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Deception Unravels

masks fall at midnight

deception unravels....

     cinderella cries



*Entry for Chris's "Yet Another Senryu Contest" (16 syllables)

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Kash Poet

Date: 5/31/2011 11:53:00 AM

Very deep write here..enjoyed.

Andrew Crisci

Date: 10/4/2010 6:48:00 PM

Congratulations, Carolyn on your third place win in Chris's contest. It's another victory added to your glories! Thanks for your kind and welcome comments. Your encouragement and support are very appreciated. Have a blessed day and :). Love and hugs, Andrew.

T.A. Skyles-Theoklapoet

Date: 9/23/2010 1:33:00 PM

Wonderful words that flow together great.A well deserved 3rd.place so a big congrats Carolyn.Teresa

Daniel Cwiak

Date: 9/23/2010 2:15:00 AM

Wonderful work. Congrats, Carolyn, on the win. Dan C

Tahera Mannan

Date: 9/21/2010 9:18:00 PM

Great concept dear friend and thanks for your ever present encouragment. God bless. many congratulations fo your win.

Harry Horsman

Date: 9/21/2010 6:25:00 AM

no deception here, very clever write, love it. congrats for this contest winner. Harry

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/21/2010 4:21:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Chris D. Aechtner's contest "Not Another Senyru Contest!". Love, Carol

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/20/2010 10:52:00 PM

This was lovely. I really like the cinderella story and its image. LUv, Andrea

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 9/20/2010 2:59:00 PM

A wonderful , clever piece..congrats LNC, BG

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 9/20/2010 2:44:00 PM

A wonderful Senryu, congratulations on a well deserved win. Caryl

James Fraser

Date: 9/20/2010 1:23:00 PM

Many congratulations Carolyn with your second place in this toughie of a contest, well deserved >> James :)xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/20/2010 1:21:00 PM

Congratulations on this 2nd place win in the contest, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/20/2010 12:42:00 PM

By jove I think you've got it! Congrad's Light & Love

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/20/2010 12:25:00 PM

Hi Carolyn and super congrats on your win! I think it's pretty cool how you used Cinderella -- nikko :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 9/20/2010 11:17:00 AM

Well done, Carolyn..........I missed this one earlier, but, I may turn into a pumpkin if I don't catch such great entries! :)

Francine Roberts

Date: 9/20/2010 10:21:00 AM

congrats on your win in the contest , awesome job

Katherine Stella

Date: 9/18/2010 11:36:00 AM

oh yes this looks like a sheer winner to me hun gl in contest sad imagery tho cause darn carriage turned into pumpkin also thanks again for your support for my writes keep up the great work my friend

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/18/2010 6:06:00 AM

Love this senryu.. a perfect entry for the contest...luv michael

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/17/2010 11:43:00 AM

Nice mythic theme hear! Tomorrow is Yom Kippur - the Jewsih Day of Atonement - where "all mankind passses before you like a flock of sheep" Hope you are O.K. Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Cas Davis

Date: 9/17/2010 10:31:00 AM

Very nice overall image on so short a canvas. I like!

David Smalling

Date: 9/17/2010 3:31:00 AM

Poem: a sublime write Senryu limits broken Bathes me in delight

Daniel Cwiak

Date: 9/17/2010 1:24:00 AM

Really great, Carolyn! I'm looking forward to reading some other Senryus by You. Keep 'em coming. Dan C

Daver Austin

Date: 9/16/2010 2:05:00 PM

This will be a good one for Halloween - the pumpkin coach and the masks. Good write, Carolyn - lots of speculation here. LOve, Dave

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 9/16/2010 3:09:00 AM

Another Gem like words revealing all that you have left to be imagined by the reader. A great beauty in this brilliant Senryu, my friend. No doubt it should be the best. My good wishes for your contest entry. And many thanks for your precious and lovely comments on Patradoot 40. Hope you would relish the remaining ten parts also of this unique story addressed to a letter. Love and good wishes always….Ravindra………Carolyn Devonshire

Anna-Marie Docherty

Date: 9/15/2010 11:34:00 PM

Bravo, a picture perfect piece as ever! Like this as it excites the muse further too making your reader linger longer on the words and thoughts evoked from them... A wonderful piece as we move towards rehearsal season! Kindest thoguhts, Anna-Marie.

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