Jan Allison Poet Rondeau

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Deception

You walked away; left me in tears,
bitter words ringing in my ears.
I know you took me for a fool
You gave her that costly jewel,
this brought to light my deepest fears.

We’d been married for seven years,
our credit cards had huge arrears
debts mounted up, you were cruel …
you walked away.


I’d seen signs, faint red lipstick smears;
hushed phone calls, so that no one hears.
You laughed it off, acting so cool,
denying breaking any rule. 
Meeting the lads for a few beers…
you walked away

Rondeau Contest
Sponsored by Janice Canerdy

10-11-17

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Stephen Pennell October 22, 2017 at 10:44 AM thats how you do it, very good jan good luck in the comp Jan Allison October 22, 2017 at 7:00 PM Thanks Stephen, I hope I got it right I've only written the form once before:-) hugs jan xx

Mike Gentile October 12, 2017 at 9:03 AM I hope this really did not happen to you, Jan though I know it does. You have described it so well, xxoo Jan Allison October 19, 2017 at 11:55 AM Thankfully its pure fiction Mike:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley October 11, 2017 at 8:18 PM A beautifully expressed adulterous theme in your wonderful rondeau Jan. Good luck in the contest! Jan Allison October 12, 2017 at 8:30 AM Thanks Susan I have only written one other and when i looked i discovered it was on a similar theme, I really should write another one on a different theme:-) hugs jan xx

John Gondolf October 11, 2017 at 4:49 PM Well expressed my friend; it happens far too often in this day and age. Good luck in the contest. Jan Allison October 11, 2017 at 5:17 PM Yes it is sad John, but all too often affairs are the cause of many breakdowns in a marriage or relationship:-( hugs jan xx

Tim Smith October 11, 2017 at 4:10 PM Let him keep walking and take your name off the joint credit card Jan Allison October 11, 2017 at 5:14 PM I have never had a credit card and we don't have a joint one either lol:-) hugs jan xx

Lilly Pad October 11, 2017 at 3:25 PM very fluent story telling here in my humble opinion Jan Allison October 11, 2017 at 3:39 PM Thank you Lilly Pad:-) hugs jan xx

Agnes Krampe October 11, 2017 at 11:35 AM Great storytelling in your rondeau, well done Jan. Good luck in the contest. Jan Allison October 11, 2017 at 11:41 AM Thanks Agnes I wrote this then looked and saw I'd done another one on a similar theme. I must think of something else if i ever tackle it again:-) hugs Jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart October 11, 2017 at 11:13 AM OUCH! Wicked Rondeau :) my best to you for the contest! xomo! Jan Allison October 11, 2017 at 11:16 AM Thanks Mo it's only my second attempt at this form and looking back the other one after I'd written this I find it was on a similar theme !:-) hugs jan xx