Dawn

Played night herons - raspy, croaking calls, Yet a rooster played, “cock-a-doodle-doo,” And shadows fainted on - darkened walls, Alarming us, the trespassing, morning hue. *The 5th Place* in the following Premiere Contest (judged on Oct. 8, 2020) Oct. 3, 2020 Rithimus Divisa 8 Poetry Contest Contest Sponsor: Gregory R Barden Original poem: Let Sun Go Posted on Sept. 6, 2020 for the contest: The night of passion and desire Poetry Contest Sponsor: Faraz Ajmal

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Jenna Logan

Date: 10/8/2020 6:56:00 AM

It's my turn to congratulate you on your winning verse, Newton. I love the line, "...shadows fainted on - darkened walls."

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/8/2020 3:09:00 PM

Thank you so much, Jenna, for this immensely great comment!!

Gregory Richard Barden

Date: 10/8/2020 12:04:00 AM

This has a number of layers, Newton, some unusual but pwerful imagery, wonderful phrasing and musicality, and just plain refreshing to read. I am stunned it has only one comment ... maybe more now, I hope! Congratulations! :o)

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/8/2020 4:11:00 AM

Thank you so much, Gregory, for this immensely excellent comment and the great placement in your Premiere contest!!

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 10/3/2020 6:56:00 PM

Interesting!

Newton Ranaweera
Date: 10/3/2020 7:07:00 PM

Thank you so much, Kim for this lovely comment!!