Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

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This is purely written for an on-line competition. I am thankful I do not suffer, but have friends who do.

Jan x

Depression

Dark clouded thoughts are dashing round in my head
Should I end it all – would I be better off dead
The tablets helped for a little while
On good days I could even raise a smile

Depression looms over me like an angry black cloud
Some days all I do is scream and cry out loud
If I ended it all would anyone cry
Do they really care if I live or die

I’ve tried to end my life once before
I was found me helpless on the kitchen floor
They kept me in hospital my life was on the brink
They gave me some treatment and got me a shrink

But no matter what they do or say
My depression it is here to stay
Oh how I crave for normality
To have a job, even raise a family

But pill popping and black thoughts are all I know
Things from my past haunt me from so many years ago
There is no colour in my life its all just black and white
Shall I give in to depression and give up this earthly fight

Jan Allison
13th March 2014
Written for an on-line competition – NOT from personal experience.
~ please see my notes above about this poem~

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Michelle Smith May 6, 2023 at 4:09 PM reasons2live. org :)

Michelle Smith May 6, 2023 at 4:08 PM Mother "Mary can be compared to a beautiful ray of sunshine on a cloudy afternoon." (St. Jean Vianney). "O Mary, you are the Sunshine of our lives. Let your rays of grace shine into my heart and cast out the darkness of sin and despair. Let me hope always in you." (Mary Day by Day prayerbook). Mary, be a mother to me now. (Prayer of Mother Teresa). Mary, lead me closer to your Son's Heart. Mother Mary you're the exemplar mother-in-law for all us ladies who are in love with Jesus. Jesus, forgive!

Cynthia Jones April 13, 2015 at 4:28 PM Jan, I go through bouts of depression, but not so bad I have to take meds for it. Great write. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia Jan Allison April 13, 2015 at 4:33 PM My sister suffers so I can sympathise - thankfully I do not have this problem - i do have bad days when i am low ... don't we all ... but Ido not suffer from depression.:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kathryn Collins March 24, 2014 at 7:51 AM too real for comment. Jan Allison March 24, 2014 at 11:39 AM Thanks for the comment Kathryn came simply out my head am so glad I don't suffer. Hugs Jan xxx

Maxine Jones March 18, 2014 at 3:15 PM WOW, so powerful Jan, I can relate to this, I feel like this is about me, I hope whoever this is about has found that life is precious and of course, people would cry, I learn't that talking is a great thing, bottling it up is not good. a great poem that touched my heart massively Jan, very well written hunnie :) Maxine xxx Jan Allison March 18, 2014 at 5:58 PM Was written from reading stuff and other people's experience not from mine - was purely written for an on line competition. Jan x

Robert Andrew Lyle March 13, 2014 at 4:22 PM This is a very good write if you have never suffered from depression Jan as from first hand experience you need to go there to understand it fully. Great piece . Andy Jan Allison March 13, 2014 at 4:37 PM Thanks for the positive comments Robert. I am very lucky Robert its based purely on things I read and experience of others - like a lot of my work. Happy reading and writing Jan xxx

Paul Callus March 13, 2014 at 12:08 PM Very well presented. Depression is hard to cope with, and many are those who suffer it endlessly. I know what it means...I had to deal with some such cases. // paul Jan Allison March 13, 2014 at 12:34 PM Thanks for the comment Paul. i actually found this very hard to write - it's taken about 10 days on and off - a difficult subject to tackle. I hope I have done a good job. Jan x

Sandip Goswami March 13, 2014 at 5:02 AM Well written dear...In poetry " I " means " You "...A true poet tries to write universal pains , loves , attitude etc . These may not be related with his personal life . Poet hear the voice of nature , people , things etc in the universe . Truly I have a great mother , lovely wife and intelligent son ...So I try to realize the world with my consciousness ...I do believe that poetry is true history of the people on that time...Best wishes from India...I am grateful... Jan Allison March 13, 2014 at 5:17 AM Thank you for your lovely comments Sandip and best wishes from the Isle of Man xxxxx

Matthew Anish March 12, 2014 at 9:27 PM You write powerfully in this poem - even more so since it is not an autobiographical piece. Nice going! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Jan Allison March 12, 2014 at 9:30 PM Thanks for the lovely comment Matthew. I hope its something I never experience. Thanks for dropping by Jan xxxx