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And this boundless moment arrives For late noon’s sunset to drop its glimmer-- In one final hour, the immense ray succumbs Clutching with it a vastness, brilliant; And the hue of moonshine daintily peeps, That through sky’s tableau, a portrait hangs low While this juncture between daytime and evening Invites me to render a prayer of hope, As the red-gold sundown chants mildly From its final dip to hum: “ Radiate within!" Upon the prologue of a time, I ache ; For sunset’s immense beauty vanishing Red- orange like a mantle, widespread, Now all flushed under city quay's bed Leaving me in tears as it slowly drowns. Broken Wing's Form V - Verse Me A Poem 10/2/2017

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Date: 10/5/2017 12:08:00 PM
A moving poem filled with beautiful images Nette.
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Date: 10/4/2017 11:23:00 PM
Congratulations, Nette on your great win with such a beautiful poem on sunset.
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Date: 10/4/2017 6:18:00 PM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest with this beautifully penned poem !
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Date: 10/4/2017 1:19:00 PM
You wear words like a golden necklace, Nette...they sparkle in their deliverance! I love the imagery, and I'm especially touched by the final stanza. Hugs // paul
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Date: 10/2/2017 6:18:00 AM
I can feel the emotions oozing out my pours with this deep emotive write my friend! I am in awe of its splendor by it's powerful words of wonder this morning! I loved this piece, Great Work!!
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Date: 10/2/2017 12:46:00 AM
Such a gripping title and it holds onto you all the way through. I definitely agree with everyone else here, such a great write! Love, Juli-Michelle
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Date: 10/1/2017 6:04:00 PM
A beautiful poem full of emotion with the vanishing of the sunset. BONA FORTUNA!
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Date: 10/1/2017 4:19:00 PM
Beautifully written and filled with emotion. Good luck in the contest Nette :)
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Date: 10/1/2017 4:10:00 PM
Spectacular poem Nette in its imagery and emotion building up to your extraordinary last line wondrous glory. Love it and enjoyed it. Good luck in the contest! :)
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Date: 10/1/2017 3:53:00 PM
I usually watch sunset after a day's work. It shows me how light transforms in darkness, and vice-versa. This to me is a masterpiece of a poem tender, vulnerbale, excellent!
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Date: 10/1/2017 2:51:00 PM
- There's nothing like a beautiful sunset to end a lovely day :) - A beautiful poem, Nette :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - happy hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 10/1/2017 2:15:00 PM
A lot of lovely imagery in this poem--words move emotion--best for a win, nette!
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Date: 10/1/2017 1:38:00 PM
Not only does this have great imagery, it is a beautifil emotive deep poem..
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Date: 10/1/2017 12:31:00 PM
Tremendously inviting me to sunset-gaze and reflect on its beauty. This verse mirrors your poignant diction!
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