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dangled spangles

a lot of ratatat when you hammer 
but ill-fated by design
you nail the buffeting clamour 
but slow news filler not main headline

jealousynonsenseperspectivevanitygrook

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Angela Elias

April 22, 2026 at 4:24 AM

I enjoyed reading dangled spangles! Very creative writing. Well done!

Laurentine G

April 22, 2026 at 6:33 AM

Thank you Angela - I threw myself into the idea of alternative jelly against the wall ideas lol. Thanks for the kind words :)

Tania Kitchin

April 22, 2026 at 4:10 AM

LG, a great poem, well done. Enjoyed " you nail the buffeting clamour". Congratulations on your winning placement.

Laurentine G

April 22, 2026 at 6:32 AM

I had the most fun with creating the unusual expressions - the form was so tricky that it tied me in knots though :) thanks for picking out a favourite line - makes the effort seem worth expanding :)

Florence Bondarenko

April 4, 2026 at 5:11 PM

Complex, I enjoy it! I made my attempt at a grook but it failed. Pretty difficult form.

Laurentine G

April 22, 2026 at 6:31 AM

Thanks Florence - they are tricky! I laboured so much over the last line. Think this will be my one and only grook - glad you enjoyed it :)

Lin Lane

April 3, 2026 at 4:08 PM

Slow news day? Keep em guessing, LG. I’d prefer reading much ado about nothing then the gibberish that oozes from T-rump. Sick of all the negative headlines. I don’t write grooks anymore.

Laurentine G

April 3, 2026 at 11:13 PM

Just navigating airports - there are a lot of things written that can affect us but think I'm of the mind just to tune out now. Thanks for your comment

David Kavanagh

April 3, 2026 at 12:46 PM

This one is certainly a little puzzling LG, I’m guessing a nagging jealousy is trying to hammer away, but it doesn’t guarantee any breakthrough, hence it/they will just remain a mere background noise, beautifully written and expressed, pretty deep too! Cheers David

Laurentine G

April 3, 2026 at 1:16 PM

Haha I let myself muse on the nailing jelly to the wall idea and got the word ratatat (hmm I might add an extra tat..) who thought jelly/jealousy would have sound effects! Thank you for stopping by to comment - the grook is a tricky form but attempting it resulted in something interesting at least :)