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Cruel Fate

HE~ He has met her before He knows that Maybe once or twice Yet, where and when he is just not sure SHE~ He is in good spirits today I think he remembers me Yet , yesterday he asked my me name Shouted at me to go away TOGETHER~ Fifty-three years wed A loving , happy marriage Kindred spirits, best friends Now , strangers navigating the unknown instead

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Paul Bell

Date: 6/21/2025 4:54:00 AM

The end of time in many ways. People are living longer, but maybe not better.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/20/2025 9:33:00 AM

Hi Deb powerful poem and such wonderful touching moments, even though we pick up they have dementia, the last line is touching because they are now navigating the unknown, but together. So well crafted and penned, well said dear friend - hugs and blessings Jennifer.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/19/2025 5:36:00 AM

Wow, quite impactful!

Maria Williams

Date: 6/19/2025 4:23:00 AM

Dear Deb, This is so tender and deeply moving. The shift from familiarity to fragility is captured with such grace. The contrast between He, She, and Together paints a quiet heartbreak that so many know too well...Hugs

Gershon Wolf

Date: 6/18/2025 8:43:00 PM

Oy. This hit me like a pinch to the solar plexus, Deb. 53 YEARS. Oy. You might publish this as a VERY effective advertisement for Alzheimer's research. ~ Gershon

Yellow Rose

Date: 6/11/2025 3:44:00 AM

wow! how poignant and well penned. Truly your poem captured the essence of an aging couple (like my own parents) with which dementia or Alzheimer's has taken its toll. Lovely. Yellow Rose

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/29/2025 3:07:00 PM

I feel the sadness. Old age is a lonely place.

Terry Flood

Date: 5/28/2025 4:03:00 PM

Dementia is an awful ailment for everyone it touches. How awful it must be to give your all to someone who doesn’t even remember you. So well described, Deb. Terry

Panagiota Romios

Date: 5/27/2025 9:28:00 PM

Deb I wonder the statistics on thi I simply mean, people see the outside of a retionship. Rarely wii couples air grievances against one another in public,. Nonettheless, love the poem. Best wishes. Your FOF, Pangie xxxx

Joe Dimino

Date: 5/25/2025 6:10:00 AM

Well said; the 53 years of togetherness should be the focus. Best of luck in contest.

Deb M
Date: 5/25/2025 10:01:00 AM

Hi Joe….its not for a contest ha….Debx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 5/24/2025 2:17:00 PM

so sad, but very creatively expressed, deb! wonderful!

Deb M
Date: 5/26/2025 1:05:00 AM

Thankyou Ilene for such a nice comment! Debx

Oliver Mckeithan

Date: 5/24/2025 12:57:00 PM

Poignant Deb. 53 yrs of a great marriage it must break her heart.

Deb M
Date: 5/25/2025 10:01:00 AM

Hi Oliver…thanks so much…Debx

Lin Lane

Date: 5/24/2025 10:46:00 AM

What a heart wrenching situation that must be for everyone.

Deb M
Date: 5/25/2025 10:01:00 AM

Thanks Lin….Debx

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/24/2025 10:34:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your creative "Cruel Fate" write. Life and people change. WOW!!! Fifty-three years wed. Congratulations. Have a great weekend.......

Deb M
Date: 5/24/2025 10:41:00 AM

Thankyou dear Paula....its actually a fiction write! Debx