Hilda Greenhough Poet Rhyme

Crystal Ball

The reading was awesome, but left him in fear.
Fortune Teller's Crystal Ball said "Face your face".
So he checked in the mirror from ear to ear.
The wrinkles were one thing he'd like to erase.

Otherwise, the contours were handsome and strong,
But he worried over Fortune's eerie tell.
He oft wondered 'to whose face does mine belong?'
Though his talents showed him that he would excel.

Passing a store window, his visage was clear,
But a ghostly image followed this other.
He turned face to face and confronted his fear.
The image spoke, "You must be my twin brother".

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David Crandall November 17, 2024 at 6:50 PM Interesting idea Hilda, looking in the mirror and seeing a twin brother! Hilda Greenhough November 17, 2024 at 7:37 PM Lol. You mean the older twin brother. Mirrors tell the truth. Many thanks for your comment.

Gershon Wolf November 12, 2024 at 3:53 PM Love the ending, Hilda -- and the whole poem. Very entertaining -- and enlightening! :) Gershon Hilda Greenhough November 12, 2024 at 5:04 PM Thank you. I didn't have an ending until it presented itself at the last line.

David Fisher November 10, 2024 at 3:59 PM I like this, and you don't typically see a man trusting a crystal ball; but he faced it anyways. Hilda Greenhough November 10, 2024 at 4:51 PM Thanks for reading my poem. I'm glad to hear from you again.

Jay Moore November 10, 2024 at 6:52 AM Very entertaining. Took me down several avenues. Hilda Greenhough November 10, 2024 at 7:00 AM A good point. Crystal balls tend to open avenues. Thank you for reading my poem.

Hiya Sharma November 10, 2024 at 5:35 AM Oh wow, this is such a spectacular and clever piece of writing dear Hilda! It teleported me to a world of eerie crystal balls which forecast the forthcoming moments in an unpredictable way. You really nailed the storytelling aspect here! And it's quite relatable in real life as we don't know what fate might unfold for us... brilliantly done ~ loved reading your words, sweet soul.. sending you light & best wishes always. Hilda Greenhough November 10, 2024 at 6:58 AM Thank you for the sweet compliment. I've only seen a crystal ball once. It was in a museum. I didn't see it do anything as I walked by. Retired, I presume.

Deb M November 9, 2024 at 7:45 PM Brilliant and clever poem Hilda....with a very haunting ending!! Debx Hilda Greenhough November 9, 2024 at 8:01 PM Thank you.

Anne-Lise Andresen November 8, 2024 at 12:08 PM - A creepy poem, Hilda :) - Happy weekend :) - hugs Hilda Greenhough November 9, 2024 at 4:27 AM I'm glad you liked it. Thank you.

Panagiota Romios November 1, 2024 at 11:54 AM Fascinating write, Hilda. I love it…Pangie Hilda Greenhough November 1, 2024 at 7:20 PM Thank you.a crystal ball always seems Halloween appropriate.

Joseph P. DiMino November 1, 2024 at 11:26 AM Wow! The demon in the mirror...an illusion, or honest refection? A Halloween spectacular! Well done. Hilda Greenhough November 1, 2024 at 7:19 PM Anything can happen on Halloween. It could be a ghost. My mind was thinking of a scary prediction that turns out to be a brother separated at birth.but I like your story better.

Michael Tor November 1, 2024 at 12:12 AM Shocking and scary ending Hilda very clever piece you have written. Goes well with the Halloween theme. Thanks for sharing... Hilda Greenhough November 1, 2024 at 6:30 AM It was written for the Halloween holiday. I guess it works if it scared you. Thanks for reading.

Jan Allison October 31, 2024 at 4:55 PM ooh so creepy Hilda, love the twist at the end! hugs Jan xx Hilda Greenhough November 1, 2024 at 6:28 AM Thank you. Glad you enjoyed it.

