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Dented Cans

There is something to savour in that very first nick blemish scratch dent What ever it may be it's yours now baptized utilized broken in There is utter liberation a tossing of fears as pristine can't dented can 17.12.23 Composed for John Lawless' "Dented Cans"

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Line Gauthier

Date: 4/19/2018 10:35:00 PM

Congrats on your win with this unique piece, Maureen. Well done.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 4/20/2018 6:32:00 AM

Thank you! Oh, to practice what I preach, that first nick in my new KitchenAid mixer... I felt a little what a first scratch on a Mercedes feels like LOL! ;p xo!

Jan Allison

Date: 1/13/2018 4:44:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 1/13/2018 12:23:00 PM

Maureen, the sharp breaks and concise format accentuated the shapes of the lines. Very nicely done and thanks for participating in the contest

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 1/13/2018 3:31:00 PM

Thank you John! Your contest was a delight! All the best xomo :)

Craig Cornish

Date: 12/31/2017 3:09:00 PM

Love the mind twist here, the jux ... this is almost, no, it is Haiku/Senryu on steroids. Forget the syllable count on that thought and go modern. There is something to savor/that first nick/dented can. Though anyone with a new anything HATES that first dent or scratch, years later, like the first spat in a relationship we do have some fond memories no matter---this obviously brought many thoughts, which is the purpose of art.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 1/13/2018 3:26:00 PM

Thank You Craig :) xomo!!

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 12/30/2017 9:02:00 PM

Très magnifique ... merveilleux!! I adore this one, Dear Friend ... I am never disappointed when I open a page of yours ... never. (If only my eyes were as cooperative) <3

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/30/2017 11:51:00 PM

Merci beaucoup mon coeur <3

David Mohn

Date: 12/30/2017 4:59:00 PM

this is splendid Maureen :)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/30/2017 8:21:00 PM

Thank you David :) xomo

Eve Roper

Date: 12/28/2017 10:12:00 PM

very nice, Maureen, luck in the contest. hugs eve

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/30/2017 8:20:00 PM

Thank you Eve :) xo mo

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 12/28/2017 9:11:00 PM

Wonderful gritty realistic write Mo~Good luck in the contest!~Che :)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/30/2017 8:19:00 PM

Thank you Che :) xomo!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/26/2017 3:28:00 PM

Another riveting write by your talented pen, Maureen. Very thought provoking as usual from your deep reservoir of elevated free thinking. God bless your soulful muse ... keep inspiring us to be a better each day. Magnificent poetry. Love and smiles always.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/26/2017 9:47:00 PM

Thank you Freddie, your warmth, support and openness is cherished by me. I am both humbled and elevated my friend. You are one special cool cat my dear! xomo <3

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/25/2017 8:17:00 AM

I work for Land Rover. Often it is the second or third owner who really enjoys the vehicle. They are not afraid of getting them scratched and are willing to use them in the way they were designed to be used. Great poem.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/25/2017 9:19:00 AM

... Or Land Rover, just not sure I have ;)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/25/2017 9:18:00 AM

Exactly! I love the sight of a dirty Jeep :) Thank you Richard xomo!

Robert Lindley

Date: 12/25/2017 8:10:00 AM

Very creative and deep in its delivery my friend. As in some things, do you really own them or even help them , if you havent left your mark(scratch /dent/influence) on them? Amazing depth in such few words!!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/25/2017 9:31:00 AM

Well said my friend. Thank you :) hugs!

Jan Allison

Date: 12/24/2017 5:41:00 PM

Great word play at the end of the poem Mo:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 10:43:00 PM

Thank you Jan :) wishing you peace, love, happiness, health... and laughter wherever you go <3

Silent One

Date: 12/24/2017 2:45:00 PM

Smashed it...

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 3:41:00 PM

tee hee :) thank you dear poet! xomo <3

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/24/2017 12:49:00 PM

Ohh Maureen, this is absolutely amazing with beautiful content and the wordplay in your last stanza and line is just pure bliss. Such an inspired and enchanting write my dear friend. Best wishes for a win!! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 3:40:00 PM

Thank you Susan! I was sure many would relate :) Cheers lovely! xomo <3

Mike Hauser

Date: 12/24/2017 9:15:00 AM

Nice!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 3:37:00 PM

:D thank you!

Tim Smith

Date: 12/24/2017 8:55:00 AM

Nice one Mo....mine has lots of dents

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 9:13:00 AM

Giggles :) thank you Tim! Merry Christmas Greeyings to you xomo!

Joseph May

Date: 12/24/2017 8:23:00 AM

Nicely expressed Maureen...Merry Christmas!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 8:26:00 AM

Thank you Joseph :) xomo!

James Swartz

Date: 12/24/2017 8:11:00 AM

You must have a winner here Maureen. This is a fun poem that is great and so well written. Good luck in the contest.

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib
Date: 12/24/2017 8:25:00 AM

With that I've already won :) thank you my friend! Merry Christmas blessings to you James xomo!

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 12/24/2017 7:57:00 AM

I know I went literal, the contest asked for metaphor and I do LOVE diving into metaphor, but this just tickled my muse too much to resist. Thank you John!