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For Kim Rodirques - Vo dee of doe poetry contest

Dodoitsu definition: The Dodoitsu is a fixed folk song form of Japanese origin and is often about LOVE or HUMOR. It has 26 syllables made of of four lines of 7, 7, 7, 5 syllables respectively. It is unrhymed and non-metrical.

The dodo (Raphus cucullatus) is an extinct flightless bird that once inhabited the island of Mauritius in the Indian ocean. It was fearless and had a nasty bite, due to its beak.

Some say the bird was extinct due to people coming to Mauritius and hunting the bird for food, as it was no afraid, it was easy prey for sailors and invaders. Some say it died due its natural habitat being destroyed by humans - stealing food and cutting down forests..

Dodo - Dodo

three feet tall with grey feathers
chubby with flightless small wings
but fearless from intruders
relic bones remain

birddodoitsu

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Sara Kendrick

May 31, 2024 at 11:03 AM

Nice to see the winners' list with your name on it and also, see what everyone else wrote for the contest. Congratulations. Way to go. Sara K

Anne-Lise Andresen

May 30, 2024 at 1:49 AM

- Brave and fearless ... great done, S.O. :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs

Kim Rodrigues

May 28, 2024 at 9:13 PM

Enjoyed very much and now with the narrative! Congrats, Silent!

Jeanette Swan

March 7, 2024 at 3:56 AM

Your poem makes me wish I could see a living version and its curious fearlessness.

Ink Empress

March 3, 2024 at 5:31 AM

what a unique take this is! We have those special birds too, one which can be only found in certain islands, and they dont survive elsewhere. What a brilliant and creative dodoitsu this is, and youv written it too in a very interesting manner. Fearless and beautiful, a bird worth writing about i believe. This made me want to read more about this bird! You really have that skill to keep us readers intrigued and captivated! Ah love this! Pleasure reading

Bill Baker

March 2, 2024 at 5:37 PM

Excellent example of a Dodoitsu poem, Silent One. Great information and a poem to match. Good luck in the contest, my friend! Bill

Sotto Poet

March 2, 2024 at 4:47 PM

I express my utmost gratitude for the wealth of knowledge you have shared with me, enlightening me on various previously unknown subjects. Your writing is truly exceptional, leaving me in awe. I cannot help but feel a deep sense of sorrow for both involved, my dear friend.

Darlene De Beaulieu

March 2, 2024 at 3:35 PM

Hello silent One. yes it is sad. .I feel sadden for both of them. my friend. Enjoy your evening my friend. /Darlene/

Sara Kendrick

March 2, 2024 at 8:01 AM

Sad for the bird and so sad that humans did that. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. And as Tom said below, it is highly possible that it will return in the New Heaven and the New Earth. Thanks for dropping by my page. Sara K

Duke Beaufort

March 2, 2024 at 8:00 AM

A very famous extinction story that had no definitive answer as far as I know, although there may be one. This is an excellent topic to write about as we are amidst a mass extinction that many have not realized is occurring.