Dad

He has gone away... When I look for him I see... Nothing but green grass.

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John Freeman

Date: 10/11/2009 5:24:00 PM

Green grass on the grave, I assume, but you will see him again, one day Ashlee. Sincerely, Moses

Edward Orozco

Date: 10/2/2009 8:43:00 PM

Amazing piece here! Makes you shiver - ed

Olajide Adelana

Date: 10/2/2009 6:20:00 AM

this poem is so damn creepy, scary when I got to the third line....thats so interesting...this poem goes to my favorite, I LOVE IT

Ashlee Tilford

Date: 10/1/2009 5:23:00 AM

Thanks to you all! This haiku means a great deal to me, what it symbolizes.....and what it makes the reader feel. Yes, fewer words can sometimes deliver a much more meaningful message. In this case, the goal was to make the readers mind jump around, only quickly to come to a very harsh, cold reality. Glad you all enjoyed.

Jay Smith

Date: 9/30/2009 12:18:00 PM

it's so sad... Sometimes fewer words is an amazing format. good job Ashlee....

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 9/30/2009 9:18:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup Ashlee. I am so sorry for your loss.I also wish you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

P Sheart

Date: 9/30/2009 7:04:00 AM

Hi Ashly A heartfelt Haiku. Ah yes, but you feel so much of him inside of you. Keep him alive hun. Truly enjoyed this amazing Haiku. You keep writing I'll keep reading. Thanks for sharing. Love Light Truth Patricia