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Crystal Ball

The reading was awesome, but left him in fear.
Fortune Teller's Crystal Ball said "Face your face".
So he checked in the mirror from ear to ear.
The wrinkles were one thing he'd like to erase.

Otherwise, the contours were handsome and strong,
But he worried over Fortune's eerie tell.
He oft wondered 'to whose face does mine belong?'
Though his talents showed him that he would excel.

Passing a store window, his visage was clear,
But a ghostly image followed this other.
He turned face to face and confronted his fear.
The image spoke, "You must be my twin brother".

Copyright © Hilda Greenhough | Year Posted 2024

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David Crandall Date: 11/17/2024 6:50:00 PM Interesting idea Hilda, looking in the mirror and seeing a twin brother! Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/17/2024 7:37:00 PM Lol. You mean the older twin brother. Mirrors tell the truth. Many thanks for your comment.

Gershon Wolf Date: 11/12/2024 3:53:00 PM Love the ending, Hilda -- and the whole poem. Very entertaining -- and enlightening! :) Gershon Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/12/2024 5:04:00 PM Thank you. I didn't have an ending until it presented itself at the last line.

David Fisher Date: 11/10/2024 3:59:00 PM I like this, and you don't typically see a man trusting a crystal ball; but he faced it anyways. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/10/2024 4:51:00 PM Thanks for reading my poem. I'm glad to hear from you again.

Jay Moore Date: 11/10/2024 6:52:00 AM Very entertaining. Took me down several avenues. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/10/2024 7:00:00 AM A good point. Crystal balls tend to open avenues. Thank you for reading my poem.

Hiya Sharma Date: 11/10/2024 5:35:00 AM Oh wow, this is such a spectacular and clever piece of writing dear Hilda! It teleported me to a world of eerie crystal balls which forecast the forthcoming moments in an unpredictable way. You really nailed the storytelling aspect here! And it's quite relatable in real life as we don't know what fate might unfold for us... brilliantly done ~ loved reading your words, sweet soul.. sending you light & best wishes always. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/10/2024 6:58:00 AM Thank you for the sweet compliment. I've only seen a crystal ball once. It was in a museum. I didn't see it do anything as I walked by. Retired, I presume.

Deb M Date: 11/9/2024 7:45:00 PM Brilliant and clever poem Hilda....with a very haunting ending!! Debx Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/9/2024 8:01:00 PM Thank you.

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 11/8/2024 12:08:00 PM - A creepy poem, Hilda :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/9/2024 4:27:00 AM I'm glad you liked it. Thank you.

Panagiota Romios Date: 11/1/2024 11:54:00 AM Fascinating write, Hilda. I love it…Pangie Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/1/2024 7:20:00 PM Thank you.a crystal ball always seems Halloween appropriate.

Joe Dimino Date: 11/1/2024 11:26:00 AM Wow! The demon in the mirror...an illusion, or honest refection? A Halloween spectacular! Well done. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/1/2024 7:19:00 PM Anything can happen on Halloween. It could be a ghost. My mind was thinking of a scary prediction that turns out to be a brother separated at birth.but I like your story better.

Michael Tor Date: 11/1/2024 12:12:00 AM Shocking and scary ending Hilda very clever piece you have written. Goes well with the Halloween theme. Thanks for sharing... Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/1/2024 6:30:00 AM It was written for the Halloween holiday. I guess it works if it scared you. Thanks for reading.

Jan Allison Date: 10/31/2024 4:55:00 PM ooh so creepy Hilda, love the twist at the end! hugs Jan xx Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 11/1/2024 6:28:00 AM Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

Mike Bayles Date: 10/28/2024 7:09:00 AM A haunting poem. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/28/2024 4:38:00 PM Thank you. It might be since he had never known his twin before. I hope it works out.

Kim Rodrigues Date: 10/26/2024 8:11:00 PM The ghost was his twin. That would be startling. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/26/2024 8:29:00 PM Thanks. I like your twist to the story. The crystal ball was right.

Karen Jones Date: 10/21/2024 10:48:00 PM Spooky end and a fun read! It engages the reading until the very end! I like it! It should’ve been potw! Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/22/2024 7:20:00 AM Thank you. I'm aiming for scary. I have sacrificed awards for expressing my free speech.

Zyrool Gifford Date: 10/21/2024 10:04:00 PM Beautifully done , Hilda. It flowed so smoothly, love the ending too. Stay Blessed my friend. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/22/2024 7:18:00 AM Thank you for liking my poem. .I smile.

Maria Williams Date: 10/19/2024 9:23:00 PM Oh that was a good ending after all his fears - meeting his twin brother. Well written Hilda. Maria Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/20/2024 2:23:00 AM Thank you. Best wishes to you.

Evelyn Judy Buehler Date: 10/18/2024 8:00:00 PM I love a good story, and this one is awesome, Hilda! I loved the surprise ending. Nicely written! Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/18/2024 9:02:00 PM I'm thrilled that you like it. Thank you very much.

Panagiota Romios Date: 10/18/2024 9:48:00 AM Well done, Hilda. Pangie Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/18/2024 11:25:00 AM Thank you. Enjoy the nice day today.

Joseph May Date: 10/18/2024 2:36:00 AM A crystal ball sees double, Nicely penned Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/18/2024 6:11:00 AM Thank you.

Paige Hind Date: 10/17/2024 12:46:00 PM Hmmmm, this is interesting and very clever and smart- awesome write :) Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/17/2024 5:10:00 PM Thank you for your encouraging comment. Enjoy the week.

Mike Bayles Date: 10/16/2024 7:27:00 PM The rhyme is good, and this poem flows well. I like the twist at the ending. Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/17/2024 1:08:00 AM Thank you. The twist was that the crystal ball had no bad warning, only a happy reunion of of twins.

Daniel Henry Rodgers Date: 10/16/2024 3:06:00 PM Dear Heidi, I enjoyed reading your mini-story, moving from the fortune-telling session through self-examination to a surprising encounter. Your well-inked narrative arc kept me engaged with the twist in the final lines. Excellent! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/16/2024 6:04:00 PM Thank you from me, Hilda. I hope it has a Halloween style. I am looking forward to Oct. 31. I'll perhaps watch a few horror movies.

Alesia Leach Date: 10/16/2024 2:53:00 PM Very eerie well written Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/16/2024 5:59:00 PM Thank you. It just came to me. I didn't even need to use the spell checker. Lol.

Joe Dimino Date: 10/16/2024 5:24:00 AM Spooky! ‘There Are More Things in Heaven and Earth, Horatio’ -- 'quote the raven, Never More'" -- Love it! Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/16/2024 7:34:00 AM Thank you for the thumbs up. Spooky is about to begin -October 31.

Ink Empress Date: 10/15/2024 11:33:00 PM Dear sweet hilda, quite fitting for halloween right now, this poem, i love it, and i smiled as i read “ The wrinkles were one thing he'd like to erase.” and also i love the way your ending goes, twin brother! Ooh! Fortune tellers can be freaky sometimes, i never really believe in them, but i do believe in manifestations and i sometimes worry some of their words might come true cus words become things often. I enjoyed reading you after a long time! Sending you light always! Login to Reply Hilda Greenhough Date: 10/16/2024 12:31:00 AM I'm very happy that you liked this poem. I like the word manifestation. I will practice it, tomorrow I'll be rich. Lol.

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