Darkness

My feet are cold; my tiredness lingers;
My back aches from stooping so low.
Dampened by the frigid water below,
I breathed warmth into my numbing fingers.
Again, I dipped my shovel into the coarse gravel
Of the stream dredging up with a gurgle
A mixture of pebbles and sand;
Into a bucket I poured it, firsthand.
In this wilderness I'm not alone, there's bear.
Mindful I am of the sounds around me;
A churning stream, rustling leaves, an elk groan,
Snapping twigs, anything that would put a scare
Or raise my hair. I looked around for a tree,
Somewhere to flee before darkness set in.
Not far from here, I spied a log cabin.
Into this stronghold I placed my supplies;
Nature's calm was just a disguise.
I latched its massive door; and bolted each shutter.
In its stone hearth, I started a fire;
Basking in its warmth worries melted like butter.
Outside, darkness enveloped the cabin;
Strong claws raked its walls peeling away its skin;
Relentless growling resonated through the dusty din.
Suddenly, I awoke huddled next to a glowing flashlight.
Shivering against the muddy walls of a beaver's lodge, 
I could hear the bear feverishly ripping 
Through the muddy grass, and the disjointed timbers 
Above me. Deep beneath the surface darkness arrived
Just, as my flashlight flickered, then died.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 2/24/2025 4:28:00 PM
Hello Jonathan, this is a brilliant write, and a great story. Loved it.
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Date: 2/24/2025 3:01:00 PM
Hello Jonathan Bellmann, It is so nice to meet you. This is a terrific poem. It will be my fav. Enjoy your evening my friend. /Darlene/
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Date: 2/24/2025 1:04:00 PM
This is a terrific poem with a story of trepidation. My guess is that you are lost with nothing but a bear to keep you company. The rhyme sings a song of loneliness while the punch of verbs screams your terror. Well done.
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