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Cross Country**part 2**

**A Travel East** We pass the Grand Mesa cruising like lightening at 95mph, I feel like a passenger on a toy train. A mountain 11,000 feet above the ground, auburn colored, rock faced cliffs, complimented by a spectacular baby blue sky. Clouds scatter, trying unsuccessfully to cover the rapid sunrise. Blue, Indian orange, and red mix together well with the beauty of the cliff face. Along the base, the Colorado river races. Not quite a rapid, yet swift enough to scare rafters, and small animals. Miniature icebergs travel through a small channel created in the ice of the once wide river. A family of coyotes gather on a patch of solid ice. The young playfully roam, while the adults relax, lick themselves and watch. Deer prance across the terrain, chasing the train. Detained, inside a fence, cattle graze in a group of one hundred or so. A cottage rests along the perimeter where children play. Bundled from head to toe, Snow, thick and heavy. Frosty is created!! Homeward bound!! The ride semi-pleasant, better than the first. The lavatory still with that distinctive musky urine scent. The passenger car seems bigger this time, more spacious. Room for my long legs, and wide enough to accommodate my beer gut. I hear the rantings of an old married couple as they bicker about what time dinner should be reserved for. Beside me, laying awkwardly, an old man snores. Shallow breaths in between, I can hear his heartbeat. Pounding like a heavy percussion solo, his feet propped on his duffel bag below. The lobby car when first entered looked barren. A few passengers sit with books and laptops, others watch as the fast moving terrain passes through the tinted double glass. My cell phone lost battery life and I needed the accommodation of electricity. Occupied, I wait for my turn. From my peripheral I saw her, I could sense her aura. Smell her aroma of Vanilla Musk. Dirty blond hair with red highlights, short but not to short, with a friendly disposition. So, I sparked a conversation, that helped better this expedition. Jared Pickett 3/7/08 Asavvy1

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Date: 6/9/2010 1:41:00 PM
I was sitting here wondering what it would have been like to be on this trip with you. Wonderful description of your trip. Wonderful poem. Goes to my favorites. Love Scarlett
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Date: 2/1/2010 5:43:00 AM
Very nicely written, poem. The trip sounds delightful. The scenery is so easy to visualize by your imagery. It made me want to go back to Wyoming... or even New Mexico. Thanks for sharing. Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 1/27/2010 7:15:00 AM
What amazing things you saw on this journey, Jared -- the icebergs floating, the playful coyotes and the children enjoying the snow near the cottage. The verse on the bathroom cracked me up; there are so many like the one you described. And the people we meet on journeys like these seem to make a lasting impression. "Life is a journey; enjoy the ride!" Great poem that takes the reader on the trip with you. Love, carolyn
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Date: 1/26/2010 3:37:00 PM
very great description of this trip, Jared! Yes sir I took a teip and never left the farm, thanks to you and your cool write! I like it alot and enjoyed much. Stickin it in my favs until I can take a more real ride.Again, Cool Write. Couldnt have asked for a better.Your friend-Robert
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Date: 1/26/2010 5:41:00 AM
SOUP MAIL .. request fulfilled.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 1/25/2010 7:16:00 PM
I love trains and I love the way you describe the ride with room for your legs and the smells...lol Enjoyed the read...Marty
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Date: 1/25/2010 7:07:00 PM
Exciting and descriptive ride Jared... sounds like a fun adventure too... cool words and visuals in your free verse poetry... will there be a part ??? "Sweetheart"
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Date: 1/25/2010 5:43:00 PM
Interesting yarn that you have woven here. Keep the creative imagery flowing. Sara
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Date: 1/25/2010 1:31:00 PM
quite the story.new poem posted.
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