Darkness and Dreams

I like this either way =] keep it how it is i say. nice work. and i love the contrast with the last line. its as if there is just a little hope in it all, just a little light in the darkess. i use to stare at the stars in my own darkness. do me a favor? read and comment my lastest write, its called nicks poem. thank you lots xo Rain

Falls and becomes would be verbs. Oppressive, broken, and bright are adjectives. Interesting contrast in the last ine. Nice use of imagery. Keep on writing. Karen