Dark Paradise

As we departed for a long journey,
My heart punned with jocundity,

Had heard a lot about its beauty,
But didn’t know, will ‘be welcomed so haughtily,

As I propelled on non-native soil,
It seemed so preposterously royal,

Still there, ah I missed my home,
Oh where I could fearlessly roam,
		
Where the noise of rickshaws,
It seems so soothing the way it draws!

Where we wait for that oily heavy breakfast,
While licking my fingers I bet! I in contrast!
They pour so oil in them that would‘ve surpassed
The oil in deep ocean … that America cast!

They call east is submerged into Spirituality’s aptness
No but it is more traditional I say, tooting my profoundness!

Here nobody would be bothered if found felonious,
But if disobeyed family, would be considered vicious.

I’m telling you about the preciousness of my land,
About the norms people engulf, in my homeland,

We gather now and then to celebrate,
The loves we give each other, make us grate,

In my home, neighbors are never left alone,
Such a hospitality inn! Greeted as are our own

Girls wear the shirts, better shawled,
Which west calls modest but I say,
These are the values, in which they are mold,
These are our norms practiced since Islam borne!

Please don’t turn over from its today’s view
it still is the paradise though  dark, I construe!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 8/30/2014 1:07:00 AM
I have viewed your several poems and I cannot stop my self to thumb up for you.This poem must be published in any Pakistani Mag, this is the best poem depicting our ethnicity our norms .Hina You write wonderful Your words are so enchanting that Let me inside of this verses and I felt bewitched by your words.Love to see you write more...a.o.a
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Hina Nasir
Date: 8/30/2014 8:51:00 AM
W.O.A ... woww ...thankyouso much ..you know how pleasing it is to be commented on any writing piece of yours..where we live around the people who dont understand any poetic piece...really your words made my day ..thanks alot :-)
Date: 7/26/2014 6:32:00 PM
A great piece of work Hina to describe East and Eastern values :) :) Liked it :)
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Date: 7/27/2014 8:14:00 AM
Tnx saba:-P :-D
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