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Some people seem to be thinking this is about God, so I tried to make it clearer. It's simply a love poem to someone that this person can be completely trusting of.

Since the day our eyes first locked
you held the key to my heart.
I come to you defenseless.

Old barricades I’d put up
tumbled down; you built me up!
I come to you defenseless.

I have trust in all you do.
No fear have I in trusting you.
I come to you defenseless.

Trusting you, I trust myself.
My precious soul mate you are!
I come to you defenseless.

Feb. 19, 2020
Theme title: #2: Defenseless
For Edward Ibeh's Pick-A-Title, Vol 14 - Tristich - Poetry Contest

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Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 5/30/2021 11:17:00 PM

Hi Andrea, This poem is beautiful, I love its repetitive message making it quite clear that your trust in your soulmate is impenetrable - and you came defenceless to this person - great poetry - I also read your Biograpphy and I extremely impressed, you are one seriously famous lady - kudos Andrea my friend. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 5/31/2021 8:40:00 AM

Awwww, you make me blush. I am not famous but I enjoy being known here by trying to be active and joining as many contests as i can. My tiny spot in the world to shine. Don't you love it here?

Pashang Salehi

Date: 2/28/2020 1:49:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea, not only it is beautiful, I learned about Tristich as well...

Mike Bayles

Date: 2/23/2020 2:23:00 PM

Powerful poem, Andrea- I like it.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/22/2020 4:54:00 PM

Ohhh, such sweetness in poetic flow. Remind me of My Tim. Each stanza hit my correct heart spot. Love, CayCay

Jenish Somadas

Date: 2/22/2020 3:04:00 AM

Love will clear all the barricades and you will stand defenseless.. Nicely done Andrea.. Great entry in the contest.. Good luck..

John Watt

Date: 2/20/2020 5:48:00 PM

Vulnerability and trust are very winsome traits. The writer trusts the beloved to provide the defenses they will need in life - "Old barricades I’d put up / tumbled down; you built me up!" WD & GL ~ John

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/20/2020 12:01:00 PM

This is very sweet Andrea. I am not sure I know how to write for this contest. I'm not familiar with this form at all. xxoo

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 2/20/2020 10:18:00 AM

A great write, trusting in someone we love dearly, we are defenseless - a very clever awesome write Andrea. Good luck. Blessings, Jennifer.

Quoth Theraven

Date: 2/20/2020 10:18:00 AM

Andrea, In this write of kindred souls, a wonderful Tristich that has parallels of defenseless trust. Let the barriers come down. I trust you will do well. -Richard

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/20/2020 8:35:00 AM

I thought this is about love--defenseless in the face of its kindness. But God may evoke the same. Either way, Andrea--a lovely poem.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/19/2020 11:27:00 PM

Well written Andrea, a form I've never heard of. Tom

Sanket Jain

Date: 2/19/2020 7:41:00 PM

What an idea. Being defenseless before God is an ideal situation. Refrain in "I come to you defenseless." is suiting. Trusting God is very common and you nailed it. A very sweet short and touching poem. I too showed love and respect towards the almighty. The same is seen in piece too. And thanks for your valuable response to my poem on God. Let us be in touch.