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Demolished

So she drowned in an empty, hollow pool with happy, broken turquoise dolphins - Falling tile and memories of long lost giggled echoes bubbles burst fading times evaporating maternity no one knows but her heart... Reversed Etherre www.scripca.com

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 6/22/2010 8:27:00 AM
very nice write!! enjoyed reading today, so sad.
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Date: 6/21/2010 7:09:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in Andrea Dietrich's contest "Etheree Me" Iolanda. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/21/2010 3:00:00 AM
You sure have some precious lines here Iolanda--very vivid imagery--congrats! --nikko :)
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Date: 6/20/2010 7:34:00 PM
I love the natural flow of this poem and the ending lines. One has to look inside the heart. Congratulations on your success in the contest. Blessings, Joseph
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Date: 6/20/2010 7:17:00 PM
Sad but to the point. Congratulations Iolanda, Love, Joyce
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Date: 6/20/2010 4:17:00 AM
Iolanda, congatulations on your HM in my contest. I thought you had some pretty good imagery in this one! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 6/10/2010 11:09:00 AM
It was a pleasure to read your poetry this morning Iolanda. Wishing you another day filled with inspiration. Love, Carol
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Date: 6/9/2010 11:24:00 PM
'Those long lost giggled echoes' and'evaporating maternity'know one knows but her heart,These verses touched my heart for many reasons,a great writer you are dearest Iolanda,and re your comment on Ruben's,You're on my wedding list and on his too,haha,lol :)!Great poem!Celene!
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Date: 6/9/2010 6:45:00 PM
Nice images aptly used to describe childhood memories to bubble burst burst. A great etheree. Good luck in the contest, Iolanda
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Date: 6/9/2010 4:56:00 PM
Nice one,,enjoyed
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