Do Not Leave Without a Treasured Tale To Tell

Do not leave without a treasured tale to tell,
The angels wait patiently to hear you sing or scream;
Down, down in the plain pit that is as hot as hell.

In a world that is full of stains and stinking smell,
So many are sleeping while some never dare to dream,
Do not leave without a treasured tale to tell.

The wise wake up each day, either weak or well,
They crave not to end up as a member of the tempter’s team,
Down, down in the plain pit that is as hot as hell.

Life is lovely, some are singing, ringing a blessed bell;
Some peasants plough and still have nothing to steam;
Do not leave without a treasured tale to tell.

I seldom feel for the fine flowers that faded and fell,
But I wonder how some elites eternally erase their esteem
Down, down in the plain pit that is as hot as hell.

We’re all born with death, just like a snail can’t shun its shell,
But will your demise give the world a gloom or a bright beam?
Do not leave without a treasured tale to tell,
Down, down the plain pit that is as hot as hell.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Guzzi Avatar
August 2, 2011 at 5:48 PM
I really love your use of this form! [I want you to win! Titles of poetry are generally capitalized. All first and last words and all other words except for articles, prepositions (regardless of length), and conjunctions are capitalized.] Light & Love
Brown Avatar
August 2, 2011 at 8:41 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through round one in the PoetrySoup International contest Adeleke. I wish you the best in the final round. Love, Carol
Mannan Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 9:21 PM
What a lovely message. Many congrats for this win.
Johnson Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 12:43 PM
Congratulations Adeleke. I was surprised when I saw that this one was yours, after I had judged it. Love, Joyce
Taylor Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 11:20 AM
Congrats on a well deserved win, Adeleke. Nice going. xxxRalph
Brown Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 10:38 AM
A big congratulations on your win Adeleke. I also believe it is one of your best poems. Love, Carol
K. Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 9:43 AM
I really enjoyed reading your wonderful villanelle, Adeleke & you used such great refrains for it too-- Congrats on your win with this piece!
Sweetheart Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 6:44 AM
Congrats Adeleke on your awesome win in Joyce's contest with this unique write my friend.. so happy to be sharing the winners circle with one of the very best .. enjoy with luv...
Onclaud Avatar
February 28, 2011 at 5:05 AM
yes, yes to this, adelke... roses for you and congrats! :) huggs, nette
Dietrich Avatar
February 27, 2011 at 11:35 PM
Yeaaaa, another win for this poem of yours, Adeleke. WAY to go, and Congratulations.
Guzzi Avatar
February 15, 2011 at 6:31 AM
Absolute perfection A#1 write my son...BUT it is a form which required RHYME. I am putting it in my fav's and giving it a 7 IF in a contest for rhyme with me it would be a #1 winner. Find me an UNRHYMING poem for the contest NO rhyme dear. Light & Love
Haick Avatar
July 6, 2010 at 7:03 AM
Great work, Adeleke! Congratulations on your 2nd Place win in the contest! Enjoyed reading this. Peace, love, Audrey
Arteaga Avatar
July 4, 2010 at 1:09 PM
wow this is great i love the intense feel of your words congrats!
Devonshire Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 2:40 PM
Very well done, Adeleke! Congratulations on taking the grand prize. Love, "ma"
Winter Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 1:30 PM
Hey you! This is absolutely brilliant! Congrats on a most well deserved win! love, shar xo
Green Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 9:05 AM
Deep, sensational, emotional, wise and amazing. Great job on this write, and congrats. I will definitely be looking for more of your work in the future.
Richards Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 8:14 AM
What a wonderful, passion filled poem....deserved to win!!! Congratulations Adeleke!! Terrific work!! ~ Carrie
Sweetheart Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 6:32 AM
Adeleke, my son, how proud your Soup Mom is of u to be a big winner in Dr. Ram's contest with this awesome write .. a lovely Villanelle poem... so perfect ... A plus ... enjoy your bif win.. for this sensational piece of work.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii...AlohA.. from Soup Mummy
George   Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 4:04 AM
Sensational Villanelle, Adeleke. Congratulations on your well deserved win. Lainie
Dietrich Avatar
July 3, 2010 at 12:23 AM
great repeating lines, Adeleke and GREAT win. Congratulations!!! LUv andrea
Freeman Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 11:05 PM
Congratulations, Adeleke on your first place, Ace. Agape, Moses
Mehta Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 10:36 PM
Congrats on the first place in my contest
Johnson Avatar
July 2, 2010 at 10:12 PM
Great Villanele and congratulations on your second place with it. Love, Joyce
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