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Displacement

zephry wisps rising 
  eyelids flicker in soft breeze
           gardenia aswirl 



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Kim Rodrigues

August 11, 2023 at 5:15 AM

Pretty! Congratulations!

David Kavanagh

August 11, 2023 at 10:09 AM

In a nutshell! Thank you Kim, cheers David

Linda Alice Fowler

August 10, 2023 at 1:31 PM

ah, the gardenia. Always so fragrant... Nice write David! Congratulations! :)

David Kavanagh

August 10, 2023 at 1:52 PM

Isn’t it just, overpowering sometimes, all the better Linda, thank you so much, cheers David

Sara Kendrick

August 10, 2023 at 1:23 PM

Congratulations on your winning work in my contest. Thank you for participating. Sara

David Kavanagh

August 10, 2023 at 1:50 PM

Thanks for the thumbs up Sara, I’m delighted for sure, was a tricky one, cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

August 10, 2023 at 11:09 AM

Congratulations on your win. A wonderful Haiku write. Have a great day.............

David Kavanagh

August 10, 2023 at 1:51 PM

Thank you Paula, I’m delighted cheers David

Lin Lane

August 7, 2023 at 8:58 PM

If that zephyr carries a whiff of gardenia, it will be a scent divine. Good Haiku, David.

David Kavanagh

August 8, 2023 at 1:02 AM

It certainly would be Lin, I found this one difficult to equate with the prompt words, and if I managed a little divinity, was probably through serendipity, cheers David