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Dawn Awakened

Dawn awakened and replaced the moon Empty, the sky where once stars were strewn In repose, Luna slept after wandering night skies and spider webs shimmered in the light of sunrise Dew glistened like diamonds on the fragrant rose as a gentle breeze billowed my sheer nightclothes

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/21/2021 10:19:00 AM

A beautiful write. I love your line, "Dawn awakened and replaced the moon." It did. Have a Blessed Christmas and 2022.......................

Lin Lane
Date: 10/14/2022 4:36:00 AM

Thanks very much, Paula.

Bill Baker

Date: 12/9/2021 5:01:00 PM

You really know how to pack it in, Lin. Six lines fully packed with imagery and description. Go flow to go along with the rythum. Bill

Lin Lane
Date: 10/14/2022 4:36:00 AM

Thanks so much, Bill.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 12/8/2021 8:47:00 AM

Every once in a while I find a line I wish I had thought to write first " spider webs shimmered in the light of sunrise" This is one of those lines.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/8/2021 8:54:00 AM

I am so grateful for the visits you gave my poetry this morning. Thank you, Caren. I think I favor that line, too. It was one of those that didn't take an edit.

Mark Koplin

Date: 12/3/2021 6:20:00 PM

You do have a way with words my friend, beautiful!

Lin Lane
Date: 12/4/2021 6:02:00 AM

Merci, Mark. Your comments are always encouraging.

Dm Babbit

Date: 12/3/2021 8:12:00 AM

Wonderful write.

Lin Lane
Date: 12/3/2021 11:06:00 AM

Thank you, DM.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/3/2021 7:35:00 AM

This reads like a follow up to your last one Lin, brilliant. Enjoy your weekend. Tom

Lin Lane
Date: 12/3/2021 7:41:00 AM

Yes, it does, Tom. I have one to post a bit later about the setting sun....It seems I have tunnel vision at the moment. Thanks for your well wishes for a good weekend, and I hope yours is a dandy one, too!