Nette Onclaud Poet Light Verse

Decades of Long Life

Feet meander through  their slow walks
on  damp benches along the rotunda ...
an elderly pair grips the stem of their
parasol , inhaling the breath of dusky wisps,
as if the gray of their tresses 
holds the seams of hours watching 
this evening turn inky blue...

And when the fog releases tangy flavor,
the  man closes his eyes with his palm...
and a single tear drips as night becomes
quiet-- in this instance, the wife points
to stars evanescing until they both
relish the glory of seasons owned
through decades crowning their long life.


MARCH 2017 PREMIER CONTEST: Brian Strand
Repost 3/17/2017

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James Inman March 30, 2017 at 11:23 AM Aaaahhhhh, so beautiful.

Janis Medders Tobechi March 17, 2017 at 10:18 PM This is a lovely, love of old age. I should find this tranquility. Beautiful images. Congratulations.

Ironic Zink March 17, 2017 at 4:22 PM Nice win to you Nette! I must say, I'm a bit drowsy at the moment so my review is clouded but I know it was a good read. I placed 3rd so I'm pleased as well! Congratulations Nette.

Monterey Sirak April 6, 2014 at 6:28 AM Congrats on your win, Nette. What a lovely scene you created around an umbrella.

Kim Merryman April 4, 2014 at 6:04 PM You've painted a beautiful picture with your words, Nette! Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim

Theresa Stephens April 3, 2014 at 9:47 AM Hi Nette, Thought provoking imagery with gentle words interwoven throughout. Enjoyable read. Congrats on gaining 1st place. Regards Theresa xx

Dr.Ram Mehta April 3, 2014 at 1:51 AM My congratulations for writing this lovely poem, enjoyed it, nette

Poet Destroyer A April 2, 2014 at 11:53 PM Nette, :) , Congratulations, the poem is awesome. Enjoyed your winning poem. GOOD NIGHT, luv LINDA

Debbie Guzzi April 2, 2014 at 3:55 PM Just perfect nette fav phrases [dusky wisps][whiffs][grinds of rain][sarong of air] BIG congrad's PS you may write of the devine feminine for Mary? Light & Love

Sara Kendrick April 2, 2014 at 3:00 PM Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!! Sara

Aiyah Torres April 2, 2014 at 2:29 PM a masterpiece!! ..Congratulations on your win ,nette !!!..:'O)

Paul Callus April 2, 2014 at 11:55 AM This is a beautiful poem Nette, where imagery excels. // congrats on win. // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen April 2, 2014 at 11:18 AM - Hey Nette - Congratulations on your win in "Umbrella" contest Sponsor Leonora Galinta - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Len Gasun April 2, 2014 at 9:53 AM My warm and hearty congratulations on this brilliant piece and win my dear friend Nette! Thank u so much for your loving support. More blessings! Love lots always and biggest hugs, Leonora

Richard Lamoureux March 29, 2014 at 9:47 AM Masterful! I felt warmed by your words.

Andrea Dietrich March 27, 2014 at 9:35 PM this is so sweet, Nette. What a charming poem for the contest of umbrellas. (I am guessing it's for that?) I love when you write about people this way.

Darren Watson March 27, 2014 at 9:12 PM I feel warmer on this cold wet night after reading this beautiful poem . Thank you for the cuddle nette.

Charmaine Chircop March 27, 2014 at 4:22 PM Nettie..You re the first Im visiting today.Im going to try and catch up here...This is an amazing poem Your mind is a thesaurus and your heart a whole emotion.The way you go into detail about every verse makes me live the moment.Excellent!Now,I want to thankyou for yr thought.My father in law's operation is a success..He has to stay for a few days in hospital to gain his strength..Tnks dear

Tim Smith March 26, 2014 at 4:17 PM We all hope to be cuddling the parasol of love in our twilight years nette.... Beautiful write....Hugs Tim

Anne-Lise Andresen March 26, 2014 at 12:30 PM - A lovely poem, Nette - Always a pleasure to read your poems! - Have a nice evening / night. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Ken Carroll March 26, 2014 at 12:21 PM Great well crafted write Nette!

Jajosh Ongado March 26, 2014 at 10:45 AM Nette, Nette. You write so deftly on the subject of love, passion, and nature. Somehow you combined all these in a subtle manner using a parasol as the central point of your poem.I don't mind growing old! You have a way with emotion!

Sara Kendrick March 26, 2014 at 10:19 AM If for a contest, reads like winning material..That elderly couple must have been a beautiful sight..Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats..Sara

Roger Horsch March 26, 2014 at 9:33 AM You write so beautifully Nette, I enjoyed reading this poem of yours.........Hugs......Roger

Ashley Conte March 26, 2014 at 5:55 AM I always get more glimpses of your soul with each poetry you write Very finely written and flows just brilliantly with a metaphors and symbols of love's age and the association with a parasol.Perfection!