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Dark Rain

Dark storm clouds rotate
tumbling like the angry seas
evoking dark rain

Thunder rolling clasps
lightning whips across gray skies
clouds release dark rain

~*~

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Skat A

Date: 5/12/2015 12:58:00 PM

ANNALISE..ENJOYED THE HAIKU, love SKAT

Deirdre Omaidin

Date: 1/18/2011 2:52:00 AM

Wonderful haiku here, many congratulations on your win. Déirdre

James Fraser

Date: 1/17/2011 3:21:00 PM

Annalise, I'm so glad this Haiku set of yours took it's place on the winners podium. It's a wonderful read....:)

Gerard Keogh Jr.

Date: 1/17/2011 2:37:00 PM

Lighning whips is a great phrase and I envy you for it. I see it as I write it. Good job and thank you for your kindness! Regards, Gerard

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 1/17/2011 12:22:00 PM

I remember this one so well, Annalise, and am delighted it's in the winners' circle. Congratulations, dear! Love you, Carolyn

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 1/17/2011 12:02:00 PM

Congratulations on your win with this wonderful Haiku. I love the line "tumbling like the angry seas". Caryl

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 1/17/2011 11:27:00 AM

I am stopping by today to thank you for your kind comments Annalise. It is always a pleasure to read your wonderful poetry. Love, Carol

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/17/2011 8:10:00 AM

good morning! Annalise, congratulations.. in the contest,,, cool poem,..p.d.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 1/16/2011 6:01:00 PM

this muct be a contest....I see several that have this title. enjoyed reading your work.

Gert W. Knop

Date: 1/16/2011 9:35:00 AM

So well written your Haikus for the contest, Annalise! Best of success!...Gert :)

Daver Austin

Date: 1/16/2011 8:02:00 AM

I don't see Gene Kelly dancing and singing to this downpour. But, Vincent Price? He would love your wonderful, spooky deluge. Love, Dave

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 1/16/2011 7:42:00 AM

Full of feeling Annalise and intensity of motion .. breathtaking lines of dark rain.. good luck in the contest.. am quite sure u will create a great oxymoronic entry too.. good luck my friend with luv.. Happy Sunday... blessings..

Royal Trevino

Date: 1/16/2011 7:13:00 AM

Good luck in the contest =(^.^)= Royal

Wilma Neels

Date: 1/16/2011 6:47:00 AM

Annalise, awesome image evoked with this haiku of yours.. My weekend's been great thanks.. and yours? Good luck for the contest.. love Wilma

John Rhinem

Date: 1/15/2011 10:58:00 PM

Ps. ~ I noticed that I used the word "Always" within "Your Beauties" last flowers fragrant com box my dear; hmmm, maybe it means something like perhaps, "Always" ~ Smile ~

John Rhinem

Date: 1/15/2011 10:54:00 PM

Smile ~ I love the pretty little bird it seems as that "Your Beauty" paints amid the bottom of "Your Treasures Creations;" almost like a signature; "Very Lovely" ~ Also, "Thank You," for Always being "Sooo Beautiful" within "Your Brightness'" sweet coms; "Always A Joy" ~ "My Love & Warmth to 'You Always' &, All You Love, 'Forevermore,'" John! ~ Smile, allow myself to go view but another one of "Your, Splendours 'Magnificent Brushings!'":) ~ On we go....

John Rhinem

Date: 1/15/2011 10:41:00 PM

Smile ~ This makes myself consider the day of "Christ the Messiahs" crucifixtion and the veil of the Temple torn and the earthquake and the darkened skies and, a few Dreams I have had; very reflective poe "My 'Dear, Precious & Priceless Annalise Brigham!!!'" ~ The storm of the century or perhaps, the millenniums; brushed in darker hues to capture the ominous nature of the Powers which be; almost a prophetic feel about its canvas' charcoal black my dear; "Excellently Picturesque" ~ ....Cont:)

Matthew Anish

Date: 1/15/2011 9:04:00 AM

Fine haiku here. You stuck to the 5 7 5 format which is all to the good. Peace and blessings Matthew Anish

Eamon Duffin

Date: 1/15/2011 7:29:00 AM

Best of luck in the contest Annalise, with those expressive pieces. Eamon

James Fraser

Date: 1/15/2011 5:04:00 AM

Annalise, you've just captured one of the top spots in my eyes with this Haiku gem. It reads as if I'm watching a complete storm being created, emerging and hitting with it's mighty power. Double smiles for this one. Have a wonderful weekend....:):)