Dizzyku

dizzy dance of leaves falling, evergreens crooning, tire swing swiveling, swords clashing, children laughing bluster brisk as battle cools 9/18/2020

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Jan Allison

Date: 9/21/2020 5:14:00 AM

what a fun autumnal tanka:-) hugs jan xx

Arturo Michael

Date: 9/20/2020 4:54:00 PM

I can imagine the scene ... children playing in authum leaves...

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/20/2020 5:12:00 PM

Thank you, Arturo!

Silent One

Date: 9/20/2020 10:54:00 AM

Nice one Kim..

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/20/2020 5:11:00 PM

Thank you, Silent One :)

Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 9/20/2020 3:50:00 AM

excellent

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/20/2020 5:27:00 AM

Thank you, Mahtab!

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/19/2020 11:15:00 PM

And then they all fall down. Got dizzy with all the play? ~~

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/20/2020 5:30:00 AM

One 8 year old kid stood up on the tire swing and his brother or friend spun him for like 5 minutes. Astronaut material?

John Watt

Date: 9/19/2020 10:07:00 PM

Sounds like a fun autumn day, Kim!

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/20/2020 5:31:00 AM

Yes! We can use such refreshing days...may they be many! Blessings to you, my friend! I shall catch up with poetry reading soon. Been a little busy but that’s good. <3

Heidi Sands

Date: 9/19/2020 2:02:00 PM

Excellent Tanka. I love the dizzy dance of leaves. Well done :)

Kim Rodrigues
Date: 9/19/2020 4:53:00 PM

Thank you, Heidi!I want to fall into the whole pile!