Beryl Edmonds Poet Rhyme

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Do Not Snatch My Breath Away

Do not snatch my breath away
Come to my aid please for I cannot breathe 
my neck’s being brutally kneed and squeezed 
Though my voice is now barely a whisper
hear me my every brother and sister.

Cry for my dilemma, sigh for me too
may such cruelty never come to you
It's difficult trying to gasp some air 
my demise is coming soon, I declare.

I utter, is this needed, tell me why 
is death in a gutter how I should die?
For something unjustly unbearable 
was my sin honestly so terrible?

Come here my sweet Lord for you I do need
my murmur to you before I'm deceased 
I do acknowledge that crime does not pay
but isn’t it a sin to snatch breath away?
27th April 2021

Writing Prompt - Breathe- poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Sam Kauffman May 10, 2021 at 2:23 PM Belle, congratulations on your first place win. Very emotive write. Blessings. Beryl Edmonds May 10, 2021 at 6:11 PM Thank you very much Sam, appreciated… Belle

Constance La France May 10, 2021 at 1:46 PM Belle, congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt - Breathe - Challenge with this beautifully penned and emotional poem, it touched my heart, well done, love _Constance Beryl Edmonds May 10, 2021 at 6:10 PM Thank you Constance for the writing challenge which was the inspiration for bringing about this poem… Belle

Malabika Ray Choudhury May 9, 2021 at 3:23 PM Dear Belle, Your poem delivers such a great message to all of us. You have chosen an excellent theme for the prompt "Breathe". I am tearful reading your poem - this incident haunts me. Congratulations on your top placement. Love and best wishes ~ Mala Beryl Edmonds May 9, 2021 at 3:44 PM Dear Malabika, the incident haunts me too, it was horrifically barbaric, thank you for the congratulations. Best wishes with love ~ Belle

Daniel Turner May 9, 2021 at 1:38 PM (standing and applauding) A very well written poem whose message can not be argued. Congratulations on your podium write, Belle. Beryl Edmonds May 9, 2021 at 3:23 PM I didn’t know the contest had been judged Daniel, what a lovely surprise, thank you very much… Belle

Marilene Evans May 9, 2021 at 12:58 PM Congratulations, Belle! Marvelously done. Beryl Edmonds May 9, 2021 at 3:26 PM This is a delightful surprise, thank you Marilene I appreciate that… Belle

Jennifer Proxenos May 2, 2021 at 9:50 AM This is a top win, and the person who was responsible has justly been charged with murder. Almost like strangling someone only slower. A sad but true event which you creatively and awesomely wrote for the contest, God bless Belle and best of luck _ don't think you will need it though. Hugs Jennifer. Beryl Edmonds May 3, 2021 at 5:00 PM Charged with murder and rightfully so, you can’t understand what entered that policeman’s head. Thank you for the good wishes Jennifer. God bless you. Hugs, Belle

Regina Mcintosh April 28, 2021 at 9:05 AM Wonderful writing... A sure winner and wonderful tribute, too. God bless you always, Love, Gina Beryl Edmonds May 3, 2021 at 4:56 PM Thank you for those encouraging words Gina. God bless you always too. Much love, Belle

Connie Marcum Wong April 27, 2021 at 11:35 PM This is a very beautiful tribute to a man and his family who did not deserve to die. It was heart breaking to see on the news. I pray he did not die in vain and that laws will be changed. Blessings xxoo Beryl Edmonds April 28, 2021 at 1:23 AM Thank you Connie, I pray the same as you that we never see someone die that way again. Bless you ~ Belle

Alexis Y. April 27, 2021 at 6:20 PM WoW! Belle, I echo what L. Milton said; no petty crime deserved such a brutal and agonizing death. You took the chosen words and hit the ball out of the park with this hard-hitting, truthful write. It's heartbreaking that incidents such as this happen. Congratulations in advance. Have a great day- Alexis Beryl Edmonds April 27, 2021 at 6:51 PM It’s hard too imagine how agonising it must have been to be killed in that dreadful way and absolutely unnecessary too. Thank you Alexis and have a great day yourself... Belle

Rico Leffanta April 27, 2021 at 11:28 AM Well done, Belle! Sorry to say he is but one of millions deprived of life every day - usually, "to the greater glory of God"! Aloha! Rico Beryl Edmonds April 27, 2021 at 12:03 PM That’s true Rico, but how many die in such a tragic way. Thank you for your comments... Belle

L Milton Hankins April 27, 2021 at 8:32 AM No petty crime deserved this punishment. It's a heavy price to pay for having your name go down in history. Beryl Edmonds April 27, 2021 at 8:55 AM It certainly is, thank you for reading L... Belle

Tom Cunningham April 27, 2021 at 7:42 AM Well written Belle, imagine being tied with handcuffs and then someone kneeling on your neck, no one deserves to die that way. Hope you're well and enjoying your week. Good luck in the contest Tom Beryl Edmonds April 27, 2021 at 7:45 AM It takes your breath away just thinking about it Tom. Thank you very much for commenting and the good wishes. Having a good week so far, hope you are too... Belle

Victor Buhagiar April 27, 2021 at 7:35 AM Wow. What a perfect poem for the contest. It will rate high. Such emotion! Beryl Edmonds April 27, 2021 at 7:39 AM A wow from me to you too, thank you so much Victor you’re a blessing... Belle