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Cruel Agony

Cruel agony!! The brazen breath of your holy anticipation… writhing…conniving… I am spent… so, so spent…. Terrified of your superior countenance, I crush these words in the mortar of your eyes closed tight Good eye, black eye…. averting side to side Where is this mess taking me next? Tantalizing fury!! Your fingers clasp about my throat, astonishing the gods on high I have never seen the angels so irresolutely fly! Bite me and let it be over!!! This pain I have inflicted upon you is far beyond my conception The ink being squeezed from me in tasty inception Your teeth sinking in me and pulling….stretching like liquid elastic The less of me makes certain of my love for you—so drastic Your breathing mightier, more intentional, strove in the soles that tread for eons! You have me dancing on your razor-sharp ledge… The sledgehammer waiting for the moment you make your pledge Testify!!! Or die… Cringing, singing, dormant in disparity My words strive so illusively, vainly for clarity Smoothing the edge of your lips— two swords that clash I hasten within the slit to the tongue that dares such confirmation… You are my only, Without you, I am so very lonely.. Look at these tears feverishly fall When truth denies the wretchedness of your livid calls In futile reserve, it seems I have made my mark Misery is central in this looming, squirming dark You devour my mind’s passions until all that remains is yours And for a moment, I allow the rehabilitation of your force AGONY…..cruel AGONY…. Hold onto me, again I have dulled those swords, the entrance to your mouth So that when they pierce me again, I will fall to the earth with no doubt… And you will penetrate me with all of your strength, You will utter your love to me again, Then I will close my eyes in peace, And the gods can again breathe…

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015




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Date: 5/25/2015 9:01:00 PM
A combat for the last taste of love, for agony's worth, and to savor the penetration of your hearts final opening...this is dark passion, hot, physical, fatal and satisfying Laura. I love how neurotic and violent this extreme desire, to hear that heated, sharp utterance of love, to feel it's pounce! "I have never seen the angel's so irresolutely fly..." great line Laura...This poem is a thrill! J.A.B.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/25/2015 9:37:00 PM
Extreme desire indeed, with the hot infliction of so many unbearable pains! Love ya! ~Laura
Date: 5/24/2015 12:05:00 AM
You are ever so amazing Laura. SKAT
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/24/2015 12:51:00 AM
<3 <3 <3 This comment made my night SKAT!Thanks so much love! ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 10:38:00 PM
this is a difficult one for me to understand, Laura. At first I though it was a vampire, but I think it is something metaphorical. the atmosphere is very dark and intense. Some very good imagery in this powerful poem!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:09:00 PM
I will tell you, Andrea, the bite line did invoke vampiric images for me as well - this poem is all over the place, I apologize, just as strong emotions are between two powerful, passionate and extreme people. Thanks for reading this immensely dark composition. You've got it right! <3 ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 9:49:00 PM
Immensely powerful, darkly beautiful write. Have you felt the onslaught of a big wave my friend? Overwhelming, yet one is not afraid because it's so exhilarating as well. That's how I felt with this. Too many fav lines but three really stand out for me "The ink being squeezed from me in tasty inception" and "You devour my mind’s passions until all that remains is yours//And for a moment, I allow the rehabilitation of your force". Justin calls you Gothic Princess, I totally agree! A 7!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:07:00 PM
Kim, you flatter me always with your sweet and clever reviews!! Thank you so so much! ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 6:29:00 PM
YOUR INTENSE WRITING ABSOLUTELY AMAZES ME!!!!! I have not the words to adequately described how utterly impressed by your oh so active and creative mind! I bow to your talents! You are a special lady with an amazing and uncanny ability to express your deepest thoughts! I am honoured to know you and love you and to know you love me is unbelievably special! I love you sweet Laura! Jack xxxxxx
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 7:47:00 PM
Jack, I am so honored to know you as well. Love you too dearest poet. Your words mean the world!!!! ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 6:15:00 PM
WoW!!!! What an interesting piece,so lovely as always, beautiful penned.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:13:00 PM
Interesting and lovely? I am glad! I think it does carry a heavy darkness as weight, though there is something quite magical about atrocious love fights, giving into what truly inflicts in us pain to strengthen our souls.. Agony is phantasmagorical in metaphor to represent how the shocking and new feelings lead to the evolution of our beings, leaving the immortals in awe as well. I wonder if we do surprise such beings when we do something drastic... I'd imagine it is possible. ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 4:52:00 PM
You have written this with a passion that brings out the talent of your poetry... yes.. dark theme, but excellent write #7
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:14:00 PM
Yes, dark theme is right! So glad to have you read Kim! ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 12:36:00 PM
This is dark and morbid in content but strung together with a poets critical eye and flows thick as blood. The shell of dark that surrounds the author’s words acts as a cocoon protecting the writer from the words. Full of emotion that rips into your mind and heart and leaves its mark. Good work...Satan would be amused if not offended by your audacity. Emile. #7
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:17:00 PM
Your compliments make me blush, Emile!!! What a colorful review! I love when you visit my page!!"Satan would be amused if not offended by your audacity." Don't know whether to be flattered by that or not!! Love it, nonetheless.~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 8:41:00 AM
Deep, dark, passionate. Wonderful write. 7 .
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:18:00 PM
Nandita, you're so so sweet. Thank you immensely! ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 7:41:00 AM
What a wondorous piece of writing, you pen has no boundaries. I'm glad I stopped by this morning.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:18:00 PM
Richard, I am glad you stopped by as well! Will be visiting your page soon! <3 ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 7:19:00 AM
What I do love is that the things that are so difficult to deal with must be embraced. I have always thought that everything is life has it good and bad sides. And so, you just express it and deal with it with such beauty and grace. Today, I had plans to do work around the house and to clean up stuff. And now, the day has begun with an art session. You have warmed my heart this morning. It is such a wonderful thing that you sent me a comment. It's led to this meeting of beauty. Thanks!
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:20:00 PM
Yes!!!I agree, Duke!! See, this is why I love your commentary. You understand my work very very well! Art session? You're too sweet! Wow! I am flattered to have your presence here again on my page. No, thank YOU, really. ~Laura
Date: 5/23/2015 3:27:00 AM
The gods are holding their breath. I can feel the turgid fluids of love and hate in this work. I pray your love is never so violent as the raging storm I feel in this work. As always you numb my soul. ~Kilmer
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 5/23/2015 11:21:00 PM
Thanks, Stephen, I will be reading more of your AMAZING verses... you captivate me through your words of wisdom and unique output, and very few people can do that. Love you, and hope all's well! ~Laura

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