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Damn You, Eve

Mourn my loss of innocence; the Queen of 
Love, and I her prince. Dance, we dance, all 
the way to Heaven- born of grief, and the 
things I have written...And dare I ask, or 
merely inquire, on who doth Love me, and who 
is a liar? Just say my name, old curse of 
shame, cloaked in dark, and murky colors 
No skies to fly, no seas to sail, no land on 
which to keep my Lovers
All too silent, this lonely night;
No choice to choose, no grounds to fight 
These pleading words, and Fools in herds-
marching to the Ends of the Earth 
People I loath, and you were told: I do wish 
Eve hadn't given birth...

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Debbie Guzzi Date: 12/17/2013 3:56:00 PM Honey are you home ;) [Lucy said to Dezi] Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/17/2013 4:05:00 PM Don't get me started, Debbie; I love me some Lucy! ;)

Debbie Guzzi Date: 12/12/2013 8:57:00 AM An interesting verse & concepts. Light & Love Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 12/17/2013 11:42:00 AM Many thanks, Debbie :)

Richard Lamoureux Date: 11/12/2013 7:41:00 AM I enjoyed rereading this one after reading the winning poem in your contest. Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 11/12/2013 8:19:00 AM Glad you enjoyed, my friend :)

Suzanne Delaney Date: 10/31/2013 1:56:00 AM If Adam could talk....interesting piece. It flows so well but the blame ..oh the blame.... yet I detect a hint of his own regret, deep in the lines. Is this where our nostalgia for gardens began? SuZ Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/31/2013 8:37:00 AM Thanks for the read and review SuZ! It may very well have ;)

Cole Banner Date: 10/30/2013 7:32:00 AM Nice flow... Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/30/2013 8:06:00 AM Thanks for visiting and review, Cole :)

James Marshall Goff Date: 10/25/2013 9:07:00 PM Again...smooth dude! With cool undertones! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/26/2013 6:27:00 AM I appreciate the read and reply, Jimbo! :)

Charmaine Chircop Date: 10/25/2013 5:00:00 PM This poem has so much depth in it..Its as if blaming Eve for our existence.To be born out of grief and face the loniliness of nights..yet nights won t all be lonely..nor days too cold..and grief will birth its joy..that is every human breathing on this milky way..Excellent rhyme Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/26/2013 6:26:00 AM Thanks so much for stopping by and for the read and review, Charmain; I truly appreciate it :)

Joseph Matose Date: 10/25/2013 6:17:00 AM Archaic, you churned another GOOD one. Though not your famed style, it sounds great. Thanks. Friend, JM Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/25/2013 7:04:00 AM This is an older piece and decided to leave it the way I originally wrote it; it adds a little variety I think. Thanks, JM! :)

Robin Davis Date: 10/24/2013 1:28:00 PM Chan This is a very intense write. You give the reader something to think. The way it is written keeps us interested all the way through. Great job my friend Hugs Thanks for the comment on my Scared of Life poem. Glad you liked it Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/24/2013 1:41:00 PM I adore your work, hon; you know you can count me a fan, always. Thanks for the review <3

Richard Lamoureux Date: 10/24/2013 9:45:00 AM Fantastic thought provoking and emotional piece. Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/24/2013 10:33:00 AM Thanks for making me smile, Richard :)

Mustapha Mohammed Date: 10/24/2013 6:03:00 AM Thought provoking piece. You have given me a different perspective. Loved it. Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/24/2013 9:22:00 AM Many thanks, my friend :)

John Posey Date: 10/23/2013 5:15:00 PM Thought provoking and the source of many quarrels through the years... Adam told God Almighty, "It was this woman you gave me..... She made me do it" (paraphrased)....I look at that as the first 'copout' --- There's blame enough to go around..... Nice write, sweetheart.... Jake Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/24/2013 9:21:00 AM Thanks for the review, John! ;)

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri Date: 10/22/2013 12:20:00 AM Woah mindblowing poem esp d endin! But i sure enjoyd dis kind of in angst poem so splendid n uniquely penned! Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/23/2013 6:58:00 AM Thank you S.! :)

Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday Date: 10/19/2013 6:49:00 PM Hey, Archaic, it reminds me so sweet souvenirs! My son,, when he was a little boy, used to weep and say really angrily "I hate Adam and Eve!" whenever he had to come to me because he disobeyed and wanted to apologize! And he was so sad and so unhappy to do wrong! (He had learned from sunday school that we inherited sin from the originating couple! Couldn't they keep quiet!!!!) Fortunately, he grew up learning the whole story... Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/23/2013 6:59:00 AM lol thanks for the amusing anecdote, V, and thanks for the review :)

Karen Anglesey Date: 10/19/2013 11:35:00 AM Exceptional and so thought provoking. But what if she had not ? Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/19/2013 11:41:00 AM Then none of us would be here right now lol SoupMailed you ;) <3

Debbie Duncan Date: 10/18/2013 12:15:00 AM Oh, I love this, such intrigue to the very end ;} Login to Reply Just That Archaic Poet Date: 10/18/2013 10:16:00 AM Many thanks, Debbie; I appreciate the read and review :)