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Death by chocolate cake

Dinner was for two, a shared dessert meant to please
Exotically prepared, with apt name to tease
Across the table she’s testing, probing not too deep
The taste lights up her face, no secrets can it keep
Help me out she whispers, into action I leap

Beautiful in texture, already having regrets
Yielding to the craving, oh how willpower forgets

Cream runs soft and silky, soothing over ache
Her hands spoon me more, perhaps more than I can take
Obsession builds again, reaching layer of sponge
Caught in resistance, I choose to take the plunge
Oaths fill my mind, sugar high sets me dizzy
Lost in a chocolate maze, layers keep us busy
Angels driven outward, demons devour inside
This just-right moment’s gone too far to hide
Each dunk goes deeper, the wafers start to flake

Crumbling extra pleasure every scoop we make
Allies in debauchery, our bodies can’t resist
Karma, she’s a b!tch, but tonight we both insist
Ending in the bedroom where our real passion persists.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2026

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Miller Avatar
April 21, 2026 at 8:25 AM
I Love It! Congratulations
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 21, 2026 at 11:04 AM
We all love it (chocolate cake) that is lol! Cheers David
Rodrigues Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 9:35 AM
A wonderfully devilish poem…lol! … Lost in a chocolate maze, layers keep us busy
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 2:15 PM
Heya Kim, yes such great looking desserts are truly devilish and easy to get lost in lol! Cheers David
Goldsmith Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 7:44 AM
Back with Congratulations on your win. I loved reading your wonderful "Death by chocolate cake" write again. Your Great Picture Is Killing Me. Hahaha!!!! Have a blessed day with your win...................
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 20, 2026 at 2:13 PM
At least you’re honest Paula, you only came back to see if the chocolate cake was still there lol! Cheers David
G  Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 3:16 PM
Congratulations David :) great to revisit this one - v inventive take on the contest :)
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 3:35 PM
Thank you LG, I’m delighted how well this one turned out, I felt somehow challenged to write this, lol! Cheers David
Jones Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 2:05 PM
Yum! Congratulations on your top win David!
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 2:38 PM
Help yourself Karen that’s if you can find any left lol! Thanks so much, cheers David
Dietrich Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 12:34 PM
A super clever approach to my acrostic dessert challenge. The play on the words, death by chocolate and making it sensuous. GREAT job and congratualions.
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 19, 2026 at 1:01 PM
Thanks so much Andrea, so glad you enjoyed those extra sensuous layers in my poem, I’m totally delighted to be rated highly on your list, was a delicious contest, I couldn’t resist haha! Cheers David
Rodgers Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 4:40 PM
Hello David, that "chocolate maze" is a dangerous place to get lost. I’ve spent plenty of time in that headspace where willpower just evaporates, and there’s a specific, heavy honesty in how the "angels are driven outward" once we decide to stop pretending we’re in control. My wife is such a chocoholic I would be afraid to show her your poem for fear I be out searching for a hot baked chocolate cookie at 3am. Blessings Daniel
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 10, 2026 at 8:06 AM
Heya Daniel, there is something inherently devilish and divine going on here all at once, but perhaps above all is an overwhelming sense of seduction and temptation! So who or what is really in control once the angels are driven out, does the latent animal within us take over, of course it does, but at least we can burn off some of the calories in the last line lol! Cheers David
Lane Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 4:03 PM
What a great metaphoric description of foreplay! Oh, was it not meant to be taken as debauchery? Not after this line, DK... "Cream runs soft and silky, soothing over ache." Now, that's a dessert meant to be savored by two.
Lane Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 4:01 AM
lol. Paula is a giver. I’m sure she’d share.
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 3:55 AM
You best ask Paula, I think she bagsied the whole cake for herself :)
Lane Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 3:23 AM
lol. Stop being defensive and just cut me a slice of that chocolate decadence.
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 2:26 AM
Well it was a kinda game of (twist her) lol! I’m taking the fifth now, before this poem becomes compromised :)
