Displacement

zephry wisps rising eyelids flicker in soft breeze gardenia aswirl Howmanysyllables 5/7/5 group #2

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/11/2023 5:15:00 AM

Pretty! Congratulations!

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/11/2023 10:09:00 AM

In a nutshell! Thank you Kim, cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 8/10/2023 1:31:00 PM

ah, the gardenia. Always so fragrant... Nice write David! Congratulations! :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/10/2023 1:52:00 PM

Isn’t it just, overpowering sometimes, all the better Linda, thank you so much, cheers David

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/10/2023 1:23:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning work in my contest. Thank you for participating. Sara

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/10/2023 1:50:00 PM

Thanks for the thumbs up Sara, I’m delighted for sure, was a tricky one, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 8/10/2023 11:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A wonderful Haiku write. Have a great day.............

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/10/2023 1:51:00 PM

Thank you Paula, I’m delighted cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 8/7/2023 8:58:00 PM

If that zephyr carries a whiff of gardenia, it will be a scent divine. Good Haiku, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/8/2023 1:02:00 AM

It certainly would be Lin, I found this one difficult to equate with the prompt words, and if I managed a little divinity, was probably through serendipity, cheers David

Yann Rolland

Date: 8/7/2023 2:11:00 PM

beautiful haiku, lovely image, thanks a lot

David Kavanagh
Date: 8/7/2023 2:15:00 PM

You’re very welcome Yann, and thank you for stopping by for a read, cheers David