Just That Archaic Poet Poet Rhyme

Damn You, Eve

Mourn my loss of innocence; the Queen of 
Love, and I her prince. Dance, we dance, all 
the way to Heaven- born of grief, and the 
things I have written...And dare I ask, or 
merely inquire, on who doth Love me, and who 
is a liar? Just say my name, old curse of 
shame, cloaked in dark, and murky colors 
No skies to fly, no seas to sail, no land on 
which to keep my Lovers
All too silent, this lonely night;
No choice to choose, no grounds to fight 
These pleading words, and Fools in herds-
marching to the Ends of the Earth 
People I loath, and you were told: I do wish 
Eve hadn't given birth...

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Debbie Guzzi December 17, 2013 at 3:56 PM Honey are you home ;) [Lucy said to Dezi] Just That Archaic Poet December 17, 2013 at 4:05 PM Don't get me started, Debbie; I love me some Lucy! ;)

Debbie Guzzi December 12, 2013 at 8:57 AM An interesting verse & concepts. Light & Love Just That Archaic Poet December 17, 2013 at 11:42 AM Many thanks, Debbie :)

Richard Lamoureux November 12, 2013 at 7:41 AM I enjoyed rereading this one after reading the winning poem in your contest. Just That Archaic Poet November 12, 2013 at 8:19 AM Glad you enjoyed, my friend :)

Suzanne Delaney October 31, 2013 at 1:56 AM If Adam could talk....interesting piece. It flows so well but the blame ..oh the blame.... yet I detect a hint of his own regret, deep in the lines. Is this where our nostalgia for gardens began? SuZ Just That Archaic Poet October 31, 2013 at 8:37 AM Thanks for the read and review SuZ! It may very well have ;)

Cole Banner October 30, 2013 at 7:32 AM Nice flow... Just That Archaic Poet October 30, 2013 at 8:06 AM Thanks for visiting and review, Cole :)

James Marshall Goff October 25, 2013 at 9:07 PM Again...smooth dude! With cool undertones! Just That Archaic Poet October 26, 2013 at 6:27 AM I appreciate the read and reply, Jimbo! :)

Charmaine Chircop October 25, 2013 at 5:00 PM This poem has so much depth in it..Its as if blaming Eve for our existence.To be born out of grief and face the loniliness of nights..yet nights won t all be lonely..nor days too cold..and grief will birth its joy..that is every human breathing on this milky way..Excellent rhyme Just That Archaic Poet October 26, 2013 at 6:26 AM Thanks so much for stopping by and for the read and review, Charmain; I truly appreciate it :)

Joseph Matose October 25, 2013 at 6:17 AM Archaic, you churned another GOOD one. Though not your famed style, it sounds great. Thanks. Friend, JM Just That Archaic Poet October 25, 2013 at 7:04 AM This is an older piece and decided to leave it the way I originally wrote it; it adds a little variety I think. Thanks, JM! :)

Robin Davis October 24, 2013 at 1:28 PM Chan This is a very intense write. You give the reader something to think. The way it is written keeps us interested all the way through. Great job my friend Hugs Thanks for the comment on my Scared of Life poem. Glad you liked it Just That Archaic Poet October 24, 2013 at 1:41 PM I adore your work, hon; you know you can count me a fan, always. Thanks for the review <3

Richard Lamoureux October 24, 2013 at 9:45 AM Fantastic thought provoking and emotional piece. Just That Archaic Poet October 24, 2013 at 10:33 AM Thanks for making me smile, Richard :)

Mustapha Mohammed October 24, 2013 at 6:03 AM Thought provoking piece. You have given me a different perspective. Loved it. Just That Archaic Poet October 24, 2013 at 9:22 AM Many thanks, my friend :)

John Posey October 23, 2013 at 5:15 PM Thought provoking and the source of many quarrels through the years... Adam told God Almighty, "It was this woman you gave me..... She made me do it" (paraphrased)....I look at that as the first 'copout' --- There's blame enough to go around..... Nice write, sweetheart.... Jake Just That Archaic Poet October 24, 2013 at 9:21 AM Thanks for the review, John! ;)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri October 22, 2013 at 12:20 AM Woah mindblowing poem esp d endin! But i sure enjoyd dis kind of in angst poem so splendid n uniquely penned! Just That Archaic Poet October 23, 2013 at 6:58 AM Thank you S.! :)

Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday October 19, 2013 at 6:49 PM Hey, Archaic, it reminds me so sweet souvenirs! My son,, when he was a little boy, used to weep and say really angrily "I hate Adam and Eve!" whenever he had to come to me because he disobeyed and wanted to apologize! And he was so sad and so unhappy to do wrong! (He had learned from sunday school that we inherited sin from the originating couple! Couldn't they keep quiet!!!!) Fortunately, he grew up learning the whole story... Just That Archaic Poet October 23, 2013 at 6:59 AM lol thanks for the amusing anecdote, V, and thanks for the review :)

Karen Anglesey October 19, 2013 at 11:35 AM Exceptional and so thought provoking. But what if she had not ? Just That Archaic Poet October 19, 2013 at 11:41 AM Then none of us would be here right now lol SoupMailed you ;) <3

Debbie Duncan October 18, 2013 at 12:15 AM Oh, I love this, such intrigue to the very end ;} Just That Archaic Poet October 18, 2013 at 10:16 AM Many thanks, Debbie; I appreciate the read and review :)