Dizzyku

dizzy dance of leaves
falling, evergreens crooning,
tire swing swiveling,
swords clashing, children laughing
bluster brisk as battle cools

9/18/2020

autumntanka

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Jan Allison

September 21, 2020 at 5:14 AM

what a fun autumnal tanka:-) hugs jan xx

Arturo Michael

September 20, 2020 at 4:54 PM

I can imagine the scene ... children playing in authum leaves...

Kim Rodrigues

September 20, 2020 at 5:12 PM

Thank you, Arturo!

Silent One

September 20, 2020 at 10:54 AM

Nice one Kim..

Kim Rodrigues

September 20, 2020 at 5:11 PM

Thank you, Silent One :)

Mahtab Bangalee

September 20, 2020 at 3:50 AM

excellent

Kim Rodrigues

September 20, 2020 at 5:27 AM

Thank you, Mahtab!

Victor Buhagiar

September 19, 2020 at 11:15 PM

And then they all fall down. Got dizzy with all the play? ~~

Kim Rodrigues

September 20, 2020 at 5:30 AM

One 8 year old kid stood up on the tire swing and his brother or friend spun him for like 5 minutes. Astronaut material?

John Watt

September 19, 2020 at 10:07 PM

Sounds like a fun autumn day, Kim!

Kim Rodrigues

September 20, 2020 at 5:31 AM

Yes! We can use such refreshing days...may they be many! Blessings to you, my friend! I shall catch up with poetry reading soon. Been a little busy but that’s good. <3