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Doe Eyes

Doe eyes 
feminine and fearful 
appear in the darkened woods
sheltered by autumn brush

what beauties
graceful necks and tanned hides
silver and swift

like aliens they stand 
caught in the headlights
of civilization

4/10/20

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Gideon Idudje Date: 4/29/2020 5:44:00 PM Nature and highlight Innate and sweetly pure Bravo Ma! Login to Reply

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 4/28/2020 8:16:00 PM Oh that's good. I love an ending like that, that slaps you awake. Splendid piece of poetry Janis, congratulations for your win! xomo Login to Reply

Jack Webster Date: 4/28/2020 7:12:00 PM Congratulations Janis Login to Reply

Kim Rodrigues Date: 4/28/2020 5:47:00 PM Love the first two lines! Catches our attention. Congratulations on your win! Login to Reply

Jc Hawkens Date: 4/19/2020 12:33:00 PM Congrats, I love your poem on these gentle souls. Written with Grace. Login to Reply Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 4/24/2020 11:20:00 AM I appreciate your comments, Thanks.

Brenda Chiri Date: 4/17/2020 2:08:00 AM Janis congrats on your win!;) Login to Reply Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 4/24/2020 11:20:00 AM Thanks Brenda. Keep safe. Blessings Janis.

Julia Ward Date: 4/12/2020 4:08:00 AM Very good, but it could have done with more poetic "sprinklers" - some alliteration or unexpected words. Login to Reply Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 4/24/2020 11:19:00 AM I am honored by my placement.

CayCay Jennings Date: 4/10/2020 3:24:00 PM I inhaled your doe description deep inside my own doe imagery reaction all the while thinking of my husband who hunts; such a contradiction! I would hunt, were it necessary for survival, otherwise, those innocent eyes would have me paralyzed with remorse! I think this will place well in the contest, it sure did with me. CayCay Login to Reply Janis Medders Tobechi Date: 4/24/2020 11:22:00 AM I could not stand to shoot one of these lovelies. The meat would not taste good.