discombobulation in aisle 16

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Discombobulation Poetry Contest
Sponsored by Fire Bird 01/29/24 hms

give me your aorta ~ and in exchange i will give you a nice pulse said the kidney bean to a cabbage heart ~ as it openly convulsed but the black eyed peas protested violently ~ acting with impulse of course i needed a leek pretty bad ~ and suddenly felt repulsed

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/30/2024 11:37:00 AM

Lots going on on aisle 16. Diverting my eyes…lol

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/30/2024 11:48:00 AM

Perhaps aisle 16 between my gyri and sulci Kim lol, cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/30/2024 9:40:00 AM

Puns of funs. A real arty-choke, a creative vegetable turnup. Interesting what you addressed in this discombobulated piece. Clean up in aisle 16! Cleverly good, David

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/30/2024 10:21:00 AM

And a cleverly good comment too Anaya, artychoke and turnups indeed! Yeah took a bit of figuring out, but once the discombobulation thoughts came, I knew I was onto something, so recombobulated it into this, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 1/30/2024 6:59:00 AM

A heart resuscitation on aisle 16 by EMTs... Eggplant, Mango and Turnip. Another will be needed after eating beans and cabbage. That could lead to convulsing bowels. Peas got black eyes from their violent protest. That's what happens when they act on impulse. After all that, a trip to the bathroom would definitely be needed. Sounds like all the produce in that grocery store are discombobulated. Wily and witty, David.

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/30/2024 8:47:00 AM

Yes indeed that’s the way it happens! Just one single garbled thought and away we go, the muse is a most peculiar oddity

Lin Lane
Date: 1/30/2024 8:05:00 AM

I’ve found that sometimes what I consider some of my best flew in from left field and demanded I run the bases in a counter clockwise direction. Maybe I have a muse after all.

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/30/2024 7:30:00 AM

Crazy Shenanigans going on in aisle 16 Lin, think I may have been (caught short), and was quite repulsed by the ensuing (leek) lol, you know I have absolutely no idea where on earth this one came from, but am happy with how it turned out, gotta love your comment though! Cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 1/30/2024 4:52:00 AM

Did the title change or am I just tuning in for the day? Read it earlier and liked what I saw but didn't quite know what to comment, now it's aligned to the contest it has an air of genius :) I started writing for this one but it all felt very obvious so I set it down - this however is just artistic interpretation executed with skill. I applaud you :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/30/2024 5:23:00 AM

Yeah it had a different title (all first responders to aisle 16) but I could see more discombobulation in it, and wasn’t happy, so changed the title and added another monoku for good measure, I hope they are the seal applauds, I really like them ones lol, thanks so much for your high praise, I am truly humbled, cheers David