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Disorientation

Disorientated means spinning spiral
you feel your life out of control.
Disorientated sounds like weeping late nights
when you know you can't fix what was messed up.
Disorientated feels like an elephant sitting on your chest
when you are doing everything to escape and improve.
Disorientated smells like burnt popcorn
when you are trying to host a party.
Disorientated taste like sour milk with a side of rotten eggs
when you wanted a savory breakfast of an omelet and fried potatoes.
Disorientation is the spiders web in a forest tree,
and when you are disorientated you are the fly it catches.

Copyright © Miranda Hawley | Year Posted 2023

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Edward Ibeh Date: 10/15/2023 11:00:00 AM Heartiest congratulations on your win with this awesome poem, Miranda:-) I really liked it. Bravo! Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 10/15/2023 12:46:00 PM Glad you choose my poem for a winner in your contest, thanks!

Valsa George Date: 10/13/2023 12:35:00 AM So very powerful. All the analogies you have used to express a disoriented state are very apt. "Disorientation is the spiders web in a forest tree, and when you are disorientated you are the fly it catches. " Very powerful image, dear Miranda! Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 10/15/2023 12:47:00 PM Glad you like my analogies. Thanks!

Andrea Dietrich Date: 10/1/2023 9:48:00 PM Oh wow. The last part was a zinger I see you liked the same word as I did. Good job with it. Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 10/15/2023 12:47:00 PM Glad you like the zinger I had at the end. Thanks!

Regina Mcintosh Date: 9/30/2023 8:18:00 PM Wonderful writing God bless you. Love, Gina Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 9/30/2023 9:22:00 PM Thank you very much.

Sotto Poet Date: 9/30/2023 7:26:00 AM Your understanding of what it means to be disoriented is quite varied and really pertinent. Really impressive work. Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 9/30/2023 2:55:00 PM Thank you and I am glad you found it pertinent. The varied part is because I decided to put it all to the senses literally all 5 senses.

The Situation Date: 9/30/2023 6:23:00 AM At this very moment watching Moby Dick. The man falls over board and is never seen again. Funny I should be reading this. Login to Reply

Victor Buhagiar Date: 9/29/2023 8:50:00 AM You give many meanings to disorientated. All are very pertinent. Well done. Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 9/29/2023 10:40:00 AM Glad you found my definitions pertinent.

Sotto Poet Date: 9/28/2023 7:07:00 AM Miranda, I must commend you on this incredibly ingenious poem about the disoriented. It is truly remarkable and brilliantly crafted. Thanks for your uplifting comment on my page Login to Reply Miranda Hawley Date: 9/28/2023 11:47:00 AM Thanks so much.