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Dented Cans

There is something to savour
in that very first nick
blemish
scratch

dent

What ever it may be
it's yours now 
baptized
utilized

broken in

There is utter liberation
a tossing of fears
as pristine 
can't

dented can





17.12.23

Composed for John Lawless'
"Dented Cans"

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Line Gauthier Date: 4/19/2018 10:35:00 PM Congrats on your win with this unique piece, Maureen. Well done. Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 4/20/2018 6:32:00 AM Thank you! Oh, to practice what I preach, that first nick in my new KitchenAid mixer... I felt a little what a first scratch on a Mercedes feels like LOL! ;p xo!

Jan Allison Date: 1/13/2018 4:44:00 PM Dropping back with my congrats Mo:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

John Lawless Date: 1/13/2018 12:23:00 PM Maureen, the sharp breaks and concise format accentuated the shapes of the lines. Very nicely done and thanks for participating in the contest Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 1/13/2018 3:31:00 PM Thank you John! Your contest was a delight! All the best xomo :)

Craig Cornish Date: 12/31/2017 3:09:00 PM Love the mind twist here, the jux ... this is almost, no, it is Haiku/Senryu on steroids. Forget the syllable count on that thought and go modern. There is something to savor/that first nick/dented can. Though anyone with a new anything HATES that first dent or scratch, years later, like the first spat in a relationship we do have some fond memories no matter---this obviously brought many thoughts, which is the purpose of art. Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 1/13/2018 3:26:00 PM Thank You Craig :) xomo!!

Gregory Richard Barden Date: 12/30/2017 9:02:00 PM Très magnifique ... merveilleux!! I adore this one, Dear Friend ... I am never disappointed when I open a page of yours ... never. (If only my eyes were as cooperative) <3 Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/30/2017 11:51:00 PM Merci beaucoup mon coeur <3

David Mohn Date: 12/30/2017 4:59:00 PM this is splendid Maureen :) Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/30/2017 8:21:00 PM Thank you David :) xomo

Eve Roper Date: 12/28/2017 10:12:00 PM very nice, Maureen, luck in the contest. hugs eve Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/30/2017 8:20:00 PM Thank you Eve :) xo mo

Cheryl Hoffman Date: 12/28/2017 9:11:00 PM Wonderful gritty realistic write Mo~Good luck in the contest!~Che :) Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/30/2017 8:19:00 PM Thank you Che :) xomo!

Freddie Robinson Jr. Date: 12/26/2017 3:28:00 PM Another riveting write by your talented pen, Maureen. Very thought provoking as usual from your deep reservoir of elevated free thinking. God bless your soulful muse ... keep inspiring us to be a better each day. Magnificent poetry. Love and smiles always. Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/26/2017 9:47:00 PM Thank you Freddie, your warmth, support and openness is cherished by me. I am both humbled and elevated my friend. You are one special cool cat my dear! xomo <3

Richard Lamoureux Date: 12/25/2017 8:17:00 AM I work for Land Rover. Often it is the second or third owner who really enjoys the vehicle. They are not afraid of getting them scratched and are willing to use them in the way they were designed to be used. Great poem. Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/25/2017 9:19:00 AM ... Or Land Rover, just not sure I have ;) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/25/2017 9:18:00 AM Exactly! I love the sight of a dirty Jeep :) Thank you Richard xomo!

Robert Lindley Date: 12/25/2017 8:10:00 AM Very creative and deep in its delivery my friend. As in some things, do you really own them or even help them , if you havent left your mark(scratch /dent/influence) on them? Amazing depth in such few words!! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/25/2017 9:31:00 AM Well said my friend. Thank you :) hugs!

Jan Allison Date: 12/24/2017 5:41:00 PM Great word play at the end of the poem Mo:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 10:43:00 PM Thank you Jan :) wishing you peace, love, happiness, health... and laughter wherever you go <3

Silent One Date: 12/24/2017 2:45:00 PM Smashed it... Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 3:41:00 PM tee hee :) thank you dear poet! xomo <3

Susan Ashley Date: 12/24/2017 12:49:00 PM Ohh Maureen, this is absolutely amazing with beautiful content and the wordplay in your last stanza and line is just pure bliss. Such an inspired and enchanting write my dear friend. Best wishes for a win!! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 3:40:00 PM Thank you Susan! I was sure many would relate :) Cheers lovely! xomo <3

Mike Hauser Date: 12/24/2017 9:15:00 AM Nice! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 3:37:00 PM :D thank you!

Tim Smith Date: 12/24/2017 8:55:00 AM Nice one Mo....mine has lots of dents Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 9:13:00 AM Giggles :) thank you Tim! Merry Christmas Greeyings to you xomo!

Joseph May Date: 12/24/2017 8:23:00 AM Nicely expressed Maureen...Merry Christmas! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 8:26:00 AM Thank you Joseph :) xomo!

James Swartz Date: 12/24/2017 8:11:00 AM You must have a winner here Maureen. This is a fun poem that is great and so well written. Good luck in the contest. Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 8:25:00 AM With that I've already won :) thank you my friend! Merry Christmas blessings to you James xomo!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 7:57:00 AM I know I went literal, the contest asked for metaphor and I do LOVE diving into metaphor, but this just tickled my muse too much to resist. Thank you John! Login to Reply

Mike Gentile Date: 12/24/2017 7:53:00 AM I totally get this, Maureen, I don't want that liberation but when it inevitably comes, well its a relief, great write !! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 8:00:00 AM Isn't it! Thanks Mike :) Merry Christmas to you! xomo

Vijay Pandit Date: 12/24/2017 6:09:00 AM Impressed by what you created from dented cans--a winning poem in my books. Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 6:27:00 AM It takes a mo... :) Thank you so much Vijay! Merry Christmas my friend. xomo!

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 12/24/2017 2:51:00 AM Very appropriate and beautiful writing for the occasion dearest Maureen. Good luck! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 6:25:00 AM Thank you my dear :) Much love to you Demetrios, Merry Christmas blessings too! I wish you peace in your heart and your garden <3 xomo

Arthur Vaso Date: 12/24/2017 1:26:00 AM Now I really enjoy you take on this, pardon the pun, I sure got a kick out of it!!! Login to Reply Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Date: 12/24/2017 6:13:00 AM Bah ha ha! Let's play! After we get rid of all this snow...