Notes About The Poem

Poetry soup syllable counter counts eight syllables in the eighth line - I do not see how.

howmanysyllables.com counts eight syllables in line three - again - I do not see how.

Distant Rumblings - For Choka Contest

Distant Rumblings 


A distant rumbling
slowly turns unwary heads,
anticipation’s curtsy
awaiting stillness.
Homage before the deluge.
The delicate staccato,
of clouded future,
cold touch, a victor’s mercy,
counting coup on flower beds.


7/18/2016

submitted to – Compose a Choka – Poetry Contest
sponsor – Janis Thompson
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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A. Sharma Avatar
August 5, 2016 at 8:45 AM
Congrats John for a deserved win with this lovely choka !!
Kimathi Avatar
July 27, 2016 at 5:57 AM
Congrats John, for your fine placement with this choka!! ;-)
Haight Avatar
July 24, 2016 at 5:30 PM
John, congratulations on your podium win in the 'Choka' contest! Sandra
Lawless Avatar
July 25, 2016 at 10:51 AM
Thanks Sandra
Leiser Avatar
July 24, 2016 at 5:05 PM
Congrats on your win, John :)
Lawless Avatar
July 25, 2016 at 10:51 AM
thanks Laura, appreciate your stopping by
Allison Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 9:05 PM
I only use how many syllables as I find TPS one is unreliable - I can't understand the error with line 3 I make it 7 syllables:-) Congrats on your win:-) hugs jan xx
Medders Tobechi Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 7:20 PM
Poetry soup syllable counter is usually wrong. It sometimes counts past tense endings and certain punctuation marks. About 70% correct.
Medders Tobechi Avatar
July 23, 2016 at 7:17 PM
Well written! Congratulations and thanks for being in the contest.
Lawless Avatar
July 25, 2016 at 10:50 AM
Thanks for the theme and the challenge of the form.
Quigley Avatar
July 18, 2016 at 10:08 PM
"Delicate staccato" and "counting coup"--awesome!
Lawless Avatar
July 19, 2016 at 6:27 AM
Thanks Tom, a tricky little write these Choka
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