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Death Is the Bane of My Existence

In mournful shrouded clouds my darkest mood does dress in desolated winter drear no spring can bless. Your death did steal my breath and heartbeat like a thief, I’m nothing but a dying tree without a leaf; barren branches bland reaching skyward in drab brown - doomful gloom, I ache and pray winds to take me down. Susan Ashley June 17, 2018 ~ Sixth Place ~ Contest: May 2019 Premier 1 (14 Line Max) Sponsor: Brian Strand ~ Fifth Place ~ Premiere Contest: What I Really Like Sponsor: Maureen McGreavy ~ First Place ~ Contest: When Line Six Is A Perfect Fix Sponsor: Silent One ~ Poem Of The Day ~ June 19, 2018

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Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/23/2019 3:54:00 PM

Such soul-stirring, deep bereavement expressed in this poignant poem, Susan! This ink gemstone brilliantly reflected how I felt when my beloved father died earlier this year. You are a very, very gifted poetess in my humble opinion. GrEaT poem!! It's going in the Fave file for sure. Love and best wishes for the holidays.

Susan Ashley
Date: 1/6/2020 7:48:00 PM

Freddie, your presence here never fails to inspire and uplift me. I am honored by your emotional response and I cherish your heartfelt comments. I'm so sorry to read of your beloved father's passing.. we are related in our bereavement, my friend. Your friendship, as well as your fave and kind congrats are held in my truest gratitude. Warmest wishes for a happy new year and lotsa love, Freddie.. ~Susan P.S. 'If It Takes Forever' is a beautifully stirring piece!

Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/23/2019 4:03:00 PM

Btw ... Kudos on POTD! Meesa be time traveling a lot, so yesterday be today and tomorrow be yesterday. lol! Was listening to this beautiful song while reading your gorgeous poem. "If It Takes Forever" by Michael e. Love and more love always. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gcsyWXeRc5c

L. J. Carber

Date: 5/4/2019 7:22:00 AM

A poem remarkable, Susan, in its sadness and beauty-- haven't seen alliteration done so well in some time. The images are striking and heartbreaking-- saying 'congrats' seems inappropriate, so let me say instead, I'm sorry for your loss.

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/5/2019 8:33:00 PM

I relish your deeply felt, emotional response to my poem, L. J., and I treasure your sentiments. Thank you for your beautiful comments that lift my spirit to a wonderful place. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always, my friend.. ~Susan

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 5/3/2019 5:35:00 PM

Impress emotion and hexameter, Susan. Congrats!

Susan Ashley
Date: 5/3/2019 8:16:00 PM

Thank you, Dale. Your wonderful comments and congrats are inspiring and a joy to receive. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Eve Roper

Date: 3/4/2019 10:36:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, Susan, beautifully written with great depth and feelings.

Susan Ashley
Date: 4/5/2019 6:35:00 PM

I relish your heartfelt comments, Eve, as well as your kind congrats. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes always.. Susan

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 3/4/2019 7:51:00 AM

Susan, your language is lush, and captivating~ which is not easy to do for me, too lush becomes an overgrown tangled mass of words I can't get through. This one did, that last line kept pulling me back to get there again. Congratulations on your win Lovely! :) xomo

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/4/2019 9:05:00 AM

I relish your precious and heartfelt comments, Mo, and I am truly honored for my poem’s placement amongst the esteemed poems on your winner’s list. Your kind congrats are appreciated as well, my lovely. Warmest wishes always.. Susan <3

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/3/2019 9:12:00 PM

A most poignant poem, Susan. Bravo for your well deserved win.

Susan Ashley
Date: 3/4/2019 8:57:00 AM

Thank you, Line, for your wonderful comments and for your kind appreciation for my poem. I’m so happy you enjoyed it. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Vladislav Raven

Date: 12/15/2018 6:33:00 PM

Hi Susan, an immensely beautiful write within its deep sadness. You write from the heart and its arrow strikes home so swiftly. The tears that wish to fall as I read each sorrowed line. An exceptional, poetic gem from your golden pen. Your pen shall always sing Gold Susan. Have a wonderful weekend. Hugs....Mike. XX

Susan Ashley
Date: 12/15/2018 7:29:00 PM

I relish your deeply felt, emotional response to my poem, my dear friend, and I treasure your sentiments. Thank you, Mike, for your beautiful comments that lift my spirit to a wondrous place. I'm so pleased you enjoyed my poem. Warmest wishes for you to have a lovely weekend my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

John Michaels

Date: 11/19/2018 10:36:00 AM

Poweful and emotional stuff, Susan. Delighted to see this was PotD (albeit months ago!!!). Always a pleasure to read your work. Regards, John.

Susan Ashley
Date: 11/22/2018 12:37:00 PM

You’re wonderful response to my poem truly delights me, John. Your thoughtful comments are eagerly read and deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Echoing Greens

Date: 8/21/2018 7:17:00 AM

life is tough so are you death is a part born to die thanks for the lovely poem

Susan Ashley
Date: 8/21/2018 12:49:00 PM

Thank you echoing greens for your thoughtful comments. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Larry Logan

Date: 7/18/2018 1:30:00 PM

This really sums it up so stark and real. 100% raw emotion wrapped in creative word choice. I especially like "doomful gloom."

