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Diseased

I came to you an imprish sprite A unicorn of delight But instead of protecting me You infected me And made me a leper in disguise **Received Honorable Mention in "a 1 to 8 poem" contest

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Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/21/2013 4:11:00 PM

Very well written and I applaud your use of metaphor. Well done. Congratulations on your featured poem of the week :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/21/2013 9:11:00 AM

Susan, Congratulations on your featured poem of the week. enjoy life with smiles :-) love <3 LINDA

April Gabriella

Date: 7/18/2013 7:50:00 PM

This I like! Such a wonderful write. Great work!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/8/2011 7:27:00 PM

this is imaginative and different. Cool win to read here. Congrats to you. Luv, Andrea

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/29/2011 4:50:00 AM

Congratulations Susan on your win in the contest sponsored by Brian Strand. Love, Carol

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/28/2011 3:59:00 PM

Interesting one..Enjoyed reading this eve..Congrats..Sara

Dr Hitendra Mehta

Date: 6/6/2011 11:26:00 PM

Gud one Susan...protector infecting ! Best luck for contest.Thanks for kind words on my verse, "Monopoly game of Life". Luv & best wishes - Hitendra Mehta

Jack Horne

Date: 6/6/2011 11:40:00 AM

a cool and unnerving write, Susan

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/6/2011 9:26:00 AM

This one made me think, Susan-- very intriguing write :) enjoyed reading this :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/29/2011 4:06:00 PM

Susan, good luck with your enjoyed entry,..p.d.

James Foulk

Date: 5/20/2011 7:01:00 PM

a great write learned some new words, enjoyed this one.

James Fraser

Date: 5/17/2011 2:00:00 PM

Images of sadness flow in this rhyme Susan, fine poetry - good luck in Brian's contest.....:)

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 5/16/2011 5:47:00 PM

A tragic scenario in this poem, Susan. Good luck in Brian's contest. I have not seen it as yet. Thank you for your comments

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/16/2011 1:21:00 PM

Sad, touchy and poignant piece, Susan

Jack Horne

Date: 5/16/2011 1:04:00 PM

Sad, but very powerful write, Susan.

Elaine George

Date: 5/16/2011 12:37:00 PM

Very powerful and emotional piece, Susan. Best wishes in Brian's contest. Also, I want to thank you for your kind comments. Lainie

Kash Poet

Date: 5/16/2011 11:22:00 AM

This is excellent Susan.Enjoyed.Thanks for your kind comment at my page.....

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/16/2011 9:27:00 AM

Very profound, Susan. Many people will be able to relate to this message -- and in many different ways. I'm sure your insightful poem will do well in Brian's contest. Wishing you success! (And thanks for your comments on Daniel. He was a great man.) Love, Carolyn

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/16/2011 9:21:00 AM

thankxx so very much for your exquisite remarks on my poetry Susan.. very compelling and meaningful luv.. thankxx...

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 5/16/2011 9:20:00 AM

So like this one Susan.. interesting theory in your lines luv.. good luck in the contest .. great title..

Gwendolen Song

Date: 5/16/2011 8:55:00 AM

Your poem proves this book I am reading correct-It's called poetry for DUmmies (that's me). It says when you read a poem to have certain tools in hand. ONe of them is a dictionary to look up interesting new words. lol. I am now lookin up imprish and sprite. ha ha. Ok....I get this NOW! Awesome.....Brian will certainly like it too! HIgh 5! Gwendolen

Leo Larry Amadore

Date: 5/16/2011 8:43:00 AM

An interesting work, with several levels of meaning, well worded and mellifluous...