Dandelion

Nimbus on the stalk, Adorned by white...wavy seeds; Peeled off by the wind.

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Sajdah Al-Riyami

Date: 5/19/2009 6:13:00 AM

"peeled off by the wind" . I am betting you are the only person that had described it that way.Love it:)

Kat Crane

Date: 5/10/2009 11:41:00 AM

Whenever I think of dandelions, I always remember chasing the seeds as a child, and carrying them so carefully so as not to knock the 'fluff' off. Kat x

Tyler Martin

Date: 5/1/2009 6:05:00 PM

My son likes to blow the seeds off of them. Nice work.

Charlene Bird

Date: 4/30/2009 9:46:00 AM

This is lovely Raul!

Diane Christian

Date: 4/29/2009 12:53:00 PM

aww sweet, its funny when we are as kids and like to blow the seeds of the dandelions, my children like it and I showed a little boy in nursery as he is new in Uk, we used to say what time is it them blow and count 1 2 3 untill no seeds were left so much fun, a great write, thanks for your kind comments God bless you from diane

James Fraser

Date: 4/29/2009 12:43:00 PM

Reminds of when i was younger, purely to blow the fluff and seeds, nice write, James

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 4/28/2009 11:28:00 PM

You sure have the HAIKU form off to a fine art my friend! Well don indeed!! Best wishes, Keith

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/28/2009 3:29:00 PM

You have truly mastered this verse form, Raul. Each one you write scores a home run!

James Marshall Goff

Date: 4/28/2009 2:03:00 PM

pure haiku fun! Raul! love it...Jim

Jim Wilson

Date: 4/28/2009 11:48:00 AM

I appreciate the way the last line puts the scene into motion. Thanks.

Jay Loveless

Date: 4/28/2009 11:41:00 AM

Interesting nice job though oh and if you wanna check that out its not hard to find its "named" finished finnaly..now what to name it lol

Darleen Bilyeu

Date: 4/28/2009 11:04:00 AM

great!!! i love the last line!!!

Laurie Ginn

Date: 4/28/2009 10:19:00 AM

I can't stand them however they have a soft spot in my heart as well. They are usually some of the first flowers kids pick for their moms. If you can separate them from their seed capabilities they are quite a happy sort of flower and the the white globes aren't bad either. Your title drew me in

Christopher Higgins

Date: 4/28/2009 9:54:00 AM

Brilliant again my friend...the last two lines are perfection.