Lin Lane Poet Rhyme

Dawn Awakened

Dawn awakened and replaced the moon
Empty, the sky where once stars were strewn
   In repose, Luna slept after wandering night skies
   and spider webs shimmered in the light of sunrise
      Dew glistened like diamonds on the fragrant rose
      as a gentle breeze billowed my sheer nightclothes

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Paula Goldsmith December 21, 2021 at 10:19 AM A beautiful write. I love your line, "Dawn awakened and replaced the moon." It did. Have a Blessed Christmas and 2022....................... Lin Lane October 14, 2022 at 4:36 AM Thanks very much, Paula.

Bill Baker December 9, 2021 at 5:01 PM You really know how to pack it in, Lin. Six lines fully packed with imagery and description. Go flow to go along with the rythum. Bill Lin Lane October 14, 2022 at 4:36 AM Thanks so much, Bill.

Caren Krutsinger December 8, 2021 at 8:47 AM Every once in a while I find a line I wish I had thought to write first " spider webs shimmered in the light of sunrise" This is one of those lines. Lin Lane December 8, 2021 at 8:54 AM I am so grateful for the visits you gave my poetry this morning. Thank you, Caren. I think I favor that line, too. It was one of those that didn't take an edit.

Mark Koplin December 3, 2021 at 6:20 PM You do have a way with words my friend, beautiful! Lin Lane December 4, 2021 at 6:02 AM Merci, Mark. Your comments are always encouraging.

DM Babbit December 3, 2021 at 8:12 AM Wonderful write. Lin Lane December 3, 2021 at 11:06 AM Thank you, DM.

Tom Cunningham December 3, 2021 at 7:35 AM This reads like a follow up to your last one Lin, brilliant. Enjoy your weekend. Tom Lin Lane December 3, 2021 at 7:41 AM Yes, it does, Tom. I have one to post a bit later about the setting sun....It seems I have tunnel vision at the moment. Thanks for your well wishes for a good weekend, and I hope yours is a dandy one, too!