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Devils of Doubt

1 I sit with her on the river bank on the green grass on a summer day afternoon we sit under the trees, in the shade enjoying the breeze 2 then she reaches her hand to hold mine and be surprised that she is telling me while looking in my eyes, and in hers that glow "i love you" 3 " i love you" she said to me " i love you"?! why did she say to me " i love you"?! why me?! 4 I'm not the most handsome man nor the strongest nor the smartest nor the richest so why did she then say to me " i love you"?! 5 is she deceiving me?! but why is she deceiving me?! to have fun?! to have a thrilling story to tell her friends so all of them can laugh at that idiot that thought somebody like her would love him?! 6 the blood is boiling in my veins and my mind is on fire then i look at her, while I'm igniting while I'm burning and I'm about even to.... slap her on her face!! and tell her that i uncovered her plan that I'm not an idiot! 7 then i look at her and find that same glow in her eyes and she says to me again softly " i love you" 8 so between actions i see and intentions i deem i remain confused hesitant doubtful not knowing with what to answer 9 then i wonder at the devils of doubt and how can them ruin even the happiest moments in life

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Date: 7/26/2017 6:48:00 PM
Ahh those doubting devils - a total pain - lovely heart felt write -hope you did a "Better to have loved - than never loved at all" - Indiana x x x
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Mohamed Adel
Date: 7/27/2017 3:46:00 AM
Thank you,Indiana, so much and i think i agree with you :)
Date: 5/31/2017 6:00:00 PM
Great narrative free verse. And what harm those devils do to our relationships!
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Mohamed Adel
Date: 6/1/2017 4:51:00 AM
Thank you, Cecelia, so much and yes what harm they do! :)
Date: 5/31/2017 5:56:00 PM
Oh yes, those devils of doubt that say as they pluck out petals, "she loves me, she loves me not, she loves me...after all" Congrats on your great write!
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Mohamed Adel
Date: 6/1/2017 4:48:00 AM
Thank you, Kim, so much and yes it seems like them :)
Date: 5/14/2017 10:27:00 PM
Tres bien, sabah al noor
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Mohamed Adel
Date: 5/15/2017 6:03:00 AM
Thank you, Etienne, so much and sabah al yasmin :)
Date: 5/14/2017 10:23:00 PM
Mohamed, with this poem you have touched humanity and romance, you have explored self doubts, and yet, you give us reason to hope, I truly lobed this poem!
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Mohamed Adel
Date: 5/15/2017 5:58:00 AM
Thank you, Arthur, so much for stopping by and such sweet compliments, glad you liked it :)

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