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Dead At Home

DEAD AT HOME -For Veteran's Day It's a gray day, in the café, by the side of the road. There's an old man, took a firm stand, trying to loosen the load. It is struck luck, with his last buck, but he pays for his soup. He has no wife, all of his life, he is out of the loop. He will bum thumb, in a ride from, here to his cardboard box. There's a sleeping roll, a piece of coal, and a pillow made of rocks. Allegory. No glory. A mad sad told cold story. Alliteration, of an allegation, on how he kills for glory. Then the lie dies, in GI's, when our soldier kills a man. All told, he is not bold, but this tale is secondhand. He preaches whale's tales, of army mad males, as he calls for his god. Then he dreams schemes, of the war machines, and ghosts that run him odd. Then he weeps sleeps, and a secret keeps, and he hates the morning light. He has lost his place, in the human race, and he always will take flight. He will dine fine, on the red wine, which he drinks from a paper cup. He will watch stars, and count his scars, but his heart has given up! Allegory. No glory. A mad sad told cold story. Alliteration, of an allegation, on how he kills for glory. Then the lie dies, in GI's, when our soldier kills a man. All told, he is not bold, but this tale is secondhand. -Edlynn Nau

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Date: 5/30/2016 4:27:00 AM
What a powerful piece! You have revealed the truth. My husband hates how the Vets of that war are treated. He told me he was spit on by an ignorant moron. Now there is a new respect for those who serve and rightly so. I am in awe of your talent. This poem is quite wonderful! #7 ; )
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 5/30/2016 1:38:00 PM
Oh Thank you Connie! It's interesting this poem was elected as one of the top by our peers as I was told by other Soupers that War & Vet poems never get an audience & not to expect 65 hits. Also, that Tim's exercise just came up in time for Memorial Day. Synchronicity, love when that happens. My husband got home from Vietnam (Marine) and when he got off the plane, he tore off all his metals from his chest & threw them in the trashcan at the airport. So sad! Our worst war EVER! Thank you for reading this and I hope I was a voice for such sad treatment.
Date: 10/29/2015 11:44:00 AM
Hi Edlynn. Since it's almost Veteran's Day, I picked this out of your poetry list to read now. By your words and experiences, we appear to be of the same generation. I joined the army during the Vietnam War. However, being a woman, I was spared the hell of war. My 'war' was the cold war of espionage and posturing. I have a deep regard for the Vietnam vets who gave their all and those that returned scared and unappreciated. God Bless you for telling their story. Hugs. Janece
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 10/29/2015 3:49:00 PM
Thank you for YOUR service Janece! The feedback was important to me b/c (just as in real life) PS poets tend to skip all war poems (or so I was told). Must be true. Yet this started out in noticing all the homeless...then, noticing how many were Vets. Had I titled it "Home in a Box" I think it would have had more readers. "Dead at Home" is a FOR SURE SKIP. This does show you how an unpopular war does punish and ignore those who gave their lives. In this case, the homeless are the Walking Dead. Yes, I wanted to pay tribute on Veteran's Day. I cannot believe it's been almost a year since I wrote this. Thank you for your THOUGHTFUL words.
Date: 10/19/2015 9:27:00 AM
FANTASTIC POEM!! Such truth in the telling.. Adding this jewel to my fav list and thanks my friend. A7
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Date: 10/19/2015 1:20:00 PM
Thank you Robert! One of the hardest poems to write due to inner and outer rhyme scheme. Also, b/c I grew up with the war stories of my Grandpa (WW1), Uncle (WW11), Dad (Koreaian War) and married a Vietnam Vet. These stories stayed in my soul & it was the "lost & returned" Vet that I needed to capture.
Date: 9/8/2015 2:45:00 AM
Very nice Edlynn there is so much truth to your written scenarios, enjoy reading.
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 9/8/2015 3:40:00 AM
Thank you Mike! The truth comes from those that are just as aware as I am in the recognition of such, when seen on the written page!
Date: 8/22/2015 11:05:00 PM
Edlynn, this is deep... has an awesome flow... and rhyme scheme throughout the lines... Always SKAT
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Date: 8/22/2015 11:14:00 PM
Thank you so much Skat! It was very hard to rhyme within lines but you just think of them as two lines together and it works. I'm glad it "flowed" for you and if you got this Vet's story then, I'm pleased.
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/22/2015 11:12:00 PM
Thank you Skat: I sent Lindsay her response the exact same time you sent yours. So it gave you Lindsey's reply & she got nothing! Ha ha! I will delete it when it shows up in my out box. How confusing! The 2 boxes below are a Cyber Stutter. Please ignore!
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/22/2015 11:07:00 PM
Well absolutely it does! There is no home. It is why war is so effective. Even those that live through it, return half dead! Everybody loses. Yet we must protect our freedom and our people. Maybe one day we'll say, "Whomever wins this computer game wins the war"!
Date: 8/22/2015 11:00:00 PM
G'day Edlynn... a powerful lyric set. I sometimes think war follows the soldier home - Lindsay
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Date: 8/22/2015 11:35:00 PM
Well absolutely it does Lindsay! There is no home. It is why war is so effective. Even those that live through it, return half dead! Everybody loses. Yet we must protect our freedom and our people. Maybe one day we'll say, "Whomever wins this computer game wins the war".
Date: 8/22/2015 7:37:00 PM
Edlynn I spent four hours writing a poem with the same theme and lost in cyberspace. My wife couldn't believe the similarities. Great effort.
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/22/2015 9:07:00 PM
Thank you Michael for your response! The fact that your observations are the same means a good deal to me! It means I don't have the snap shot entirely wrong...that many of us know this, extremely sad, reality. Thank you dear Michael!
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Edlynn Nau
Date: 8/22/2015 9:04:00 PM
OH HOW SAD & TERRIBLE. I write to E-mail and mail to a Friend before I post. Fearful of the same dreaded thing...lost work! Were you a Vietnam Vet? I was married to one & my knowledge comes from there. That, and that we were the first to turn 18 & vote, at the height of the war.

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