Mike Bayles October 28, 2024 at 7:09 AM A haunting poem. Hilda Greenhough October 28, 2024 at 4:38 PM Thank you. It might be since he had never known his twin before. I hope it works out.

Kim Rodrigues October 26, 2024 at 8:11 PM The ghost was his twin. That would be startling. Hilda Greenhough October 26, 2024 at 8:29 PM Thanks. I like your twist to the story. The crystal ball was right.

Karen Jones October 21, 2024 at 10:48 PM Spooky end and a fun read! It engages the reading until the very end! I like it! It should’ve been potw! Hilda Greenhough October 22, 2024 at 7:20 AM Thank you. I'm aiming for scary. I have sacrificed awards for expressing my free speech.

Zyrool Gifford October 21, 2024 at 10:04 PM Beautifully done , Hilda. It flowed so smoothly, love the ending too. Stay Blessed my friend. Hilda Greenhough October 22, 2024 at 7:18 AM Thank you for liking my poem. .I smile.

Maria Williams October 19, 2024 at 9:23 PM Oh that was a good ending after all his fears - meeting his twin brother. Well written Hilda. Maria Hilda Greenhough October 20, 2024 at 2:23 AM Thank you. Best wishes to you.

Evelyn Judy Buehler October 18, 2024 at 8:00 PM I love a good story, and this one is awesome, Hilda! I loved the surprise ending. Nicely written! Hilda Greenhough October 18, 2024 at 9:02 PM I'm thrilled that you like it. Thank you very much.

Panagiota Romios October 18, 2024 at 9:48 AM Well done, Hilda. Pangie Hilda Greenhough October 18, 2024 at 11:25 AM Thank you. Enjoy the nice day today.

Joseph May October 18, 2024 at 2:36 AM A crystal ball sees double, Nicely penned Hilda Greenhough October 18, 2024 at 6:11 AM Thank you.

Paige Hind October 17, 2024 at 12:46 PM Hmmmm, this is interesting and very clever and smart- awesome write :) Hilda Greenhough October 17, 2024 at 5:10 PM Thank you for your encouraging comment. Enjoy the week.

Mike Bayles October 16, 2024 at 7:27 PM The rhyme is good, and this poem flows well. I like the twist at the ending. Hilda Greenhough October 17, 2024 at 1:08 AM Thank you. The twist was that the crystal ball had no bad warning, only a happy reunion of of twins.

Daniel Henry Rodgers October 16, 2024 at 3:06 PM Dear Heidi, I enjoyed reading your mini-story, moving from the fortune-telling session through self-examination to a surprising encounter. Your well-inked narrative arc kept me engaged with the twist in the final lines. Excellent! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel Hilda Greenhough October 16, 2024 at 6:04 PM Thank you from me, Hilda. I hope it has a Halloween style. I am looking forward to Oct. 31. I'll perhaps watch a few horror movies.

Alesia Leach October 16, 2024 at 2:53 PM Very eerie well written Hilda Greenhough October 16, 2024 at 5:59 PM Thank you. It just came to me. I didn't even need to use the spell checker. Lol.

Joseph P. DiMino October 16, 2024 at 5:24 AM Spooky! ‘There Are More Things in Heaven and Earth, Horatio’ -- 'quote the raven, Never More'" -- Love it! Hilda Greenhough October 16, 2024 at 7:34 AM Thank you for the thumbs up. Spooky is about to begin -October 31.

Ink Empress October 15, 2024 at 11:33 PM Dear sweet hilda, quite fitting for halloween right now, this poem, i love it, and i smiled as i read “ The wrinkles were one thing he'd like to erase.” and also i love the way your ending goes, twin brother! Ooh! Fortune tellers can be freaky sometimes, i never really believe in them, but i do believe in manifestations and i sometimes worry some of their words might come true cus words become things often. I enjoyed reading you after a long time! Sending you light always! Hilda Greenhough October 16, 2024 at 12:31 AM I'm very happy that you liked this poem. I like the word manifestation. I will practice it, tomorrow I'll be rich. Lol.

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