Notes About The Poem

Looking into the eclipse lost alone sharing my soul 

Diamond Smiles Deep Beautiful

Seagulls rush inland crying birds 
gathering on the highest peaks perching 
then silence takes hold as darkness envelopes

Today watching the eclipse all alone crowning someone special
warm inside deep thought hope a thousand miles away
grace of beauty tears drop in a silent wish 

Held within breathless whispers deeply a cold breeze blowing kiss
dark mixing with light in a harrow crescent as the moon moves 
in front sparkling diamond smiles sunshine thoughts of sharing love

Sad memories drifting clouds pulling deeply tides turn 
angel rays brightly sparkling treasure feelings inside the ocean 
swells warm waves hand of a greater being touches one glowing dream

unrhymed trycet
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Yvonne Avatar
April 4, 2015 at 9:36 AM
Great poem. Liam I visited your page today because I had a feeling you were experiencing some pain. I am going through a rough patch right now. Thank God I got my daughter back into rehab. After 11 months she relapsed. I did not find out until three months later. It took me a long difficult month to finally convince her she needed to get help again. I want you to know that I have a strong feeling that you are about to start a new chapter in your life. A positive new time. A Fav!
Mcdaid Avatar
April 6, 2015 at 4:07 AM
yeah my heart is not full maurice full of love yes but deeply hurt by someones actions whom i loved dearly god be with your daughter she is in my prayers i can relate in the demons of addiction in my niece thanking his holiness she has chosen a new route my path dear friend is a long road as i am deep in prayer that the truth will shine in the end passing you a warm smile pal
Horne Avatar
March 28, 2015 at 7:27 AM
beautiful write tinged with sadness - really love it
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 12:39 PM
yeah jack sadness holding love deeply free from hate wonderful comment wishing you a blessed week
Hunjeri Avatar
March 26, 2015 at 10:17 AM
Beauty all over your poem. I enjoyed!
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 12:27 PM
ah njeri your so sweet thank you kindly wishing you a blessed week
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
March 25, 2015 at 11:18 PM
Beautiful imagery and a feeling of great hope to overcome the sadness...hugs, Rhonda
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 12:02 PM
hope is always the light that holds the tunnels end smiling thank you rhonda for the wonderful comment wishing you a blessed week
Gasun Avatar
March 24, 2015 at 10:20 AM
Amazing write my very dear friend, Liam! I thoroughly enjoyed! Thank you so much for sharing! I'm sorry for coming late! Belated happy St. Patrick's Day as well to you ( I almost forgot 'cuz of relentless pressure of work at school. I'm sorry) Have a blessed day to you and your loved ones/family! love lots and biggest hugs, Leonora
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 11:39 AM
ah leonora never be sorry always a pleasure your beautiful comments not on line as much these days myself wishing you a blessed week passing you a warm smile thank you
Hamilton Avatar
March 23, 2015 at 6:40 PM
profound poem dear friend love it hugs 7
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 11:03 AM
always a pleasure to see you linda sending you a warm smile thank you dear friend
Maverick Avatar
March 23, 2015 at 1:34 PM
Hello Liam, you sure covered a lot of ground description wise here, and I think it will take a lot to eclipse this write Hey..'great work mate..
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:54 AM
hi joe yeah the eclipse held me in the deep gravity of truth wonderful heartfelt comment bless you dear friend
La France Avatar
March 23, 2015 at 8:50 AM
liam, your poem is very visual with a haunting loneliness, a perfect 7 rating from me and thanks so much for visiting my poem, weeping . . .
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:41 AM
so very true your words but in the loneliness love dwells a faraway dream shines wonderful comment dear friend wishing you a beautiful week
Hopper Avatar
March 23, 2015 at 8:26 AM
Every word is lovely! Beautifully written
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:35 AM
thank you so kindly anna deeply appreciated
Roper Avatar
March 23, 2015 at 8:25 AM
I always enjoyed sitting on the sandy beach and watching the seagulls fly around the fishing boats and watch the waves come in such a wonderful soothing feeling. Love your poem. Blessings eve
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:31 AM
blessings to you also eve yeah love listening to the seagulls cry deeply laments flow over the deep ocean sings mixed with waves a song of beauty thank you kindly dear friend for the truly beautiful comment wishing you a lovely week
Dietrich Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 11:34 PM
Lovely imagery, my friend. Love how you brought the recent eclipse into it.
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:22 AM
ahh thank you andrea looking at the eclipse i just penned my thoughts wonderful comment dear friend deeply appreciated
Smith Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 5:22 PM
Beautiful penned my friend...cheers Tim
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 10:20 AM
thank you tim dear pal wishing you a lovely week beautiful comment deeply appreciated
Pinet Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 5:11 PM
This poem is innovative, captivating and three dimensional in character. Good word choices moving the reader with their impact. Emile.
Mcdaid Avatar
March 30, 2015 at 8:04 AM
ah thank you emile your so kind dear friend wonderful comment wishing you a beautiful week
Chircop Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 4:20 PM
I love how there is always a beautiful positive ending in your poems even after an eclipse of sad memories-Beautiful
Mcdaid Avatar
March 29, 2015 at 12:50 PM
why dwell in the darkness charmaine when the light of beauty always shines at the tunnels end love always smiles excellent comment dear pal deeply appreciated
Andresen Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 2:51 PM
- A deep and beautiful poem my dear friend Liam - The beauty of life is what happens between the waves .... and the clouds :) - Diamond smile and a 7+ // Anne-Lise :)
Mcdaid Avatar
March 29, 2015 at 12:47 PM
life always holds beauty in each awakening day to see the sunlight a deep gift the eclipse smiled inside a dream wonderful comment anne lise wishing you a blessed sunday pal
Petersen Potter Avatar
March 22, 2015 at 2:11 PM
Hi Liam! Such a very beautiful love poem penned by you my dearest friend.Just dazzling! Love it!Another diamond from your pen! A huge 7 +++ from me! A very romantic passionate positive love poem filled of warmth beautiful love dreams and hopes to be held so very close to ones heart. smiling. Awesome piece! Enjoyed! Powerful imagery! Very deep and profound. Truly a mighty golden pen! Wishing you the best in everything! To me you're always the best Liam! So very beautiful romantic gentle and sweet! Wishing you a very lovely evening!In his light! God bless you always! :) Love n' hugs! xoxox D.^O^
Mcdaid Avatar
March 29, 2015 at 12:44 PM
thank you dorian dear pal for the very beautiful comment in his light bless you deeply appreciated
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