senryu? Ha ha! IDK I’m always asking is it Senryu or Haiku and maybe that question should be asked under both (except how to pose that via nature for Haiku). Geesh ... This was perfect in how resolve can be. It is also typical of nature between states.

Paul Callus

April 15, 2019 at 10:22 AM

Hi Edlynn...yours, as usual, is a very pleasant visit :) Thank you! // Humour apart, this would be accepted as both senryu and haiku, while the 5-7-5 requirement has long lost its appeal. ~ Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

April 5, 2019 at 11:15 AM

Lovely senryu and a big congratulations on your well deserved win.

Paul Callus

April 5, 2019 at 1:53 PM

Many thanks, Supraja. Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

April 4, 2019 at 7:39 PM

HEre is one to congratulate, since I see no new one to respond to!! Congratulations, Paul.

Paul Callus

April 5, 2019 at 7:59 AM

Thank you for coming back with congrats, Andrea. Have a nice day! // paul

Jack Horne

March 22, 2019 at 3:02 PM

so glad to see this clever senryu was a winner

Paul Callus

March 22, 2019 at 3:32 PM

Thank you, Jack. Have a nice weekend, my friend. Regards // paul

Arthur Vaso

March 21, 2019 at 2:48 AM

Congrats I see are in order. this is very contemplative!!!

Paul Callus

March 21, 2019 at 2:12 PM

Glad you found it to your liking, Arthur...thank you. Regards // paul

Eve Roper

March 20, 2019 at 6:57 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*

Paul Callus

March 21, 2019 at 2:16 PM

Thank you, Eve. Regards & Hugs to you :) paul

Constance La France

March 20, 2019 at 4:57 PM

Paul, congratulations on your win in my contest with this great Senryu ~

Paul Callus

March 21, 2019 at 2:17 PM

Thank you Constance. Best regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 20, 2019 at 2:39 PM

- Congratulations on your great win, Paul :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

March 20, 2019 at 3:12 PM

Thank you, Anne-Lise :) I'm still looking for that lost ring!! Hugs // paul

Andrea Dietrich

March 19, 2019 at 7:30 PM

I like how you did that analogy. GREAT job.

Paul Callus

March 20, 2019 at 3:11 PM

Thank you, Andrea. At least you notice what I have in mind:) Regards // paul

Agnes Krampe

March 19, 2019 at 7:20 AM

Love it!

Paul Callus

March 19, 2019 at 9:07 AM

"Love it" is more than ample for me, Agnes...thank you. Have a lovely day. // paul

Vijay Pandit

March 19, 2019 at 7:02 AM

You reach deep with this metaphor for life--well done Paul.

Paul Callus

March 19, 2019 at 9:05 AM

Thank you, Vijay...your comments are appreciated. Regards // paul

Barbara Gorelick

March 18, 2019 at 9:19 PM

wonderfully done! BG

Paul Callus

March 19, 2019 at 6:02 AM

Thank you, Barbara. Have a nice day. // paul

Line Gauthier

March 18, 2019 at 8:38 PM

Lovely, Paul. Love the imagery and feeling.

Paul Callus

March 19, 2019 at 6:01 AM

Pleased you liked it, Line...thank you. Regards // paul

Caren Krutsinger

March 18, 2019 at 6:48 PM

Sweet write. Good luck in the contest.

Paul Callus

March 19, 2019 at 5:53 AM

Thank you, Caren. Best regards // paul

Jan Allison

March 18, 2019 at 6:09 PM

have no doubt in your poetic ability Paul, awesome senryu:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

March 18, 2019 at 6:25 PM

You are too kind, Jan :) Thank you! Hugs // paul

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