Crush

I was skating on Saturn’s rings, Ice shards tunnelling into my vision Like blistering diamond tears Melting away into a brilliant blue. I was skating on Saturn’s rings, Looked up and saw the mighty giant. It smiled at me through its great eye, decorated with lashes of pure golden beige. I was skating on Saturn’s rings, Is that even possible? I looked towards the Earth. And you were thinking about me.

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Ink Empress

Date: 2/25/2025 8:03:00 AM

There is something very soul stirring about this poem, so well written and flows just seamlessly too! I especially love the lines “ Ice shards tunnelling into my vision Like blistering diamond tears Melting away into a brilliant blu” how creative! Your use of metaphors and descriptive language is truly impressive and worthy of all the accolades! Pleasure reading this! Congratulations on your win. Sending you light always