David and Goliath

Titan Goliath challenged young David to a floggin'

     But David with his slingshot beaned him on the noggin!

          Dave viewed the carcass and was heard to say, "Nothin' to it!"

                His envious brethren said, "Yeah!  'Twas just a lucky hit!"

Robert L. Hinshaw, CMSgt, USAF, Retired
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Kovrlija Avatar
October 28, 2012 at 6:05 PM
So clever and well-written.
Song Avatar
October 27, 2012 at 7:15 PM
ha ha ha ha....u are crackin' me up, Mr. Hinshaw! Love the Biblical ones a lot! Trying to listen to the whole Bible on tape bc I have been doing so much driving lately...it is rewarding...Please write me a clerihew on Eli Manning...pretty please? haha...At least me and Michael will like it! :) gwendolen
Andresen Avatar
October 27, 2012 at 3:34 PM
Good written with a smiling heart ... I like it, and I think David will too. - Wish you luck in the contest bob. - Wishing you a good weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
Horsman Avatar
October 27, 2012 at 10:23 AM
this is so good, a short version that tells us all...
Rutherford Avatar
October 27, 2012 at 9:01 AM
Robert ,I love your verion of this ,funny with the message poem. That with Him, good will win. Ever since you posted the poem about blackberries . I have been meaning to post 'A Great Lady' .I wrote it a long time ago and your poem make me think of posting it. Anne
Macfarlane Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 8:37 PM
Clever, cute and funny...great clerihew Bob! You will put a smile on David's face with this one. Hugs
Song Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 6:13 PM
Great one, Bob! Can u imagine being present for this ultimate duel?...What an entertaining piece...Is there NOTHING that u can't write about?...WOW! :) gwendolen
Sweetheart Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 10:05 AM
WHAT A REACTION U PRESENT IN A HUMOROUS MANNER BOB .. DAVID THE LITTLE GUY WAS THE HERO AND GOLIATH WAS DEAD CARCASS FOR THE INSECT POPULATION .. WONDERFUL LUV ..
Carrillo Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 9:59 AM
This is good. I don't think that it was a lucky hit. Have a great weekend. Lucilla
Bauer Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 9:49 AM
very clever, dear bob!
Brown Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 7:17 AM
What a beautiful day to sit and read the many diverse poems here at the Soup. I am so happy yours were among the ones I am able to read today Bob. I hope your weekend is exciting and so full of life and that you might find even more inspiration to write. Love, Carol XXXX
Sivey Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 5:08 AM
ha ha, yes I can see his brethren saying just that too! But he was glorified nonetheless...as he became King! Great story my friend, I really enjoyed this incredible write, very special indeed! I really enjoyed reading this wondrous poem this morning, Awesome Work!!
Marcum Wong Avatar
October 26, 2012 at 12:20 AM
BIG smile over this humorous Clerihew Robert. Thank you for the cheer!
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