Lane Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 1:39 AM
Ha negotiating wasn’t necessary. I wouldn’t let you talk your way out of what I read into it anymore than I would believe your Twister story, but nice try. You did write a great acrostic, worthy of being a winner.
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 9, 2026 at 12:34 AM
Haha, I’ve no idea what you mean Lin! But there is a thin line between savouring a (chocolate cake to die for) and debauchery, I had to be very careful not to fall into the foreplay trap, that’s why we went up to the bedroom for a game of erm…(Twister), our other real passion, lol! Thanks so much for fun if not a little awkward comment to negotiate :) cheers David
G  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 1:19 PM
Haha a lover not a fighter (of cravings) - I love the pace of this one, so slow and steady that it almost mesmerised to ensure I read no faster than the poem required. I suppose that's the challenge with food eating marathons is to not rush. I'm a huge fan of the rhyming acrostic and you made some brilliant word choices here - atmospheric too haha! I feel like a voyeur but with commenting rights - lol. Well, welcome to the fun acrostics club, you fit right in :) good luck in the contest :)
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 1:58 PM
Is there really such a place (chocolate eaters anonymous) lol! Maybe it’s a dependency rather than an addiction, all I know it’s better shared than doing a solo act, mutual spoon feeding is fun too lol!
G  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 1:47 PM
Maybe we can all get addicted to acrostics lol - I prefer to think I'm compelled to eat chocolate and somehow that's different to addiction haha. Imagine sharing this poem at chocolate eaters anonymous - I think there would be some falling off the waggon :)
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 1:37 PM
Think I have some addictive personality disorder LG, I’m pretty sure you do too lol! Only very rarely I pen acrostics, but enjoyed playing around with this one and bringing a little erm… atmospheric touch to enhance the experience, I might even join the club, lets see how it goes down first :) thanks for inspiring comment, cheers David
Goldsmith Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 11:13 AM
WOW!!! I am ready to die by your "Death by chocolate cake" Great Picture. A fun write/a fun read. "Good Luck" I did, "COCONUT CAKE." Have a fun day writing away...........
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 2:23 PM
No way you’re definitely not getting the lot, I won’t have your exit from this world on my plate lol! I could even lose my poetic license :)
G  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 1:03 PM
Haha too cute Paula! :)
Goldsmith Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 12:58 PM
A Slice??? I want all of the cake as pictured. Maybe some vanilla ice cream on the side. It would be a great way to go out... Hahaha!!! Cheers To You....
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 11:29 AM
Heya Paula, do have a slice, for I can think of worse ways to die, than by chocolate cake lol! They are an amazing work of art, thanks so much for stopping by, cheers David
Empress Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 10:50 AM
Fave this is btw! Love this! Best wishes! Youv nailed it! Too many exquisite lines that made me go wow and smile too! Sending you light always
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 11:21 AM
You’re too Kind Ink, I don’t write many acrostics, I’m more a Monoku kinda guy, but did enjoy the challenge of diving into this one, these bad boy desserts really should be shared, do take a scoop before any withdrawals set in lol! Sometimes Karma can be good! So glad you enjoyed this one, and I’m delighted with your fave too! Cheers David
Empress Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 10:49 AM
Its when obsession builds over, the addiction starts, and when we dont get enough, we are left with withdrawals haha. I always found this desserts name very poetic! I love what youv done here and how well it flows dear david! I like seeing this side of you! You should write more poems like this one! Karma line is just brilliant! Hah! Who would have thought of using karma in a poem like this? And ofcourse works so well! Impressive take! andrea did ask to make the first letter of every line bold
Allison Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 10:28 AM
ooh la la what a sensual saucy little number . thanks for the smiles David - you really went to town with this brilliant acrostic:-) hugs jan xx
Kavanagh  Avatar
April 8, 2026 at 11:11 AM
Haha, yeah I did let myself be seduced, hard to resist with such offerings on a plate, I actually tried something similar on holiday, it ended up a two person job too lol, thanks Jan, cheers David
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