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Decades of Long Life

Feet meander through their slow walks on damp benches along the rotunda ... an elderly pair grips the stem of their parasol , inhaling the breath of dusky wisps, as if the gray of their tresses holds the seams of hours watching this evening turn inky blue... And when the fog releases tangy flavor, the man closes his eyes with his palm... and a single tear drips as night becomes quiet-- in this instance, the wife points to stars evanescing until they both relish the glory of seasons owned through decades crowning their long life. MARCH 2017 PREMIER CONTEST: Brian Strand Repost 3/17/2017

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Date: 3/30/2017 11:23:00 AM
Aaaahhhhh, so beautiful.
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Date: 3/17/2017 10:18:00 PM
This is a lovely, love of old age. I should find this tranquility. Beautiful images. Congratulations.
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Date: 3/17/2017 4:22:00 PM
Nice win to you Nette! I must say, I'm a bit drowsy at the moment so my review is clouded but I know it was a good read. I placed 3rd so I'm pleased as well! Congratulations Nette.
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Date: 4/6/2014 6:28:00 AM
Congrats on your win, Nette. What a lovely scene you created around an umbrella.
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Date: 4/4/2014 6:04:00 PM
You've painted a beautiful picture with your words, Nette! Congrats on your 1st place win! Love, Kim
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Date: 4/3/2014 9:47:00 AM
Hi Nette, Thought provoking imagery with gentle words interwoven throughout. Enjoyable read. Congrats on gaining 1st place. Regards Theresa xx
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Date: 4/3/2014 1:51:00 AM
My congratulations for writing this lovely poem, enjoyed it, nette
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Date: 4/2/2014 11:53:00 PM
Nette, :) , Congratulations, the poem is awesome. Enjoyed your winning poem. GOOD NIGHT, luv LINDA
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Date: 4/2/2014 3:55:00 PM
Just perfect nette fav phrases [dusky wisps][whiffs][grinds of rain][sarong of air] BIG congrad's PS you may write of the devine feminine for Mary? Light & Love
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Date: 4/2/2014 3:00:00 PM
Congrats on your winning work..Way to go!!! Sara
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Date: 4/2/2014 2:29:00 PM
a masterpiece!! ..Congratulations on your win ,nette !!!..:'O)
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Date: 4/2/2014 11:55:00 AM
This is a beautiful poem Nette, where imagery excels. // congrats on win. // paul
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Date: 4/2/2014 11:18:00 AM
- Hey Nette - Congratulations on your win in "Umbrella" contest Sponsor Leonora Galinta - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/2/2014 9:53:00 AM
My warm and hearty congratulations on this brilliant piece and win my dear friend Nette! Thank u so much for your loving support. More blessings! Love lots always and biggest hugs, Leonora
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Date: 3/29/2014 9:47:00 AM
Masterful! I felt warmed by your words.
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Date: 3/27/2014 9:35:00 PM
this is so sweet, Nette. What a charming poem for the contest of umbrellas. (I am guessing it's for that?) I love when you write about people this way.
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Date: 3/27/2014 9:12:00 PM
I feel warmer on this cold wet night after reading this beautiful poem . Thank you for the cuddle nette.
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Date: 3/27/2014 4:22:00 PM
Nettie..You re the first Im visiting today.Im going to try and catch up here...This is an amazing poem Your mind is a thesaurus and your heart a whole emotion.The way you go into detail about every verse makes me live the moment.Excellent!Now,I want to thankyou for yr thought.My father in law's operation is a success..He has to stay for a few days in hospital to gain his strength..Tnks dear
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Date: 3/26/2014 4:17:00 PM
We all hope to be cuddling the parasol of love in our twilight years nette.... Beautiful write....Hugs Tim
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Date: 3/26/2014 12:30:00 PM
- A lovely poem, Nette - Always a pleasure to read your poems! - Have a nice evening / night. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/26/2014 12:21:00 PM
Great well crafted write Nette!
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Date: 3/26/2014 10:45:00 AM
Nette, Nette. You write so deftly on the subject of love, passion, and nature. Somehow you combined all these in a subtle manner using a parasol as the central point of your poem.I don't mind growing old! You have a way with emotion!
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Date: 3/26/2014 10:19:00 AM
If for a contest, reads like winning material..That elderly couple must have been a beautiful sight..Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats..Sara
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Date: 3/26/2014 9:33:00 AM
You write so beautifully Nette, I enjoyed reading this poem of yours.........Hugs......Roger
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Date: 3/26/2014 5:55:00 AM
I always get more glimpses of your soul with each poetry you write Very finely written and flows just brilliantly with a metaphors and symbols of love's age and the association with a parasol.Perfection!
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