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/18/2018 10:39:00 PM

Thank you, Larry, for your appreciation for my poem. I relish your meaningful and heartfelt comments and your kindness is held in my deepest gratitude. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael

Date: 7/2/2018 2:31:00 PM

Nice write... Moods can take you far away places... Congrats... All the heat Susan

Arturo Michael
Date: 7/3/2018 8:29:00 AM

I know... I am here ... Really hot... Ice then fire..

Susan Ashley
Date: 7/2/2018 10:57:00 PM

It's so nice to hear from you, my dear friend Arturo. Your kindness always makes me smile. Your wonderful comments and heartwarming congrats are cherished mon ami. I hope you're staying cool, it's been sweltering in Mass.. All the best to you always.. ~Susan

Maria Williams

Date: 6/24/2018 5:16:00 AM

Dual congratulations my dear dear friend Susan, I really don't know how I missed your POTD, and now I can see that this amazing poem has also won a trophy prize. So proud of you. You really do shine my friend.....Maria hugs....PS I have sent you quite a lot of pics of our trip :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/24/2018 8:15:00 PM

Thank you, Maria, for the delight of your visit. You dual congratulations and beautiful comments are twice as nice and doubly appreciated. Thank you for the email and the pics.. you and your beautiful family look amazing and happy.. my replies will follow soon my dear friend. Love and hugs always.. ~Susan

Eve Roper

Date: 6/23/2018 9:18:00 PM

Back with congratulations on your great win :) ... Hugs Eve ~`*

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/23/2018 10:07:00 PM

Thank you Eve for the delight of your return visit and kindhearted congrats. Warmest wishes and hugs.. ~Susan

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/23/2018 8:23:00 PM

Very moving, Susan! CONGRATS. Janice

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/23/2018 10:07:00 PM

Thank you Janice for your wonderful comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Gary Smith

Date: 6/23/2018 4:14:00 PM

A moving and lovely poem Susan, congrats :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/23/2018 10:08:00 PM

I relish your lovely comments Gary and your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Judy Ball

Date: 6/23/2018 7:40:00 AM

A heartfelt and beautiful piece. Filled with great imagery and emotion. Well done. God Bless and congrats. JB

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/23/2018 10:10:00 PM

I relish your beautiful comments, Judy, and your heartwarming congrats. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Susan Gentry

Date: 6/22/2018 5:28:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this awesome poem and your POTD! This touched my heart.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2018 9:58:00 PM

Thank you Susan, your precious comments and warm congrats are truly appreciated. Many thanks for your kindness my lovely friend.. ~Susan

Subimal Sinha-Roy

Date: 6/22/2018 1:39:00 AM

Great work, Susan. Congratulations.

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2018 9:57:00 PM

Thank you for your wonderful comments and kind congrats, Subimal. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Probir Gupta

Date: 6/22/2018 12:13:00 AM

Congratulations, Susan on your well deserved trophy win with this beautiful poem brimming with wealthy images ... Congratulations for the POTD as well ...

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/22/2018 9:56:00 PM

Probir, it's always a pleasure to hear from you. Your beautiful comments and heartwarming congrats are cherished. Thank you my friend.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Vijay Pandit

Date: 6/21/2018 6:28:00 AM

You shine with a dual honor on this poem, Susan..poem of the day and first place winner in Silent's contest. Your poems are always awesome, adorned in cherished words. Congrats!!

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/21/2018 2:03:00 PM

I relish your beautiful comments and lovely congrats Vijay, they light my heart with their glow and inspire me greatly. Your kindness is deeply appreciated. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 6/20/2018 8:38:00 PM

An awesome heartfelt write Susan! Belated congrats on POTD and many congrats on a fine first place well deserved win my friend!~Che :)

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/21/2018 2:01:00 PM

Thank you my lovely and poetic friend for your heartwarming words of congrats and your kind comments. Your delightful visit is truly appreciated Cheryl. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/20/2018 7:03:00 PM

- Third time's a charm, Susan :) - It must have been difficult to judge, I think everyone is amazing, with different themes - Congratulations on a well deserved 1st place in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise: )

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/21/2018 1:59:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise for your three-peat visit and for your heartwarming comments and kind congrats.. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/20/2018 6:49:00 PM

Congrats on your trophy win! … Now, as for your 'dying tree' image: I'm gonna leaf that one alone. (Ugh, right?) Blessings always, Gershon

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/21/2018 1:57:00 PM

Lol! Gershon, your charming presence always brings a smile to my face.. Thank you for your heartwarming congrats and your endearing kindness.. Warmest wishes always my wonderful friend.. ~Susan

Silent One

Date: 6/20/2018 3:29:00 PM

Melancholic six lines Susan that express sadness in detail... Also congrats on POTD.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/21/2018 1:54:00 PM

Thank you Silent One for the honor of first place in your wonderful contest. It was a joy to participate and I relish your lovely comments and kind congrats. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

Date: 6/20/2018 1:04:00 PM

Hi Susan...stopping by with belated congratulations on p.o.t.d. award. Even in tackling a dark theme you have the ability to light it up with poetic beauty. Hope you and yours are keeping well, my friend. ~ Warm regards // paul

Susan Ashley
Date: 6/21/2018 1:40:00 PM

Dear Paul, my wonderful friend, it's always such a joy when I see you here. I cherish your lovely thoughts that touch and light my heart with the glow of inspired beauty. Thank you for being a treasured friend, for your heartwarming sentiments and for your very kind congrats.. Warmest wishes and hugs always.. ~Susan