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Darkness

when you're fast asleep and thoughts creep into your head and flood your brain until it weeps and your mind descends dark and deep into a land of dead end worlds where the only way out is the way you came in but the road is way too steep and your feet are made of lead and every smile is just pretend and nothing is to be believed and you're going off the deep end bleeding rivers of hatred into a pool of shallow deceit where every thought is colored red and every shade of black completes every nightmare ever conceived born of blood-stained dreams within dreams where that person you used to be is falling into skies of silent screams and contemplating death all the while wishing to be alive again

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 6/14/2016 6:44:00 PM
Simoriah Hairomis, nicely penned. Enjoyed reading your thoughts and words today. **SKAT**
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Date: 9/4/2013 11:08:00 AM
A very deep and dark poem. I think we can all relate at times to the misery in this world. A wonderful poem and your first here on the soup. A warm welcome to Poetry soup. I hope you enjoy the site as much as I do. phyl
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Date: 9/2/2013 2:24:00 PM
This is awesome! I can relate. Are you talking about me in your poem? This really is hard to read for me.
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Date: 8/30/2013 4:35:00 PM
wow deep and dark the way you intended, Simoriah , Your first poem on the soup is excellent for the readers, I love it!! Stopping by with a nice, sweet Welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best when it comes to your poems. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here. Starting with me. SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you like. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND". Hugs* Skat *
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Date: 8/30/2013 3:42:00 PM
Look the beginning is waiting to start Simiorioh the past will have no hold at all..' death is a path all must take , yet it is not for us to choose when..! the good you seek is 'out there' in order to partake of it we must not fall prey to the despair of the world, as some are misled into taking their own life's: instead you can take up a new life today..' pleased to have read this poem..Joe))
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Date: 8/29/2013 9:53:00 PM
Brillant write,,,,, simoriah. Every words seeps into the mind, vividly....welcome to ps. Very enjoyable read ty4sharing, cherie:0)
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Simoriah Hairomis
Date: 8/30/2013 7:29:00 AM
Thank you for the compliments.
Date: 8/29/2013 2:46:00 PM
Hi Simoriah, powerful imagery especially the "rivers of hatred into pools of shallow deceit". It presents us with the idea of so much energy being exerted and wasted on a "shallow" situation, but that these emotion totally overtake our senses.
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Simoriah Hairomis
Date: 8/29/2013 5:31:00 PM
Thank you for the feedback, it's very much appreciated. And thanks for "getting it" ...! :)
Date: 8/29/2013 12:36:00 PM
A great write. I extend a warm welcome to you to Poetry Soup. Thanks for your kind review on my poem. I hope you enjoy your time here at Soup.
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Simoriah Hairomis
Date: 8/29/2013 5:28:00 PM
Thank you kindly!
Date: 8/29/2013 10:56:00 AM
Welcome to P-Soup, Simoriah ! - Nice to read your first poem here. - Hope you will have much pleasure to be with us. - Wishing you good luck - have a nice day! - Comment on the poetry of others and they will comment on yours. - My first greeting to you from Norway / / / Anne-Lise :)
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Simoriah Hairomis
Date: 8/29/2013 11:29:00 AM
Thank you, I have been. :)
Date: 8/29/2013 8:51:00 AM
Good morning Simoriah, a deep and epic write, thank you for expressing your write and finding this site. -A nice warm WELCOME to poetry soup. Dropping by to invite you to my latest contest. You will find the contest page on the top left hand side* -Looking forward in following and reading your poetry. Hope to hear from you soon. You will enjoy the community, we are one big happy family. (Drama & Love. LOL) ~ Take Care!! From: your new poet friend @-> LINDA <-@
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Simoriah Hairomis
Date: 8/29/2013 9:10:00 AM
Good morning, and thank you for the feedback. :) Looking forward to getting to know the site & community better. Peace <3

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