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Pick-A-Title, Vol 39 Poetry Contest

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Disorientation

Disorientated means spinning spiral
you feel your life out of control.
Disorientated sounds like weeping late nights
when you know you can't fix what was messed up.
Disorientated feels like an elephant sitting on your chest
when you are doing everything to escape and improve.
Disorientated smells like burnt popcorn
when you are trying to host a party.
Disorientated taste like sour milk with a side of rotten eggs
when you wanted a savory breakfast of an omelet and fried potatoes.
Disorientation is the spiders web in a forest tree,
and when you are disorientated you are the fly it catches.
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Ibeh Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 11:00 AM
Heartiest congratulations on your win with this awesome poem, Miranda:-) I really liked it. Bravo!
Hawley Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 12:46 PM
Glad you choose my poem for a winner in your contest, thanks!
George Avatar
October 13, 2023 at 12:35 AM
So very powerful. All the analogies you have used to express a disoriented state are very apt. "Disorientation is the spiders web in a forest tree, and when you are disorientated you are the fly it catches. " Very powerful image, dear Miranda!
Hawley Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 12:47 PM
Glad you like my analogies. Thanks!
Dietrich Avatar
October 1, 2023 at 9:48 PM
Oh wow. The last part was a zinger I see you liked the same word as I did. Good job with it.
Hawley Avatar
October 15, 2023 at 12:47 PM
Glad you like the zinger I had at the end. Thanks!
Mcintosh Avatar
September 30, 2023 at 8:18 PM
Wonderful writing God bless you. Love, Gina
Hawley Avatar
September 30, 2023 at 9:22 PM
Thank you very much.
Poet Avatar
September 30, 2023 at 7:26 AM
Your understanding of what it means to be disoriented is quite varied and really pertinent. Really impressive work.
Hawley Avatar
September 30, 2023 at 2:55 PM
Thank you and I am glad you found it pertinent. The varied part is because I decided to put it all to the senses literally all 5 senses.
Situation Avatar
September 30, 2023 at 6:23 AM
At this very moment watching Moby Dick. The man falls over board and is never seen again. Funny I should be reading this.
Buhagiar Avatar
September 29, 2023 at 8:50 AM
You give many meanings to disorientated. All are very pertinent. Well done.
Hawley Avatar
September 29, 2023 at 10:40 AM
Glad you found my definitions pertinent.
Poet Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 7:07 AM
Miranda, I must commend you on this incredibly ingenious poem about the disoriented. It is truly remarkable and brilliantly crafted. Thanks for your uplifting comment on my page
Hawley Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 11:47 AM
Thanks so much.
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