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Crows Heckle

Snow drifts in the bones Cold earth absorbs the fallen Crows heckle the wake

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Milton Toran

Date: 7/31/2013 9:29:00 PM

I'm no expert at haiku but I do know that the syllable counts in each line are accurate and that it's a perfect write in regards to nature. Milt

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/7/2013 1:54:00 PM

[snow drifts/ upon the field of bones--crows cackle] 2 parts now you have 3 parts Luke, now you have 3 sentences for haiku you want a frozen moment in time, no complete thoughts,everything open for the reader to see and hear. perhaps you could get 2 haiku out of this image haiku 2 [the ground/absorbs the fallen--snow falls] hope this helps Light & Love

Luke Irwin
Date: 3/19/2013 9:32:00 AM

Ahh yes I see what you're saying . Thanks.