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Dented Cans

There is something to savour
in that very first nick
blemish
scratch

dent

What ever it may be
it's yours now 
baptized
utilized

broken in

There is utter liberation
a tossing of fears
as pristine 
can't

dented can





17.12.23

Composed for John Lawless'
"Dented Cans"

appreciationfreedomintrospectionfree verse

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Line Gauthier

April 19, 2018 at 10:35 PM

Congrats on your win with this unique piece, Maureen. Well done.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

April 20, 2018 at 6:32 AM

Thank you! Oh, to practice what I preach, that first nick in my new KitchenAid mixer... I felt a little what a first scratch on a Mercedes feels like LOL! ;p xo!

Jan Allison

January 13, 2018 at 4:44 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Mo:-) hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

January 13, 2018 at 12:23 PM

Maureen, the sharp breaks and concise format accentuated the shapes of the lines. Very nicely done and thanks for participating in the contest

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

January 13, 2018 at 3:31 PM

Thank you John! Your contest was a delight! All the best xomo :)

Craig Cornish

December 31, 2017 at 3:09 PM

Love the mind twist here, the jux ... this is almost, no, it is Haiku/Senryu on steroids. Forget the syllable count on that thought and go modern. There is something to savor/that first nick/dented can. Though anyone with a new anything HATES that first dent or scratch, years later, like the first spat in a relationship we do have some fond memories no matter---this obviously brought many thoughts, which is the purpose of art.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

January 13, 2018 at 3:26 PM

Thank You Craig :) xomo!!

Gregory Richard Barden

December 30, 2017 at 9:02 PM

Très magnifique ... merveilleux!! I adore this one, Dear Friend ... I am never disappointed when I open a page of yours ... never. (If only my eyes were as cooperative) <3

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 30, 2017 at 11:51 PM

Merci beaucoup mon coeur <3

David Mohn

December 30, 2017 at 4:59 PM

this is splendid Maureen :)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 30, 2017 at 8:21 PM

Thank you David :) xomo

Eve Roper

December 28, 2017 at 10:12 PM

very nice, Maureen, luck in the contest. hugs eve

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 30, 2017 at 8:20 PM

Thank you Eve :) xo mo

Cheryl Hoffman

December 28, 2017 at 9:11 PM

Wonderful gritty realistic write Mo~Good luck in the contest!~Che :)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 30, 2017 at 8:19 PM

Thank you Che :) xomo!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

December 26, 2017 at 3:28 PM

Another riveting write by your talented pen, Maureen. Very thought provoking as usual from your deep reservoir of elevated free thinking. God bless your soulful muse ... keep inspiring us to be a better each day. Magnificent poetry. Love and smiles always.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 26, 2017 at 9:47 PM

Thank you Freddie, your warmth, support and openness is cherished by me. I am both humbled and elevated my friend. You are one special cool cat my dear! xomo <3

Richard Lamoureux

December 25, 2017 at 8:17 AM

I work for Land Rover. Often it is the second or third owner who really enjoys the vehicle. They are not afraid of getting them scratched and are willing to use them in the way they were designed to be used. Great poem.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 25, 2017 at 9:19 AM

... Or Land Rover, just not sure I have ;)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 25, 2017 at 9:18 AM

Exactly! I love the sight of a dirty Jeep :) Thank you Richard xomo!

Robert Lindley

December 25, 2017 at 8:10 AM

Very creative and deep in its delivery my friend. As in some things, do you really own them or even help them , if you havent left your mark(scratch /dent/influence) on them? Amazing depth in such few words!!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 25, 2017 at 9:31 AM

Well said my friend. Thank you :) hugs!

Jan Allison

December 24, 2017 at 5:41 PM

Great word play at the end of the poem Mo:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 10:43 PM

Thank you Jan :) wishing you peace, love, happiness, health... and laughter wherever you go <3

Silent One

December 24, 2017 at 2:45 PM

Smashed it...

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 3:41 PM

tee hee :) thank you dear poet! xomo <3

Susan Ashley

December 24, 2017 at 12:49 PM

Ohh Maureen, this is absolutely amazing with beautiful content and the wordplay in your last stanza and line is just pure bliss. Such an inspired and enchanting write my dear friend. Best wishes for a win!! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 3:40 PM

Thank you Susan! I was sure many would relate :) Cheers lovely! xomo <3

Mike Hauser

December 24, 2017 at 9:15 AM

Nice!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 3:37 PM

:D thank you!

Tim Smith

December 24, 2017 at 8:55 AM

Nice one Mo....mine has lots of dents

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 9:13 AM

Giggles :) thank you Tim! Merry Christmas Greeyings to you xomo!

Joseph May

December 24, 2017 at 8:23 AM

Nicely expressed Maureen...Merry Christmas!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 8:26 AM

Thank you Joseph :) xomo!

James Swartz

December 24, 2017 at 8:11 AM

You must have a winner here Maureen. This is a fun poem that is great and so well written. Good luck in the contest.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 8:25 AM

With that I've already won :) thank you my friend! Merry Christmas blessings to you James xomo!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

December 24, 2017 at 7:57 AM

I know I went literal, the contest asked for metaphor and I do LOVE diving into metaphor, but this just tickled my muse too much to resist. Thank you John!