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Unfurling your fingers like petals in sun
I look at your palm and scream what have you done
There beating my heart you have ripped from my chest
I knew you’d be different from all the rest.

Written 6/8/2018

For Contest:    When a 4th Line Helps It To Rhyme
Sponsor:         Silent One

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Date: 9/16/2018 9:12:00 PM
Such a lovely beautiful write Judith, I enjoyed reading through this about six times, so nice. loved it. ...btw congratulations on the win :)
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Date: 8/1/2018 10:03:00 AM
Ahh, this poem is really beautiful and it has a immense impact on reader's mind, I see that it has won a contest, so many congratulations on your well deserved win, it is indeed a beauty and certainly a joy to read, good luck and have a really nice day
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Date: 7/5/2018 1:35:00 PM
Very intimate write, Judith. A tastefully done reveal. Love and smiles always.
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Date: 6/29/2018 11:10:00 PM
A gripping write my friend...congrats! on your win & light...^WW^
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Date: 6/29/2018 2:17:00 AM
An emotion filled verse, Judith. That is what I love in poetry. Belated congrats on your win in the contest. T.J
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Date: 6/26/2018 9:31:00 PM
Wow! Judy, your poem is as emotionally powerful as it is poetically beautiful. Such captivating and intense imagery in so few lines. A dramatic and excellent write. Belated congratulations on your wonderful win my N.E. friend! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 6/16/2018 10:24:00 AM
wow, this one has an impact!! Congrats on your win , Judith.
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Date: 6/14/2018 8:46:00 PM
Wonderful write, Judith !:-) Congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve ~’*
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Date: 6/13/2018 7:28:00 AM
Congratulations for your win Judith :)
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Date: 6/13/2018 7:14:00 AM
Congratulations Judith. Tom.
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Date: 6/13/2018 7:13:00 AM
- Congratulations on your little rhyme poem, Judith :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 6/13/2018 6:59:00 AM
Sounds like love to me... Great first line Judy.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 6/12/2018 2:12:00 AM
Nice four liner Judith, but sad too. Tom
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Date: 6/11/2018 4:24:00 PM
Well done Judy..wonderful depiction of love-interest in just a few words.
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Date: 6/11/2018 12:11:00 PM
Great one Judy, Take your heart back and move on xxoo
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Date: 6/11/2018 11:21:00 AM
He took what are you going to do...Nice one...All the best Judith
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