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This poem is not about me. I am concerned about the amount of children and teens that speak of verbal abuse. This poem comes straight from my imagination. As some of you know my background is theatre as an actor, a writer, a producer and a director. My first love is directing. In writing I often assume a character. That is what I have done here, I have assumed a character.

a drop of my blood fills my tears, tears that roll down my  cheek, past the frozen  expression glued to my face, standing weak kneed before you, feeling abused,  dazed by the velocity, the ferocity of your  tongue lashing, steals the breath of my existence so Dad why are you surprised  a drop of my blood fills my tears
20~10~2014 Maurice Yvonne

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014




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Date: 10/31/2014 1:06:00 AM
"The ferocity of your tongue lashing, steals the breath of my existence." This line hit hard. How can one feel the value of their life when all they've ever heard is vulgarity and hostility? How can one know show kindness when they've never experienced it for themselves. Your poems leaves me to wonder...
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Date: 10/23/2014 6:00:00 PM
Sad but powerful.
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Date: 10/21/2014 6:17:00 PM
by the way, your message in this poem reflects a sad condition in this world that is bringing all humanity down. When will this kind of thing ever end?
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Date: 10/21/2014 6:16:00 PM
gosh, I had missed more of your poetry than I knew!! This is nicely done. Let me see if there is even more i have not seen.
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Date: 10/20/2014 5:35:00 PM
Its not just verbal abuse Maurice its texting 2faced book etc etc all forms of abuse that can cause such sad consequences if not nipped in the bud. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xxx
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Date: 10/20/2014 5:14:00 PM
i am against any form of human violation and this gripping work speaks volumes, maurice.. a powerful image of abuse.. huggs
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/21/2014 7:08:00 PM
thank you nette
Date: 10/20/2014 3:59:00 PM
So powerful Maurice...You depicted the situation well...cheers
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/20/2014 4:07:00 PM
Thank you Tim!
Date: 10/20/2014 3:14:00 PM
What a well done job, a character that wretches the heart. (misspelled cheek) this was real good sweetie!
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Maurice Yvonne
Date: 10/20/2014 3:19:00 PM
Thank you Cas. Fixing it now. Where would I be without my friends?

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