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I remember - WHEN
We first kissed, - YOUR
Sweet lips plunged me into your - HEART’S
Deepest pool - ON
Into your embrace of - FIRE
Breathless dizzy for air - SMOKE
Burning and swirling - GETS
Me oblivious to your heart - IN
Ways that lost me - YOUR
Precious look of love from your - EYES

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Kaye Locke

Date: 3/9/2010 2:25:00 PM

I've never seen this type of poem before Thomas, very clever, and sweet too. K

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/5/2010 2:35:00 PM

this was a very romantic one, Thomas. Write on!!

Jared Pickett

Date: 3/3/2010 9:31:00 AM

Excellent write Thomas... Keep up the good work....:JP}

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/2/2010 6:12:00 PM

Dear Thomas, Sincere Congratulations on YOUR Well Deserved Win in Dane Ann's First Ever " End Line Word " Form Contest YOU have done a Great Job Writing this Form The Body of the POEM is the End LINE theme As the Origin of this Form was meant to be Superb Pen Carolyn Devonshire told me about this POEM but I could not Find YOU on Site otherwise I would Have Already Commented Thank-YOU for YOUR Support and Participation in Dane and My Attempt To Create this New Form of POETRY YOUR Liege ALWAYS HG

Jimmy Anderson

Date: 3/2/2010 1:19:00 PM

Hey Thomas, Congratulations on your win in the contest! I've asked Audrey to post these comments on my behalf. ...Jimmy

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/2/2010 11:10:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Dane Ann's contest Thomas. Love, Carol

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 3/2/2010 9:58:00 AM

I really liked this poem a lot, Thomas. The end line was most wise. This contest was so difficult to judge. There are a lot of good poets on here, including you. Soup mail! (Click "My Soup Mail" from the menu to read mil sent to you. Click the soup bowl beside a poet's name to initiate soup mail. I hope you enjoy the site.) Lovingly, Dane Ann

Noel Villarosa

Date: 3/2/2010 1:17:00 AM

Fit to be a winner, Thomas. Congratulations on you win. (^_^) Noel.

Caroline Cécile Delacroix

Date: 3/1/2010 10:17:00 PM

OOh how nice! Like the song. Congrats on your win in the contest. Best wishes, Caroline.

John Freeman

Date: 3/1/2010 5:26:00 PM

Congratulations on your win Thomas. Agape, Moses

Date: 3/1/2010 5:25:00 PM

You have me smiling with this one. Sounds like love to me. Congratulations on being one of the winners in Dane Ann's contest. Enjoy your success. Keep on writing. Karen

Marty Owens

Date: 3/1/2010 4:52:00 PM

Congratulations on your win...enjoyed....Marty

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 3/1/2010 4:29:00 PM

Congrats Thomas on your winning poem and placement in the first ever End Line Word contest.. a great message with lovely lines of sentiment and a wonderful win for u to enjoy..luv.. Linda-Marie..

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/1/2010 2:47:00 PM

Congratulations on your success in the contest.

John Patrick Robbins Aka Gonzo

Date: 2/26/2010 2:40:00 PM

Really clever write really like the style very quick and slick great job brother keep writting

Daver Austin

Date: 2/26/2010 6:43:00 AM

You talk of one of the greatest songs written in the 20th Century. I first heard it when I was four years old and couldn't go to sleep for thinking about it. I'm going to enjoy reading your stuff mucho. Love, daver

Iolanda Scripca

Date: 2/25/2010 6:34:00 PM

Welcome to PoetrySoup, dear Thomas. May you share your poetry with us for years to come :) Nice End Line poem. Love, Iolanda

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 2/25/2010 4:41:00 PM

Cool End Line Word poetry Thomas.. I do remember that tune very well.. a classic song... a great attempt on this new form that has become the rage on the Soup.. must let Dane Ann and HGarvey Daniel Esquire know ..they are keeping a list of poets and poems used to promote their new form of poetry... enjoyed ..luv.. "Sweetheart"

James Fraser

Date: 2/25/2010 1:56:00 PM

A delight of verse Thomas, dreamy and loving >> James

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 2/25/2010 1:31:00 PM

By all means, enter this in Dane Ann's end-line word contest. I think she'll like it. Glad to see you posting. Welcome to Poetry Soup, Tom.

Joanna Smith

Date: 2/25/2010 10:43:00 AM

this poem was very beautiful i loved it, it seemed heartfelt and romantic, and i think it would be a great entry for the poetry contest! great write here thomas! Jo

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 2/24/2010 11:02:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your poetry today Thomas. Please keep writing and sharing with us here at PoetrySoup. Wishing you the best should you enter this poem in the contest. Love, Carol